Living On The Edge
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Comment from royowen
One phrase that came to mind is arrogance says it's all powerful and cannot possibly be ovrrruled, which Chief Harrison is behaving like that, a bulletproof tyrant. With a mentality like a hitter or Stalin, good to see that Jake has seen Layla, and Allie is getting her memory back, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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One phrase that came to mind is arrogance says it's all powerful and cannot possibly be ovrrruled, which Chief Harrison is behaving like that, a bulletproof tyrant. With a mentality like a hitter or Stalin, good to see that Jake has seen Layla, and Allie is getting her memory back, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Yes, the Chief is about to get meet his match and get what he deserves. And a little bit of blooming romance in the spring doesn't hurt anyone, right? Thanks so much Roy.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
I love when things start to fall in place. This is great chapter and I can't wait to read more. I have a feeling you don't lack a lot finishing this book. I want to see you getting some of these in print. I know know if you had the agent you'd be famous.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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I love when things start to fall in place. This is great chapter and I can't wait to read more. I have a feeling you don't lack a lot finishing this book. I want to see you getting some of these in print. I know know if you had the agent you'd be famous.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Beth...for the review, the encouragement and making me smile...famous, you say? Probably not, but one can dream.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Hooray! I was hoping Jake could just take Layla but I know you have lots of ends to bring together. Your bad guys are so easy to dislike so it was fun to see how Garth put Harrison in his place.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Hooray! I was hoping Jake could just take Layla but I know you have lots of ends to bring together. Your bad guys are so easy to dislike so it was fun to see how Garth put Harrison in his place.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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And Garth isn't finished with Harrison yet either. Not much more to go, but it's been fun. I posted one chapter and I think the next will be the end. Thanks for sticking it out with me, Helen.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Wonderful chapter and excellent writing. Two romances warming up, and Richard H is about to come a cropper and get what he deserves!
Wendy
Edit: full stop after "he growled and glared at the cowboy"
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Wonderful chapter and excellent writing. Two romances warming up, and Richard H is about to come a cropper and get what he deserves!
Wendy
Edit: full stop after "he growled and glared at the cowboy"
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Darn those little dots get me every time. I get in a hurry when I'm typing and well I goof up. Thanks for catching it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
Someone's in trouble and doesn't realize it yet! Glorious!
I like your two little romances shaping up here.
All looks great!
In the following paragraph exchange, I couldn't get what the response "damn right we did" was in reference to or what he meant. I read it a bunch of times and I just wasn't getting it. It might just be me. But I thought I would ask.
"No, Mr. Harrison, I'm afraid you're mistaken." Garth extended his hand to Harrison as a friendly gesture.
Ignoring Garth's hand, Harrison walked around to his chair and sat. "Damn right we did," he growled and glared at the cowboy
Julie
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Someone's in trouble and doesn't realize it yet! Glorious!
I like your two little romances shaping up here.
All looks great!
In the following paragraph exchange, I couldn't get what the response "damn right we did" was in reference to or what he meant. I read it a bunch of times and I just wasn't getting it. It might just be me. But I thought I would ask.
"No, Mr. Harrison, I'm afraid you're mistaken." Garth extended his hand to Harrison as a friendly gesture.
Ignoring Garth's hand, Harrison walked around to his chair and sat. "Damn right we did," he growled and glared at the cowboy
Julie
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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You were right...I had changed a few passages and forgot to remove something... Thanks for catching it! You're the best!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
I enjoyed the way this chapter shaped up. Harrison gets a taste of Garth Woodman and Layla finds out Jake is alive, and assuring her everything will be over soon. Suspense still exists about how Alyssa will feel when she remembers who she is and learns who Troy is.
You are the true mastermind storyteller who has kept me at my computer for longer periods than I had ever intended. I can't seem to read fast enough, as you leave the reader totally satisfied by answering all the questions and filling in all the gaps. This is my kind of joy reading.
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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I enjoyed the way this chapter shaped up. Harrison gets a taste of Garth Woodman and Layla finds out Jake is alive, and assuring her everything will be over soon. Suspense still exists about how Alyssa will feel when she remembers who she is and learns who Troy is.
You are the true mastermind storyteller who has kept me at my computer for longer periods than I had ever intended. I can't seem to read fast enough, as you leave the reader totally satisfied by answering all the questions and filling in all the gaps. This is my kind of joy reading.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Lorraine. Can you believe the story is about to wrap up? What will we do with ourselves? I posted another chapter and I believe the one I am writing will be the end. Two weeks and a book later... I'm thrilled and happy that you enjoyed it too.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm afraid I'm coming in late here. But what a well written and fast moving story. Clearly, there are many characters and a complex plot in this crime mystery with undercover police work. That you can produce a chapter a day as intricate and flawless as this (I couldn't find one error) is very impressive. Well done! Keep up the excellent work! Debbie
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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I'm afraid I'm coming in late here. But what a well written and fast moving story. Clearly, there are many characters and a complex plot in this crime mystery with undercover police work. That you can produce a chapter a day as intricate and flawless as this (I couldn't find one error) is very impressive. Well done! Keep up the excellent work! Debbie
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for your review and the kind thoughts. Would you believe I got so wrapped in writing that I posted an additional chapter just now. I think this story owns me! LOL Thank you again and Have a wonderful day!
Smiles, Carol
