Cries of life.
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I love your heartfelt poem. I have three children and three grandchildren... they are the best thing in my life. Congratulations on the great grandchild! They are such a blessing.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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I love your heartfelt poem. I have three children and three grandchildren... they are the best thing in my life. Congratulations on the great grandchild! They are such a blessing.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you Gypsy for the the congrats. Yes, life is hard and it's getting harder. I can't imagine how our grandchildren will be able to cope, survive and prosper with out faith. Prayer works miracles but, the timing is God's.
Many reviewers thought 'Cries of life' is a poem and graded it as such. However, it is not a poem, it is a song. Some of lyrics rhyme and some don't. All of the stanzas create a metaphor pointing to the fall of Eden and the path of humankind.
'Sadness hangs over a dark lagoon.' The dark lagoon is fallen Eden.
'And the river shines from a fickle moon.' The river is God given life but the light comes not from Him but from a fickle source. It is not glorifying but can appear so.
Give it another read, or better yet, listen to the song. The MP3 player is located on the upper left hand of the baby's photo.
I will pray for your grandchildren.
All the best, Yard.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Yardier,
This poem doesn't seem to give a good feeling for a good life for your grandchild. Maybe he/she can find her own way to get through the world
in a positive way.
Congratulations on your first grandchild.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great weekend
Joan
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Hi Yardier,
This poem doesn't seem to give a good feeling for a good life for your grandchild. Maybe he/she can find her own way to get through the world
in a positive way.
Congratulations on your first grandchild.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great weekend
Joan
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Joan, for the congrats. Yes, life is hard and it's getting harder. I can't imagine how our grandchildren will be able to cope, survive and prosper with out faith. Prayer works miracles but, the timing is God's.
Many reviewers thought 'Cries of life' is a poem and graded it as such. However, it is not a poem, it is a song. Some of lyrics rhyme and some don't. All of the stanzas create a metaphor pointing to the fall of Eden and the path of humankind.
'Sadness hangs over a dark lagoon.' The dark lagoon is fallen Eden.
'And the river shines from a fickle moon.' The river is God given life but the light comes not from Him but from a fickle source. It is not glorifying but can appear so.
Give it another read, or better yet, listen to the song. The MP3 player is located on the upper left hand of the baby's photo.
All the best, Yard.
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You're welcome, Yard. Thank for the clarification. Isn't every song a poem set to music?
Joan
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High Joan. No, every song is not a poem but, every song, like poems, tell a story. A poem follows a required meter and rhyme, whereas a song is not required to have meter or rhyme. Songs have rhythm, melody and sometimes rhyme within certain stanzas.
Hope this helps, Yard
Comment from karenina
What a beautiful baby and what a meaningful heartfelt, beautiful song!
Congratulations to the best "club" in the world. Grandchildren are the redemption of our souls. We see them and know there is love and purity and hope...and how blessed are we to bear witness to the miracle of
"The cries of life (that) echo down the hall!"
I wish I had a six...but I suspect you're already thanking your lucky stars and God -- so I will simply say I'm saving this to my bookcase so I can listen to you sing again!
Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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What a beautiful baby and what a meaningful heartfelt, beautiful song!
Congratulations to the best "club" in the world. Grandchildren are the redemption of our souls. We see them and know there is love and purity and hope...and how blessed are we to bear witness to the miracle of
"The cries of life (that) echo down the hall!"
I wish I had a six...but I suspect you're already thanking your lucky stars and God -- so I will simply say I'm saving this to my bookcase so I can listen to you sing again!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Karenina! Thank you so much for the congrats and book mark. You are one of two reviewers who realized it was a song. LOL. Not gonna sell many records that way.
We will keep in touch. I have a few other lyrics to post but getting them within FS limited mp3 length is difficult. I may have to go rogue and post on You Tube.
Thanks again for your well wishes and book mark!
Yard.
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If/when you post the n you tube I'd love it if you'd PM the link!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Congratulations on becoming a great grandparent, it is my greatest wish for this to happen to me one day! Life is indeed a long haul and we just need to make the best of the journey and take the good with the bad and make the best of our lives, we only get one shot at it, a fun post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Congratulations on becoming a great grandparent, it is my greatest wish for this to happen to me one day! Life is indeed a long haul and we just need to make the best of the journey and take the good with the bad and make the best of our lives, we only get one shot at it, a fun post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you Dolly, for the congrats. Yes, life is hard and it's getting harder. I can't imagine how our grandchildren will be able to cope, survive and prosper with out faith. Prayer works miracles but, the timing is God's.
Many reviewers thought 'Cries of life' is a poem and graded it as such. However, it is not a poem, it is a song. Some of the lyrics rhyme and some don't. All of the stanzas create a metaphor pointing to the fall of Eden and the path of humankind.
'Sadness hangs over a dark lagoon.' The dark lagoon is fallen Eden.
'And the river shines from a fickle moon.' The river is God given life but the light comes not from Him but from a fickle source. It is not glorifying but can appear so.
Give it another read, or better yet, listen to the song. The MP3 player is located on the upper left hand of the baby's photo.
All the best, Yard.
Comment from gramalot8
This is an interesting viewpoint on life. Can't decide if it's a pro or con type of message. With your photo you used, I first anticipated it would be a sweet poem about newborn babies. But for sure, after birth, there are no guarantees of the future outcome.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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This is an interesting viewpoint on life. Can't decide if it's a pro or con type of message. With your photo you used, I first anticipated it would be a sweet poem about newborn babies. But for sure, after birth, there are no guarantees of the future outcome.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Yes, life is hard and it's getting harder. I can't imagine how our grandchildren will be able to cope, survive and prosper with out faith. Prayer works miracles but, the timing is God's.
Many reviewers thought 'Cries of life' is a poem and graded it as such. However, it is not a poem, it is a song. Some of the lyrics rhyme and some don't. All of the stanzas create a metaphor pointing to the fall of Eden and the path of humankind.
'Sadness hangs over a dark lagoon.' The dark lagoon is fallen Eden.
'And the river shines from a fickle moon.' The river is God given life but the light comes not from Him but from a fickle source. It is not glorifying but can appear so.
Give it another read, or better yet, listen to the song. The MP3 player is located on the upper left hand of the baby's photo.
All the best, Yard.
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I can?t get it to play but I bet it is beautiful!
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Interesting, thank you for attempting to hear it. The mp3 player is a fan story player so it should play when you click on the arrow button >.
Comment from E. Powers
This poem is wonderful and it does a wonderful job of conveying the struggles ahead for a child in life. To me it also portrays how we as parents always hope we can help them no repeat our mistakes, but we can't.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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This poem is wonderful and it does a wonderful job of conveying the struggles ahead for a child in life. To me it also portrays how we as parents always hope we can help them no repeat our mistakes, but we can't.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Powers. Yes, life is hard and it's getting harder. I can't imagine how our grandchildren will be able to cope, survive and prosper with out faith. Prayer works miracles but, the timing is God's.
Many reviewers thought 'Cries of life' is a poem and graded it as such. However, it is not a poem, it is a song. Some of the lyrics rhyme and some don't. All of the stanzas create a metaphor pointing to the fall of Eden and the path of humankind.
'Sadness hangs over a dark lagoon.' The dark lagoon is fallen Eden.
'And the river shines from a fickle moon.' The river is God given life but the light comes not from Him but from a fickle source. It is not glorifying but can appear so.
Give it another read, or better yet, listen to the song. The MP3 player is located on the upper left hand of the baby's photo.
All the best, Yard.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Three of our grandchildren are old enough to make us great grandparents but haven't done so yet. I actually look forward to that day. Being a grandparent has been wonderful. I'm sure being a great grandparent will be even better. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Three of our grandchildren are old enough to make us great grandparents but haven't done so yet. I actually look forward to that day. Being a grandparent has been wonderful. I'm sure being a great grandparent will be even better. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you Barbara. Yes, life is hard and it's getting harder. I can't imagine how our grandchildren will be able to cope, survive and prosper with out faith. Prayer works miracles but, the timing is God's.
Many reviewers thought 'Cries of life' is a poem and graded it as such. However, it is not a poem, it is a song. Some of the lyrics rhyme and some don't. All of the stanzas create a metaphor pointing to the fall of Eden and the path of humankind.
'Sadness hangs over a dark lagoon.' The dark lagoon is fallen Eden.
'And the river shines from a fickle moon.' The river is God given life but the light comes not from Him but from a fickle source. It is not glorifying but can appear so.
Give it another read, or better yet, listen to the song. The MP3 player is located on the upper left hand of the baby's photo.
All the best, Yard.
Comment from Sally Law
Wow, I mean Wow! Life right is held in such low regard; the abotion clock ticks away as I write this and by the time I'm finished, more preborn babies will lose their chance to live. Yep, it never stops this clock. Never. Then if the child survives there's so much going on in the world that's against them. Our society no longer favors children and only stands up for them if it's gets them elected or stuffs money in their pockets. What ever happened to personal responsibility? What happened to truth? I've never seen so such s----! Even on here! I mean, really. Do some of these folks actually believe what they're trying to sell? I dunno, Yardier. You and I were brought up in different times. Your poem is spot on. Thanks so much for sharing. Aching for a six today!
Blessing to you all.
Sal :))
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Wow, I mean Wow! Life right is held in such low regard; the abotion clock ticks away as I write this and by the time I'm finished, more preborn babies will lose their chance to live. Yep, it never stops this clock. Never. Then if the child survives there's so much going on in the world that's against them. Our society no longer favors children and only stands up for them if it's gets them elected or stuffs money in their pockets. What ever happened to personal responsibility? What happened to truth? I've never seen so such s----! Even on here! I mean, really. Do some of these folks actually believe what they're trying to sell? I dunno, Yardier. You and I were brought up in different times. Your poem is spot on. Thanks so much for sharing. Aching for a six today!
Blessing to you all.
Sal :))
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you Sal, for the blessing. Yes, life is hard and it's getting harder. I can't imagine how our grandchildren will be able to cope, survive and prosper with out faith. Prayer works miracles but, the timing is God's.
Many reviewers thought 'Cries of life' is a poem and graded it as such. However, it is not a poem, it is a song. Some of the lyrics rhyme and some don't. All of the stanzas create a metaphor pointing to the fall of Eden and the path of humankind.
'Sadness hangs over a dark lagoon.' The dark lagoon is fallen Eden.
'And the river shines from a fickle moon.' The river is God given life but the light comes not from Him but from a fickle source. It is not glorifying but can appear so.
Give it another read, or better yet, listen to the song. The MP3 player is located on the upper left hand of the baby's photo.
All the best, Yard.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I LOVE these kinds of poems that have an "inner" rhyme on each line [Hey! Like what I did there, Yardier? It was an unintentional emulation, but that made it extra fine...Okay; I'll stop now..]
I also loved the depth of the message here and smokey vibe throughout as we felt your tussle with the new versus the established. Really great job.
Did you mean to put the apostrophe BEFORE the missing letter of the word "old," though? The first time you did it, I was thinking it was a typo, but then you did it a second time, and I wondered if it WASN'T supposed to be a condensation of the word "old." But, by the same token, I couldn't think of any other word that would fit. So then I didn't understand why you would put the apostrophe where you did since it's replacing the 'd' rather than the first letter. [I went through the entire alphabet before I came to this conclusion on the matter; I was very thorough. Thanks for that early morning consternation there, Yardier..]
Finally, CONGRATULATIONS on your newest family member. Lifelong joys to you and your wife.
xoxox
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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I LOVE these kinds of poems that have an "inner" rhyme on each line [Hey! Like what I did there, Yardier? It was an unintentional emulation, but that made it extra fine...Okay; I'll stop now..]
I also loved the depth of the message here and smokey vibe throughout as we felt your tussle with the new versus the established. Really great job.
Did you mean to put the apostrophe BEFORE the missing letter of the word "old," though? The first time you did it, I was thinking it was a typo, but then you did it a second time, and I wondered if it WASN'T supposed to be a condensation of the word "old." But, by the same token, I couldn't think of any other word that would fit. So then I didn't understand why you would put the apostrophe where you did since it's replacing the 'd' rather than the first letter. [I went through the entire alphabet before I came to this conclusion on the matter; I was very thorough. Thanks for that early morning consternation there, Yardier..]
Finally, CONGRATULATIONS on your newest family member. Lifelong joys to you and your wife.
xoxox
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Good afternoon, Rachelle. I hope the consternation has faded by now. I very much appreciate your early morning review; must have been a great cup of coffee. In fact, you were the first person I thought of when I posted the song/poem. I wrote it as a song that just happened to rhyme a bit. We balladeers tend to do that. I thought for sure you would have noticed the MP3 attached to the posting. No one else has either. Perhaps it isn't worth their comment. You, on the other hand, a journey-person musical instructor? Granted the song has a simple chord arraignment yours truly sings without going to far off key. I think the poem comes alive with voice and music. Give it listen and let me know what you think.
Oh, yes, I had a brain fade with 'ol. Thanks for pointing it out. I
appreciate your thoroughness and made the change.
Thoroughly yours, Yard the bard. (;-0
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Hi again!
The truth is, I didn't even see the MP3 until you pointed it out. Sorry about that.
It was cool - a hybrid of Woody Guthrie and Leo Redbone.
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Wonderful! Thank you for taking the extra time Rachelle. You've put me in some tall cotton with Guthrie and Redbone. One other reviewer likened it to Johnny Cash. Now, if I can get a comparison to RY Cooder, I really would be living on Strait Street.
Thanks again, enjoy your weekend.
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You, as well!!
Comment from Douglas Goff
Such a very weird thing is it not? Life. So very long at times, yet very short indeed.
What a wonderfully contemplative piece. You still have words to write.
Congrats on the new life in your family
D
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Such a very weird thing is it not? Life. So very long at times, yet very short indeed.
What a wonderfully contemplative piece. You still have words to write.
Congrats on the new life in your family
D
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the congrats. Yes, life is hard and it's getting harder. I can't imagine how our grandchildren will be able to cope, survive and prosper with out faith. Prayer works miracles but, the timing is God's.
Many reviewers thought 'Cries of life' is a poem and graded it as such. However, it is not a poem, it is a song. Some of the lyrics rhyme and some don't. All of the stanzas create a metaphor pointing to the fall of Eden and the path of humankind.
'Sadness hangs over a dark lagoon.' The dark lagoon is fallen Eden.
'And the river shines from a fickle moon.' The river is God given life but the light comes not from Him but from a fickle source. It is not glorifying but can appear so.
Give it another read, or better yet, listen to the song. The MP3 player is located on the upper left hand of the baby's photo.
All the best, Yard.
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Ahhh. Makes perfect sense. Much more intense as a song! Nice work here.
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Smiling (;-)