Living On The Edge
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Living On The Edge - Chap 14"The blending of good and evil.
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Comment from lyenochka
It looks really bad but by accident it seems that Layla took out one of the bad guys. But who's going to rescue Jake? Meanwhile, Troy and Alyssa are in a safe haven. A bad situation here.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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It looks really bad but by accident it seems that Layla took out one of the bad guys. But who's going to rescue Jake? Meanwhile, Troy and Alyssa are in a safe haven. A bad situation here.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Accident on her part but a set up by the Chief. Layla hadn't put a knife into Tommy, he would have been arrested for attempted murder...his life was done because the Chief wanted him gone because of Tommy and Antonio botching the job. As for Jake, though he didn't expect to get shot, had a few backup plans of his own.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This was good, especially as it went like real life. Few stings are as neat as those on tv. And this time luck took out a couple of killers, although they may survive. Hopefully no one but Jake pulls through. It is amazing you are keeping all your balls in the air without a fumble.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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This was good, especially as it went like real life. Few stings are as neat as those on tv. And this time luck took out a couple of killers, although they may survive. Hopefully no one but Jake pulls through. It is amazing you are keeping all your balls in the air without a fumble.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Oh I fall down...almost split my head open trying to figure out this chapter... then realized I had to rescue Layla and I'd knocked her Knight in Armor out of the picture ? maybe. Thank you as always.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Esther Brown
Again, nothing to add to the drama except I will hold my breath until the next posting! You are going to bring this all together with a grand finale! Excellent writing.
Esther
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Again, nothing to add to the drama except I will hold my breath until the next posting! You are going to bring this all together with a grand finale! Excellent writing.
Esther
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Thanks your reading the wild and wooly park scene. Like the being in the wild west almost....or undercover in gangster land.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Yikes Layla killed Tommy before he could kill here but now she in deep trouble of killing a police officer. I'm sure Richard is Okay with that outsome. I don't if he had any real affection for Tommy. What I'm wondering is who snatched up Marco.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Yikes Layla killed Tommy before he could kill here but now she in deep trouble of killing a police officer. I'm sure Richard is Okay with that outsome. I don't if he had any real affection for Tommy. What I'm wondering is who snatched up Marco.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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As far as Tommy goes, Richard made him take Antonio's place... if he had killed Layla, he would go to prison....and now that Layla has killed him..he can get rid of Layla
Yes, Marco was snatched by three men.... there was a clue in Chap 13
Glad you liked the chapter... Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh no!! I don't believe Jake is dead! Now poor Layla is on her own in that dirty cop Richard's hands, everything is going wrong. How is she going to get out of this one? I will be watching for the next part, my friend. Well done! Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Oh no!! I don't believe Jake is dead! Now poor Layla is on her own in that dirty cop Richard's hands, everything is going wrong. How is she going to get out of this one? I will be watching for the next part, my friend. Well done! Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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That was a wild chapter, I think! Almost looks like Richard will come out on top, smelling like a rose....well, I am still at the wheel. LOL Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. Appreciate your support.'
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
Before I joined FanStory, I read Sue Grafton, John Grisham, James Patterson, Scott Turow, Lisa Scottoline, and J. A. Jance. to name a few. All are mystery, crime, action writers, my favorite genre. They have nothing on you.
This chapter didn't go as I expected, but the action and suspense was there. I didn't expect Jake and the brunette, and I was glad Layla admitted to herself that she didn't know what she was doing. I enjoyed the humorous dialogue of the working girls on the corner when Layla walked up.
I'm waiting for Richard to get what's coming to him. So far, everything is going his way. Great chapter. Actually, all you chapters are sixes.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Before I joined FanStory, I read Sue Grafton, John Grisham, James Patterson, Scott Turow, Lisa Scottoline, and J. A. Jance. to name a few. All are mystery, crime, action writers, my favorite genre. They have nothing on you.
This chapter didn't go as I expected, but the action and suspense was there. I didn't expect Jake and the brunette, and I was glad Layla admitted to herself that she didn't know what she was doing. I enjoyed the humorous dialogue of the working girls on the corner when Layla walked up.
I'm waiting for Richard to get what's coming to him. So far, everything is going his way. Great chapter. Actually, all you chapters are sixes.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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I've had a real tough day today... My granddaughter is at it again, but I don't want to think about it.
Instead I want to tell you that you made my day and put the biggest smile on my face. Your first paragraph was the biggest ego boost I could ever ask for...and then you added the cherry on the top ( a six). Thsnk you ever so much for your kindness. Love you, Lorraine!!! Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done again. This was very enjoyable. The scene is rich with suspense and emotion, leaving me eager to see how Layla's story unfolds. She's sure in a difficult place. I'm looking forward to seeing how she handles it. Great writing as this was easy to read and easily kept my interest.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Nicely done again. This was very enjoyable. The scene is rich with suspense and emotion, leaving me eager to see how Layla's story unfolds. She's sure in a difficult place. I'm looking forward to seeing how she handles it. Great writing as this was easy to read and easily kept my interest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Hello, Michael
I missed you this weekend. I believe Chap 12 and 13 might be available and they had much more money on the, $1.04 I think. Just in case you need those $$. I know I always do. Thanks for reading and supporting me.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
That was a huge flurry of activity! This is a real mind bender, keeping track of who's on which team. Layla and Jake both in trouble now. It just gets deeper and thicker as we go!
She wondered where Jake was at (no 'at')
package of cigarettes (pack)
Julie :-)
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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That was a huge flurry of activity! This is a real mind bender, keeping track of who's on which team. Layla and Jake both in trouble now. It just gets deeper and thicker as we go!
She wondered where Jake was at (no 'at')
package of cigarettes (pack)
Julie :-)
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Fixed!
Hope I had you on the edge of your seat! Thanks for reading, reviewing and the support.
Smiles, Carol
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You did, which was interfering with my ability to to edit! I probably missed some because I was wrapped up in the action lol!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm hoping Jake will be all right and he'll be able to help Layla. She's innocent and Tommy had his hands around her throat. I can't wait to read more.
She smiled at the bartender, "A glass (bartender.)
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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I'm hoping Jake will be all right and he'll be able to help Layla. She's innocent and Tommy had his hands around her throat. I can't wait to read more.
She smiled at the bartender, "A glass (bartender.)
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Did I have you on the edge of your seat? I hope so....I was when I was writing it! LOL
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing as always.
Smiles, Carol
Fixed....
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Yes, I was. I so want Layla and Jake to be together and, dang, the names are gone. Her Alyssa and is it Troy???
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Yes...it's Alyssa and Troy and Jake and Layla
A double wedding....nope, the books not that long. LOL