Living On The Edge
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Living On The Edge - Chap. 11"The blending of good and evil.
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Comment from Terry Broxson
Carol, you are a pro. You ratcheted it up for this chapter. Excellent work with Troy and Allie's introduction. Your dialogue and story flow are outstanding. Terry.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Carol, you are a pro. You ratcheted it up for this chapter. Excellent work with Troy and Allie's introduction. Your dialogue and story flow are outstanding. Terry.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Coming from someone who hasn't read my style before, your review makes me very very happy. I love the cliff hangers, the unexpected, and keeping the reader guessing. Thank you so much. You'll love the next chapter too I think. Thank you so much for the review, your support and kind words, and the stars.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
Of course we know it's not Allyssa, and Layla knows instinctively it's not her also, there are some things that connect beyond the natural, or how would know that Jesus is who He says He is, there is certainly beyond the natural, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Of course we know it's not Allyssa, and Layla knows instinctively it's not her also, there are some things that connect beyond the natural, or how would know that Jesus is who He says He is, there is certainly beyond the natural, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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I do believe that he gives that gut instinct to recognize the right and the wrong. In this case, the sisters connection, their life bond, made her sense that it wasn't her sister. And she's right!
Smiles, Carol
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Some things can't be explained, that faith
Comment from karenina
That darned tattoo angle is brilliant, Carol. It's kept us guessing and all signs point to Richard being the most abhorrent character you've ever written! (Grrr)
How much power and influence are enough to sell your soul, misidentify a body, and plan to lock up and silence your brother?
Well.
I know you're going to show us!
On to the next chapter!
(Are you sleeping at all? Posting two chapters within hours?)
Karenina
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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That darned tattoo angle is brilliant, Carol. It's kept us guessing and all signs point to Richard being the most abhorrent character you've ever written! (Grrr)
How much power and influence are enough to sell your soul, misidentify a body, and plan to lock up and silence your brother?
Well.
I know you're going to show us!
On to the next chapter!
(Are you sleeping at all? Posting two chapters within hours?)
Karenina
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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He's going to get worse unfortunately...But one never knows what awaits him down the line. Thanks for the review a always. Smiles and hugs, Carol
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How soon do you leave for your trip? I think you're ahead of the contest, aren't you?
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Funny you should ask.... I just counted the words last night (tonight) and I am at 27,251.... I might have this wrapped up by the 15th. That's a novel in less than two weeks because I started on the 3rd. Not bad!
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I couldn't write that many words in a year! Congrats!
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Just wrote another 2000 this morning and posted. Thee was a time last year that I thought I would never write again...not one word.
I'm going to send you a pm... The family is rumbling again.
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Damn families. You can't live without them (well, on the other hand...)
And (allegedly) you can't kill them.
Yes! Send me a PM or EMAIL!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Great twist with the preacher having the tattoo. But I'm with Layla, in that the burnt up body isn't Alyssa's, and we know where Troy is. The plot thickens, yet again. LOL. Great chapter, like all the rest. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Great twist with the preacher having the tattoo. But I'm with Layla, in that the burnt up body isn't Alyssa's, and we know where Troy is. The plot thickens, yet again. LOL. Great chapter, like all the rest. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Well, thank you dear friend. Thee are four childhood friends who have the tattoo and made a pact to always have each others back. Jake was the 5th but he doesn't have a tattoo. They went there separate ways and some remembered and didn't. Your awesome!
Smiles, Carol
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I figured there would be more than one tattoo. I mean, how else could you keep us guessing and running in circles. :-)
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Of course!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Jake knows the truth and is figuring out how evil some of his former friends are. I wonder how much of the truth he's ready to share with Layla. I can't wait to read more.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Jake knows the truth and is figuring out how evil some of his former friends are. I wonder how much of the truth he's ready to share with Layla. I can't wait to read more.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much for the review, Barbara. Things are going to start unraveling shortly and who knows what happens.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I tell you, the only one rotting in jail will be Richard! He's not nice at all. I don't understand why he's so determined to get rid of Troy. He can't accuse his brother! But, Troy has a cast iron aliby, he's in hospital, and Allie is too! Well done, my friend. I'll be reading the next chapter in a minute. Love and hugs Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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I tell you, the only one rotting in jail will be Richard! He's not nice at all. I don't understand why he's so determined to get rid of Troy. He can't accuse his brother! But, Troy has a cast iron aliby, he's in hospital, and Allie is too! Well done, my friend. I'll be reading the next chapter in a minute. Love and hugs Sandra xxx
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Good morning, my sweet friend. Thanks for the pleasure of reading Valeries escapades this morning. Richard thinks he's in charge of his world, but he'll soon learn when the hatchet falls. Troy and Allie are tucked away by a mobster no less...funny, huh? The bad guy doing the right thing.
Thanks so much for the gracious thoughts and the stars.
Love ya, Carol
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I think it's great. And when, or if, Richard discovers that, he'll flip his lid!! YAY!!!!
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Yes, he will..And it will happen in time.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
Great drama and emotion building!
A call for New York. (From?)
she called a cab to take her home. (Maybe say Alyssa's apartment)
I want you to arrest my sister's killer." (I didn't think she thought she was dead. Maybe sister's attacker?)
Her body is burned and then tossed in the contaminated water by the sewage company. (Was burned. And I'd reword so it doesn't sound like the sewage company did it. Near, or over by)
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Great drama and emotion building!
A call for New York. (From?)
she called a cab to take her home. (Maybe say Alyssa's apartment)
I want you to arrest my sister's killer." (I didn't think she thought she was dead. Maybe sister's attacker?)
Her body is burned and then tossed in the contaminated water by the sewage company. (Was burned. And I'd reword so it doesn't sound like the sewage company did it. Near, or over by)
Julie :-)
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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And there is your smiling face...I have jumped right on your suggestions and believe they are taken care of....as long as I didn't forget to save. Cobwebs always getting in the way!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Didn't all those guys that grew up together have the same tattoo. I thought Jake, William and Troy would have it. Jake know where Alyssa and Troy so will he stop Willaim from doing the press conference? This is a lot of fun to read despite the murders.
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Didn't all those guys that grew up together have the same tattoo. I thought Jake, William and Troy would have it. Jake know where Alyssa and Troy so will he stop Willaim from doing the press conference? This is a lot of fun to read despite the murders.
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Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Everyone but Jake. His father died on the day the crew were going to get their tattoos so he never got one. He joined the pact though. Jake knows where Troy is, but Benny kept Alyssa's whereabouts unknown for her safety.
Smiles, Carol
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Sorry for asking so many questions but you have a lot of characters and I'm reading at 25 other stories as well.
Comment from Sallyo
Jumping in at Chapter 11 is probably not a good idea, but the character list at the end helped a lot and you write to pro level which also helps to get a jump-in reader on track. The only small error I noted was
"No, Miss Saladino, I assure you that you don't" Penny
I think there needs to be either a full stop before the quotes or else a dash after them.
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Jumping in at Chapter 11 is probably not a good idea, but the character list at the end helped a lot and you write to pro level which also helps to get a jump-in reader on track. The only small error I noted was
"No, Miss Saladino, I assure you that you don't" Penny
I think there needs to be either a full stop before the quotes or else a dash after them.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read this chapter. If you are interested the following chapter is posted as well on the front page. Thanks for pointing out that my nasty little period had run off the page. I put it back and appreciate the help.
Smiles, Carol