Living On The Edge
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Living On The Edge - Chap 7"The blending of good and evil.
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Comment from Terry Broxson
Carol, first I want to thank you for the cheat sheet on who's who with the characters. You got a lot of moving parts. As a writer, I think you are doing a good job keeping the story going. As a reader, I find myself stopping and checking that I know who is who. I realized in this chapter we have two settings, a detail I didn't pick up on in earlier chapters. I am sure it was there, I just missed it. Terry.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Carol, first I want to thank you for the cheat sheet on who's who with the characters. You got a lot of moving parts. As a writer, I think you are doing a good job keeping the story going. As a reader, I find myself stopping and checking that I know who is who. I realized in this chapter we have two settings, a detail I didn't pick up on in earlier chapters. I am sure it was there, I just missed it. Terry.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Terry. I've shortened the chapters to ease the stress on the reader and yes, Layla was a fashion designer in New York, but now she will be in Rockford searching for her sister. The list of (active) characters is getting shorter. Hope that helps a little.
Thanks for the review and comments.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
Look at you writing up a storm! Being a character in this story can be hazardous to your health! So. ...Antonio attacked Alyssa, a hit job?
Ordered by? Should I know?
I'm not sure!
Layla is walking into a Hornets nest!
Two notes:
"He touched his face and winche". (winced)
"need --your --help. Some -- one just mur -- dered -- my -- sister."
(She doesn't know that and it's inconsistent with what she describes to
Tyler...)
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Look at you writing up a storm! Being a character in this story can be hazardous to your health! So. ...Antonio attacked Alyssa, a hit job?
Ordered by? Should I know?
I'm not sure!
Layla is walking into a Hornets nest!
Two notes:
"He touched his face and winche". (winced)
"need --your --help. Some -- one just mur -- dered -- my -- sister."
(She doesn't know that and it's inconsistent with what she describes to
Tyler...)
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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There was a clue but I'm not giving it away. LOL She says murdered because her sister yelled he's going to kill me and she's stressed to the limit. She didn't actually see the murder but her brain says it happened. Does that make any sense?
Darn h! Just now realized that when I say the word (and I did out loud) I say an h...must have been doing this all my life. Senile old lady...maybe I'm not cut out for this writing business...too late...I am hooked again and besides I have you to set me straight when I make a mistake. Hurrah!
It's 4 in the morning and I've been sitting at this computer since 3. I believe I should be sleeping but then there is no rest for the wicked.
Thank you so much. Have a great day!
Love ya, Carol
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Sleep. You need to rest!
Comment from Wendy G
I'm glad there are two today - you are writing with great speed and intensity - and it's all flowing very well. I am glad Alyssa is not dead, but let's hope Layla can help her in time! Great writing, filled with drama and suspense.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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I'm glad there are two today - you are writing with great speed and intensity - and it's all flowing very well. I am glad Alyssa is not dead, but let's hope Layla can help her in time! Great writing, filled with drama and suspense.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much Wendy...I'm trying to keep the story flowing but like I thought. it costs a lot of money to do these posts. Tom knew what he was doing.... Yet, I am having fun too!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, fire on the hole , your book is fire, the chapters are unwrapping so nicely. I need ti find the first chapters and see the beginning of the plot.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Wow, fire on the hole , your book is fire, the chapters are unwrapping so nicely. I need ti find the first chapters and see the beginning of the plot.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Yes..You can find them in my profile, Iza. Right at the top....I would love it if you discovered the entire book. Thanks so much. Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
None of this is good. I surely hope Tyler stays on the case even though he's in NYC. Layla needs an honest cop Alyssa's trail. I really like this story.
As she answered. Diane was hissing into the phone, (answered,)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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None of this is good. I surely hope Tyler stays on the case even though he's in NYC. Layla needs an honest cop Alyssa's trail. I really like this story.
As she answered. Diane was hissing into the phone, (answered,)
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Fixed and much appreciated. My eyes are getting so bad that I can't always tell the difference in the period and the comma. Thanks for pointing it out. There's one out there but he's keeping a low profile.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
I'm glad you posted another one today. They seem short to me. You tell us who took Alyssa from Antonio. They aren't exactly acting like the good good guys either having to ditch the car in a cornfield. I'm not sure I'm seeing Richard as a good guy the way he has treated his brother. I can't wait to read more.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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I'm glad you posted another one today. They seem short to me. You tell us who took Alyssa from Antonio. They aren't exactly acting like the good good guys either having to ditch the car in a cornfield. I'm not sure I'm seeing Richard as a good guy the way he has treated his brother. I can't wait to read more.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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I did it for you, Beth! I know like me you want the pages to keep turning. I wanted to get Layla on her way and there's so much else going on...It's like a game of clue...LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from patcelaw
Am I dreaming or did I remember that you are working on writing a book in a month ? May you have a blessed evening and a good weekend. And I wish you the very best with all of your writing and your book is moving along very nicely. Patricia .
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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Am I dreaming or did I remember that you are working on writing a book in a month ? May you have a blessed evening and a good weekend. And I wish you the very best with all of your writing and your book is moving along very nicely. Patricia .
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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You are not dreaming...I have joined a contest where you have to write a book starting in March and ending in March. I'm giving it a shot!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
Layla alerts her friend, detective Tyler Chadwick to Allie's murder or abduction, but we know her perilous life is definitely in danger, but Layla is going to track her down by hook or by crook, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Layla alerts her friend, detective Tyler Chadwick to Allie's murder or abduction, but we know her perilous life is definitely in danger, but Layla is going to track her down by hook or by crook, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you Roy... Do you like the chapters shorter like this? Some want them longer, some shorter... Guess I just have to stop where I feel it's right. Thanks for the review.
Smiles, Carol
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This was more bite size, .
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That's good to know. I'll try to stay around there. Glad you are enjoying it.
Smiles, Carol