Comment from Kelly Hope

Excellent

I love your work! I felt like this storytell was nicely written. I will say it's undoubtedly an enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing, God bless!

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024

Thanks, Kelly. God bless you, too. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

So now Ayesha knows someone is watching her and she was pretty slick getting away from him. The fact that Bruno's arm came in on the tide suggests strongly that he is dead. There have to be people interested in getting his money that probably wasn't all his.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024

Thanks, Carol. Bruno is definitely dead. His body was fed to a pair of bull sharks several chapters ago! I don't think I can resurrect him at this stage without divine assistance.

Comment from GWHARGIS

Exceptional

Very good chapter that dealt with the paperwork involved in estates. Every one wants a copy and nothing is ever done in less than triplicate. I like how she thinks and really liked that she gave the guy the slip. Great chapter. Gretchen

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024

Thanks so much for your continued support and for the sixth star, Gretchen. Greatly appreciated. All good wishes, Tony.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Wow, this book has changed from a cultural experience to a thriller and we're worried for Ayesha now. Hopefully, she'll outsmart them all. It's true that the death certificate is required for all these financial dealings. Too bad she didn't think of it. Young people wouldn't know.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024

Thanks for your comments, Helen. At least she's on home ground now, even if all of this kind of thing is new to her.

reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024

Thanks for your comments, Helen. At least she's on home ground now, even if all of this kind of thing is new to her.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Exceptional

After a stressful morning and suffering from last night's leftovers Ayesha at least had a smile to finish off this chapter. Well done Tony, a great chapter.
Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024

Thanks for your review and the sixth star, Valda. Greatly appreciated. I hope she doesn't lose her head over this lawyer fella.

reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024

Thanks for your review and the sixth star, Valda. Greatly appreciated. I hope she doesn't lose her head over this lawyer fella.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Exceptional

Ayesha is being followed and I'm pretty sure she is aware of it, although not sure she understands exactly why. I don't trust Mr Dallmore at all and I'm hoping Steve is a person she can trust and will help her out of the situation she's going to find herself in.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024

Thanks for your review and for the sixth star, Barbara. Most encouraging and appreciated. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Tony, this is a great chapter and it's well paced and full of action. Ayesha is finally getting the idea of what is going on. I liked the way she shook off her shadow. Now onto what is next. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024

Thanks for your review and comments, Ulla. Greatly appreciated. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from estory

Exceptional

The suspense and tension in this chapter is pretty strong. I loved the part where Aeysha is being tailed by one of Johnno's boys; or we think it is one of his boys. You keep the grey areas enough to leave us hanging on for the next chapters. But it's hard to have sympathy anymore for her either, as she is seems to be falling for the stock broker, and the frustration she feels at accomodating the laws around death certificates makes her seem a bit like a spoiled brat. Everyone has to deal with these things, just like I did when my dad died. The writing is pretty crisp though, the dialogue is tight as a drum, chocked full of emotion, and the web of intrigue is quite thick. We await the next chapter...estory

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024

Thanks, estory, for the review and sixth star. Ayesha is a Sydney girl through and through. I hope she doesn't get lured away by the bright lights and sun-tanned bodies! Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Jacob1395

Exceptional

I think Ayesha is starting to get suspicious about the events surrounding her husband's death. I can sense her frustration at all the formalities. I really like how your'e increasing the tension here Tony, it's keeping me invested in the story and I want to find out what is going to happen to Ayesha. Another excellent post.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024

Thanks, Jacob, for the review and sixth star. I appreciate your supportive comments and encouragement. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Giving a large chunk of change to the government not my best idea of a good time.

In the first sentence, Ayesha is all hung over. As long as she had a fine experience getting to that point.

Always necessary to read the small print. Never know what may lurk in there.

The powdered sugar and raspberry jam can easily be pictured, which adds to the illusion of Ayesha eating the doughnut. Probably in haste.

The ring twists the storyline and heightens the action.

Slick move on Ayesha's part to disembark the shuttle amid a crowd to lose her "shadow".

One very miner nit in the bottom of your Notes: "bee n" should be been.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024

Thanks very much for the supportive comments, Brett, and for noticing the nit - now fixed. Best wishes, Tony