Play the Piper
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Comment from Begin Again
Good morning -
What a beautiful described fairyland to wake up to. Your description of the storm and the beautiful landscape is perfect. It appears as if there might be a budding relationship growing much to Piper's chagrin. It was a magical read.
Smiles, Carol
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Good morning -
What a beautiful described fairyland to wake up to. Your description of the storm and the beautiful landscape is perfect. It appears as if there might be a budding relationship growing much to Piper's chagrin. It was a magical read.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I'm late to this party, but since you haven't posted in a while, I was anxious to read something from you:-)
First of all, "faerie bubbles for protection" - if only we all had one of these!
"A tiny trail of shimmering faerie dust zig-zagged its glitter among the fall snowflakes." What a magical image you have given us here - I can see it in the air!
As I said, this is my first time reading this story so I don't have the background, but I enjoyed the dialogue between Jasmine and Piper and I at least know that the faeries are Piper's guardian for some reason. Perhaps I'll pick up more from future chapters. We have Grand Masters present, so it sounds a little like a Harry Potter situation.
Write more and I'll catch on, lol!
I do so enjoy your writing, Debi. I'm hoping this post will become a trend.
Take care,
Pam
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I'm late to this party, but since you haven't posted in a while, I was anxious to read something from you:-)
First of all, "faerie bubbles for protection" - if only we all had one of these!
"A tiny trail of shimmering faerie dust zig-zagged its glitter among the fall snowflakes." What a magical image you have given us here - I can see it in the air!
As I said, this is my first time reading this story so I don't have the background, but I enjoyed the dialogue between Jasmine and Piper and I at least know that the faeries are Piper's guardian for some reason. Perhaps I'll pick up more from future chapters. We have Grand Masters present, so it sounds a little like a Harry Potter situation.
Write more and I'll catch on, lol!
I do so enjoy your writing, Debi. I'm hoping this post will become a trend.
Take care,
Pam
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from tfawcus
I like the way this new adventure starts. It's easy to visualise Jasmine's darting flight through the storm and you have a lovely description of the winter wonderland near the end. Plenty of action and some intriguing hints at future directions. I hope to be able to follow this one more regularly than I have sometimes done in the past.
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I like the way this new adventure starts. It's easy to visualise Jasmine's darting flight through the storm and you have a lovely description of the winter wonderland near the end. Plenty of action and some intriguing hints at future directions. I hope to be able to follow this one more regularly than I have sometimes done in the past.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is excellent writing, with good imagery words, colorful descriptions, and dialogue. It is thought provoking. Thank you for sharing it. We'll done.
Best wishes,
Alex :)
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This is excellent writing, with good imagery words, colorful descriptions, and dialogue. It is thought provoking. Thank you for sharing it. We'll done.
Best wishes,
Alex :)
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
Comment from lyenochka
So happy to see Piper back! And he better listen to Jasmine as she's not going to take any nonsense from someone under her guardianship. I guess somehow Piper got back to living among the humans. That must have been really hard for his family. I'm sure you will unfold the reasons and hopefully, in the process Sheba will regain her original form.
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So happy to see Piper back! And he better listen to Jasmine as she's not going to take any nonsense from someone under her guardianship. I guess somehow Piper got back to living among the humans. That must have been really hard for his family. I'm sure you will unfold the reasons and hopefully, in the process Sheba will regain her original form.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
Comment from royowen
So Piper has been engaged to compose something for Lady Eloise's dad in the company of Piper, she's sweet on Piper, but it was requested by the Duchess, Eloise's mother, I don't think he feels comfortable doing, but things will be OK, judging by the deft hand of Debi, blessings Roy
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So Piper has been engaged to compose something for Lady Eloise's dad in the company of Piper, she's sweet on Piper, but it was requested by the Duchess, Eloise's mother, I don't think he feels comfortable doing, but things will be OK, judging by the deft hand of Debi, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Whaaaat!! Yay!!!! Piper's back!!!! I love your fantasy writing, Debi, and have missed it in its absence!
You use descriptive language very well, setting the scene perfectly, without overdoing it.
Love the little part about Eloise wanting to do a duet with Piper. Cute crush!
I liked the opening piece about Jasmine and the snow storm scene. It was a good lead-in.
Sorry I don't have a much deserved six for you. It's worth it and more,
Hugs,
Rhonda
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Whaaaat!! Yay!!!! Piper's back!!!! I love your fantasy writing, Debi, and have missed it in its absence!
You use descriptive language very well, setting the scene perfectly, without overdoing it.
Love the little part about Eloise wanting to do a duet with Piper. Cute crush!
I liked the opening piece about Jasmine and the snow storm scene. It was a good lead-in.
Sorry I don't have a much deserved six for you. It's worth it and more,
Hugs,
Rhonda
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Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
