Panpipes
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Now that was a good idea, but where could Ayesha take the poor elephant?
Ayesha seems to be getting everything wrong at the moment, what works in Australia, doesn't work at all in Thailand. Now she has embarrased Bapit, and his friend, and that's not good. Lots still going on, and I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Now that was a good idea, but where could Ayesha take the poor elephant?
Ayesha seems to be getting everything wrong at the moment, what works in Australia, doesn't work at all in Thailand. Now she has embarrased Bapit, and his friend, and that's not good. Lots still going on, and I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Yes, there would be a few hurdles to overcome if she were to take up Bapit's suggestion, and the way things are at the moment, I can't see Chanarong giving her the time of day. That may not stop her from trying though!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice chapter. Good plot movement.
with the flat of her hand. - Is that her palm, or the back of her hand. I'm having trouble seeing it.
Nice thought, buying Abhamaru.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Nice chapter. Good plot movement.
with the flat of her hand. - Is that her palm, or the back of her hand. I'm having trouble seeing it.
Nice thought, buying Abhamaru.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Wayne. I appreciate your review and continued support.
'The flat of the hand', is the palm side, with the fingers straight. It's a common expression in British English. I guess I could have said she slapped him.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Bapit has a lot of pride and different mores, which confuse Ayesha. He has, however, proposed something she is going to want to do. But what will she do with the elephant once she owns it? This is such an original story set in a delightfully exotic setting.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Bapit has a lot of pride and different mores, which confuse Ayesha. He has, however, proposed something she is going to want to do. But what will she do with the elephant once she owns it? This is such an original story set in a delightfully exotic setting.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Carol. The ending is beginning to take shape now, in my mind anyway! I appreciate your continued interest. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
Another excellent addition to the book with very good insight into the emotional difficulties Bapit faces. The dialogue and interaction between
Ayesha and Bapit is well done.
I like the little section about the Bapit emulating Rahu to jump into the sky
to swallow the sun and moon.
Perhaps Ayesha should buy the entire trekking lodge, fire Chanin, and gradually let Bapit grow into the role of manager and mahout.
Well done.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Hello Tony,
Another excellent addition to the book with very good insight into the emotional difficulties Bapit faces. The dialogue and interaction between
Ayesha and Bapit is well done.
I like the little section about the Bapit emulating Rahu to jump into the sky
to swallow the sun and moon.
Perhaps Ayesha should buy the entire trekking lodge, fire Chanin, and gradually let Bapit grow into the role of manager and mahout.
Well done.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Well, I'll be jiggered! You've second guessed the whole of the rest of the book! Glad you enjoyed this chapter with its interactions between the two of them. As always, I appreciate the sixth star. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I was wondering how he would take to her gift of the prosthetic. Pride is pride and sometimes makes no sense. I hope she adopts the Elephant. It's upsetting to think about an animal being mistreated this way. Great chapter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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I was wondering how he would take to her gift of the prosthetic. Pride is pride and sometimes makes no sense. I hope she adopts the Elephant. It's upsetting to think about an animal being mistreated this way. Great chapter. Gretchen
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Gretchen. Fortunately, this is a work of fiction. I think elephants are better treated these days. Thanks for your continued support. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from lyenochka
That's it! Of course, Ayesha should buy Abhamaru. She should apologize to Chanarong for her rudeness and then offer a good price. That would help heal Bapit, help the lodge owner with his financial difficulties, and get Abhamaru away from that awful Chanin!
Great realism with the cultural issues and the male ego issues.
Wendy suggested that I read The Elephant Whisperer so this is very good to read about the care of these people for the elephant.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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That's it! Of course, Ayesha should buy Abhamaru. She should apologize to Chanarong for her rudeness and then offer a good price. That would help heal Bapit, help the lodge owner with his financial difficulties, and get Abhamaru away from that awful Chanin!
Great realism with the cultural issues and the male ego issues.
Wendy suggested that I read The Elephant Whisperer so this is very good to read about the care of these people for the elephant.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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The Elephant Whisperer. I must remember that. As you've predicted, we may be on the home straight now. All the best, Tony.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Well, quarrel in paradise, and that old hag love that things can conquer all.... let's see how is going to cure the cultural difference. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Well, quarrel in paradise, and that old hag love that things can conquer all.... let's see how is going to cure the cultural difference. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Iza. These two still have some sorting out to do if I'm to contrive a happy ending! All the best, Tony.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this addition with us. Ayesha has much to learn, but she is intelligent, and I am sure she will grow. Bapit needs to learn to accept help. I'm sure Ayesha will be able to help him in that area. I hope Abhamaru gets a new home. Great write.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Thank you for sharing this addition with us. Ayesha has much to learn, but she is intelligent, and I am sure she will grow. Bapit needs to learn to accept help. I'm sure Ayesha will be able to help him in that area. I hope Abhamaru gets a new home. Great write.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Barbara. These two still have some sorting out to do if I'm to contrive a happy ending! And, of course, I can hardly leave poor Abhamaru in the lurch! All the best, Tony.
Comment from estory
This was a stronger chapter. I liked the tension in the dialogue, and we really see Bapit pushing back against Ayesha's desire to help him with money. The scenes of him struggling with his crutches underscores his need of help, but his pride comes glaring through his words as he pushes back against her and defines his own space. She seems carefree as she wheels around the wheelchair and almost loses control of it. We almost get a glimpse there of her desperate desire to cheer him up and give him some spirit. The seething emotions between the characters and the complicated relationships leap off the page here. estory
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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This was a stronger chapter. I liked the tension in the dialogue, and we really see Bapit pushing back against Ayesha's desire to help him with money. The scenes of him struggling with his crutches underscores his need of help, but his pride comes glaring through his words as he pushes back against her and defines his own space. She seems carefree as she wheels around the wheelchair and almost loses control of it. We almost get a glimpse there of her desperate desire to cheer him up and give him some spirit. The seething emotions between the characters and the complicated relationships leap off the page here. estory
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Thanks for your comments about the dialogue, estory. Appreciated, as is the sixth star. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from royowen
I don't know whether you are writing this from perception of a relationship between a Thai boy and an Australian girl who's grown up with the experience of entitlement like most of us have Tony. Or from a cultural exchange, either way it's great, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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I don't know whether you are writing this from perception of a relationship between a Thai boy and an Australian girl who's grown up with the experience of entitlement like most of us have Tony. Or from a cultural exchange, either way it's great, blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Thanks for your comments, Roy. There is certainly a cultural mismatch here and I'm having to think carefully about how I'm going to resolve that or even if I should.
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As they say, Love binds us together, there is a commonality in survival.
