Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Hmm, not sure if the old woman is already dead or not. Is she a ghost, not sure. I think this story will appeal with the majority of FanStory demographics, because of the age factor. That may be enough to carry the day.

Good luck.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024

Thanks!

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

Now you must tell us more. Was her spirit passing by, and she skipped her way as she once had done going with the sun to meet the Son of God or was her reminiscing sufficient to put a skip to her step?

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024

This is terribly shortened form of the original but even then the ending is still up to interpretation. Thanks for the review! :-)

Comment from T.A. Walk

Excellent

Tried my hand at this last time, and it's not easy.

So much emotion carried in your selection of words. I think sometimes time changes the world around us without us noticing. Like a puppy that you see every day, but never realize he has grown until he sits on you :)

Then to move on to happiness ever after was a beautiful finish.

No SPAG critique to offer. Good luck in the contest!!

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024

I know what you mean. I write my flash fictions as briefly as possible, then check the word count only to find I have to delete half my story! It is a good exercise for getting to the point, though. Thanks so much for the review. :-)

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

This is a very simple and direct story, perfect for the challenge. The woman was reminiscing with her photos and started to feel her youth inside, again. I'm a true believer in everyone having an Inner Child, and I am most certainly in touch with mine, which is reflected in my own stories and poems, often.

You wrote such clear and colorful imagery that I could imagine the woman running out of her farmhouse and skipping and running through the fields greeted by the very well described sunset. I enjoyed reading and reviewing your excellent writing!

Best wishes!

Alex



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 Comment Written 20-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024

Thanks for the encouraging words!

Comment from Brenda Strauser

Excellent

I enjoyed this poem. Picture was perfect for the poem. I found some humor in this part: she was skipping and laughing. Very well written. Great job

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 Comment Written 20-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024

Thank you!