Off Path
Solitude in free verse26 total reviews
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
I am on a quest dear friend. I miss you and would love to be dancing cheek to cheek again like we were about a week and a half ago. Well let's see if we can help a little. This is beautiful and you make me like free verse. Sorry for putting it that way. But so many do it like they were just talking to me. And you show that there is thought behind it and so much beauty in your words. But my favorite is the last verse.
Today,
the pulse of the wind
will tempo my steps
as I follow the path
off-path
to the heart
of the wintry woods.
It sounds so mysterious and eerie. But I love eerie. So this is my choice of where to put my last six. And isn't it only Tuesday? Duh? But I will review your other poem, the sonnet. And then I have to finish a birthday poem for Miss Merri, Adonna. I love coming here to see your beautiful poetry. I don't know how much good I can do, but at least we are staying in touch.
Once again, this is such a lovely free verse. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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I am on a quest dear friend. I miss you and would love to be dancing cheek to cheek again like we were about a week and a half ago. Well let's see if we can help a little. This is beautiful and you make me like free verse. Sorry for putting it that way. But so many do it like they were just talking to me. And you show that there is thought behind it and so much beauty in your words. But my favorite is the last verse.
Today,
the pulse of the wind
will tempo my steps
as I follow the path
off-path
to the heart
of the wintry woods.
It sounds so mysterious and eerie. But I love eerie. So this is my choice of where to put my last six. And isn't it only Tuesday? Duh? But I will review your other poem, the sonnet. And then I have to finish a birthday poem for Miss Merri, Adonna. I love coming here to see your beautiful poetry. I don't know how much good I can do, but at least we are staying in touch.
Once again, this is such a lovely free verse. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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You are the best, my friend. Thank you so much!!! Xo love you!
Comment from Yusita
This is an excellent poem and solid entry for the solitude contest... I enjoyed reading your take on solitude. The imagery, and descriptions were wonderful and unique. Some of my favorite lines were:
"Today, I wear my solitude
like a favorite sweater"
"In a game of hide and seek
with the sun,"
"Today, I shall listen
to whispers
not meant to be deciphered"
Very lovely work!
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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This is an excellent poem and solid entry for the solitude contest... I enjoyed reading your take on solitude. The imagery, and descriptions were wonderful and unique. Some of my favorite lines were:
"Today, I wear my solitude
like a favorite sweater"
"In a game of hide and seek
with the sun,"
"Today, I shall listen
to whispers
not meant to be deciphered"
Very lovely work!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from Sugarray77
Well written in a vivid way that pulls your reader into your walk with you. The imagery is lovely and the descriptions of a nature walk is vivid and kept me engaged and interested. I enjoyed it.
Melissa
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Well written in a vivid way that pulls your reader into your walk with you. The imagery is lovely and the descriptions of a nature walk is vivid and kept me engaged and interested. I enjoyed it.
Melissa
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Melissa! Xo
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This is very lovely writing. Your picture and matting are blended perfectly. I have wandered by myself in the forest and such thoughts were felt by me too. There is nothing like being the only human in the middle of all that beauty. Karen
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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This is very lovely writing. Your picture and matting are blended perfectly. I have wandered by myself in the forest and such thoughts were felt by me too. There is nothing like being the only human in the middle of all that beauty. Karen
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
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U R Welcome. Karen
Comment from karenina
An eloquent poem... Subtle alliteration, superb imagery, and a time that conveys, to my interpretation, that
one can and must push through the solitude that removes us from the world...and find our peace in nature!
Karenina
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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An eloquent poem... Subtle alliteration, superb imagery, and a time that conveys, to my interpretation, that
one can and must push through the solitude that removes us from the world...and find our peace in nature!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Karenina! Xo
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I like the way this free verse expands on this feeling of solitude as the walk goes ever deeper into the woods. In the beginning the walk seems to start less ambitiously but gathers some momentum until, in the end, the nature trail has expanded to an off-path into the wintry woods, a sense of going ever-deeper in solitude and being at one with nature. Beautifully expressed. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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I like the way this free verse expands on this feeling of solitude as the walk goes ever deeper into the woods. In the beginning the walk seems to start less ambitiously but gathers some momentum until, in the end, the nature trail has expanded to an off-path into the wintry woods, a sense of going ever-deeper in solitude and being at one with nature. Beautifully expressed. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from mermaids
I can relate to your words, I often walk in nature by myself. You have a light feel and flow to your words that takes the reader to another place. Your poetic form creates a clear scene of being alone in nature. Your vivid use of words appeals to the senses. "As the wind directs the sway of trees", shows nature in action as if she is welcoming your presence. Excellent use of words that makes the reader feel good and makes me want to go for a walk to be with all the trees, animals, and other parts of nature.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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I can relate to your words, I often walk in nature by myself. You have a light feel and flow to your words that takes the reader to another place. Your poetic form creates a clear scene of being alone in nature. Your vivid use of words appeals to the senses. "As the wind directs the sway of trees", shows nature in action as if she is welcoming your presence. Excellent use of words that makes the reader feel good and makes me want to go for a walk to be with all the trees, animals, and other parts of nature.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from BenThrone
This poem paints a vivid portrait of walking alone in the woods. My favorite stanzas are the first and fourth. There is a reference to "unwanted woe" that isn't very clear; perhaps intentionally, but it seems to conflict with the sense of serenity throughout most of the poem. But it does make the poem more mysterious.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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This poem paints a vivid portrait of walking alone in the woods. My favorite stanzas are the first and fourth. There is a reference to "unwanted woe" that isn't very clear; perhaps intentionally, but it seems to conflict with the sense of serenity throughout most of the poem. But it does make the poem more mysterious.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Ben! Xo
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Congrats on your win!
Comment from Julie Helms
This is absolutely stunningly beautiful. You sucked me into that forest with you wrapped in your sweater of solitude. All of your imagery was so sensory. Just a wonderful read. Thanks for sharing! Julie.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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This is absolutely stunningly beautiful. You sucked me into that forest with you wrapped in your sweater of solitude. All of your imagery was so sensory. Just a wonderful read. Thanks for sharing! Julie.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Julie! Xo
Comment from Lisasview
Oh how I enjoyed reading this poem that you wrote about solitude.
Each word moved smoothly to the next word and then glided to your next line.
I wish you the very
best of luck in the contest,
Lisasview
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Oh how I enjoyed reading this poem that you wrote about solitude.
Each word moved smoothly to the next word and then glided to your next line.
I wish you the very
best of luck in the contest,
Lisasview
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Lisa! Xo
