Piper back cover
Looking for advice on content for the back cover21 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
This reads well. However, if it were me, I would leave out the second and fourth paragraph. Add an adjective to describe the kind of secrets as in 'powerful secrets'.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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This reads well. However, if it were me, I would leave out the second and fourth paragraph. Add an adjective to describe the kind of secrets as in 'powerful secrets'.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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I do like the removal of those paragraphs. Thank you for the suggestion.
Before he becomes the most infamous musician in history, Piper is a boy discovering who he is and how to conjure the deeper magic found in the music he plays.
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I love that new sentence!
Comment from GWHARGIS
Well, not that it counts fir anything, but I read it and liked it. It held my interest and I kept reading to the end. Sometimes the back cover will lose my interest pretty quickly. I live by less is more. This told just enough for my interest to linger. Gretchen
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Well, not that it counts fir anything, but I read it and liked it. It held my interest and I kept reading to the end. Sometimes the back cover will lose my interest pretty quickly. I live by less is more. This told just enough for my interest to linger. Gretchen
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Hi GWHARGIS,
Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate you taking time to read and give feedback on this.
Happy New Year!
Debi
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I like it, but I'm probably not the best judge. It's short and mysterious. It makes your readers want more. I struggle writing back covers myself. I've always thought, if I could condense the story about 100 words, I wouldn't have used 90,000 words to start with. LOL Good luck.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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I like it, but I'm probably not the best judge. It's short and mysterious. It makes your readers want more. I struggle writing back covers myself. I've always thought, if I could condense the story about 100 words, I wouldn't have used 90,000 words to start with. LOL Good luck.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Hi barbara.wilkey,
Yes, it is hard to condense into 100 words. Thanks for sharing your the dilemma is similar, and for the analysis. I appreciate the help.
Happy New Year!
Debi
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Hi Debbie I like this cover it's short and sweet and mysterious.... and invites the reader to open the book and find more. Good luck with the publishing.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Hi Debbie I like this cover it's short and sweet and mysterious.... and invites the reader to open the book and find more. Good luck with the publishing.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Hi Iza Deleanu,
Thank you for the six stars--so unexpected, but so appreciated. Thank you for pointing out what you like and for the good luck wishes.
Happy New Year!
Debi
Comment from Bill Schott
This sounds like a stirring encouragement for one who is contemplating the commitment of buying this book. The picture says something of nature and antiquity.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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This sounds like a stirring encouragement for one who is contemplating the commitment of buying this book. The picture says something of nature and antiquity.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Hi Bill Schott,
Thank you for the response and your reaction. I appreciate the help.
Happy New Year!
Debi
Comment from tfawcus
I think your choice of information here is great. My only two suggestions are that you consider breaking the single sentence first paragraph into two shorter sentences to increase the impact, and that you consider reversing the last two paragraphs. Your penultimate paragraph is a great hook into the story, especially with the final sentence, Piper hesitates.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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I think your choice of information here is great. My only two suggestions are that you consider breaking the single sentence first paragraph into two shorter sentences to increase the impact, and that you consider reversing the last two paragraphs. Your penultimate paragraph is a great hook into the story, especially with the final sentence, Piper hesitates.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Hi Tony,
Thank you for the analysis and the suggestions. It does read better the way you suggest.
Happy New Year!
Debi
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I know how difficult these summaries can be! The very best of luck in getting your book published. I've read enough extracts from it to know you have something good to offer. May 2024 be the year!
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How very kind. Thank you!
Comment from Navada
I really like this. I only have two queries. Is there a word that may work better than entices in the final line? Maybe cajoles, wheedles or beseeches? I'm also curious to know a little more about Piper's specific talent and what it is specifically that attracts the Fae warrior to him. I acknowledge that's a big challenge to incorporate within your word limit!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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I really like this. I only have two queries. Is there a word that may work better than entices in the final line? Maybe cajoles, wheedles or beseeches? I'm also curious to know a little more about Piper's specific talent and what it is specifically that attracts the Fae warrior to him. I acknowledge that's a big challenge to incorporate within your word limit!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Hi Navada,
Thank you for the suggestions and the questions for me to consider. I appreciate the help.
Happy New Year!
Debi
Comment from lyenochka
I like it! It gives the reader the question about whether Piper would find the answer to his identity or whether he would be tricked. Perhaps you can start with Piper questioning his identity. Something about how he became orphaned, about his extraordinary talent, and the mystery of who he is and then he meets the fae? I'm excited that you will be publishing this soon!!!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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I like it! It gives the reader the question about whether Piper would find the answer to his identity or whether he would be tricked. Perhaps you can start with Piper questioning his identity. Something about how he became orphaned, about his extraordinary talent, and the mystery of who he is and then he meets the fae? I'm excited that you will be publishing this soon!!!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Hi Helen,
I appreciate the suggestions. It's so hard to know what to include so having someone who has read the book helps.
Happy New Year!
Debi
Comment from jmdg1954
Debi.
This is well written as it tells the reader a bit about the story.
The second paragraph, I've read it over and over but it just doesn't read right to me...
[[[Powerful magic exists in music, charms you can weave into your melodies and wield in fantastic ways]]].
The " charms you can weave into your melodies"
Portion didn't flow well.
Just something to consider...
John
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Debi.
This is well written as it tells the reader a bit about the story.
The second paragraph, I've read it over and over but it just doesn't read right to me...
[[[Powerful magic exists in music, charms you can weave into your melodies and wield in fantastic ways]]].
The " charms you can weave into your melodies"
Portion didn't flow well.
Just something to consider...
John
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Hi John,
I appreciate your comments and will consider them as I rewrite. Thank you for the help.
Happy New Year!
Debi
Comment from Douglas Goff
It does catch one's eye. Still, most readers choose "browsing" books via the cover. I think you need a hook of some type. A hint of power. I don't know, something.
Just my two cents. Like I said, it does catch the eye.
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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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It does catch one's eye. Still, most readers choose "browsing" books via the cover. I think you need a hook of some type. A hint of power. I don't know, something.
Just my two cents. Like I said, it does catch the eye.
D
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Hi Douglas Goff,
Thank you for the response and suggestions for improvement. I appreciate the help.
Happy New Year!
Debi
