Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

That was artfully done! I like how you engage the reader with the hidden information that Kamul doesn't know that Ayesha is grieving Bapit's amputation more than her husband and yet he's satisfied that she's finally grieving her husband.
But what awful tourists! And that poor elephant. I'm still waiting for the elephant and Bapit to be reunited...

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thanks, Helen. Glad you enjoyed that touch.
I agree - tourists from hell!
I'm rooting for Abharamu too.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

'"Cor!' he said. 'There'sâ??â??â??â?? a sight for sore eyes!"

Poor Abharamu elephant ... that ride sounds so painful.

I love saris, hijabs, and Indian jewelry.

How is poor Bapit manage... such a tragedy.

I look forward to find out what happens next to Bapit, Abharamu the elephant, and Ayesha.

Your story reminds me of a book I read, "water for elephants".

Well done

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

I enjoyed reading your comments, Gypsy. I never read the book but I saw the film.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I have a granddaughter like Ayesha, it's seemingly not uncommon to be a little like that. Boy that was some price to pay, after running away from disaster, two innocents in Ayesha and Bapit, while the plot goes on, I wonder why Bruno wants to be known as dead, beautifully written Tony, blessings Roy

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thanks for your kind words, Roy. My daughter, too, though she's not so prone to fainting!

Comment from Ulla

Exceptional

And all the while she is crying for Bapit, rather than her deceased husband. Now, I'm wondering where you're taking us with this story.
I almost cried when I read the cruelty to the elephants. I love this story, Tony. Ulla:)))

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thanks very much for the sixth star, Ulla, and your kind words. Fortunately, I think most places that keep elephants are better regulated these days.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi there,
As we rejoined the characters, I loved how you checked in on each situation, and your descriptive language about their emotions and reactions rang true.
Looking forward to the next chapter,
~MP~

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thanks very much for your supportive comments, Patty. Greatly appreciated. All good wishes, Tony.

Comment from Jim Wile

Excellent

So much subterfuge and misunderstanding makes this such an intriguing tale. And despite Bapit's lost limb, the saddest part was the ill treatment of Abharamu. I hope she gets her revenge on her keeper before this is over.

This should be very interesting to see how Bapit and Ayesha's initial feelings towards each other get rekindled in view of his insulting behavior and her revulsion towards his disability. I'm sure it will be totally believable in your hands, Tony. - Jim

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thank you, Jim, for your affirming review. I'm glad you are still enjoying it. All good wishes, Tony

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Wow, unexpected ending, poor guy, to lose a limb so young and that charade of a death. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thanks, Iza. I appreciate your review. All good wishes for the New Year. Tony.

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

I can't imagine what they have planned for her, but I'm sure it isn't good. It may be a long time before Bapit can help her. I'm not sure how the elephant fits into any of this. Perhaps she's to help Bapit recover?

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024

Thanks for your review, Cindy. All should become clearer soon - I hope!

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

You weave a complex tale with many fibers. The writing is descriptive and very excellent. It is hard for me to follow, since I came in so late, but the story is very intriguing. I enjoy reading your work because it is so descriptive, and the characters believeable. You blend in humor and tragedy together well. I felt sorry for the elephant as well as the patient in the hospital. Well done.

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024

Thanks, Tom. I appreciate your supportive comments. All good wishes, Tony.

Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

Well written. Error-free, as far as I can tell.
Poor Bapit! Whatever will become of him now? Will Klahan get Ayesha in to see Bapit? We all hope so.
Best wishes.

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024

Thanks for your ongoing interest, Wayne. Appreciated