Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "The Return"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
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Comment from Jim Wile
I think you were right to be leery of this temporary peace. That man is like a pressure cooker, and there's no telling when he will blow. You built up the tension quite well in this chapter, and I could picture beautifully everything that was happening, both outside and inside your mind.
You constantly wonder why chaos seems to follow you around. I'm sure there are many reasons. One of them has to be simple probability. Some people are just bound to have more bad luck than others, and you seem to fit the bill. But you certainly were predisposed to it by your unfortunate upbringing.
But something else probably also contributed--not in every case like the present one with the Indian family, but in others--and that is your good looks. If you were plain-looking, men especially would respond differently and wouldn't bother you.
Being the narcissist that your mother is, I wouldn't be surprised if for a long time she has been jealous of you for your looks, kind of like the queen in the story of Snow White. I'll bet she was once pretty but was fading with age and saw in you one who surpassed her in looks, and she couldn't stand it and had to take you down. At this point in time, you are a real threat to her rather than just a perceived threat, so she's getting more and more desperate. I could be wrong about all this, but I think it plays a definite part in some of the troubles you've seen. - Jim
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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I think you were right to be leery of this temporary peace. That man is like a pressure cooker, and there's no telling when he will blow. You built up the tension quite well in this chapter, and I could picture beautifully everything that was happening, both outside and inside your mind.
You constantly wonder why chaos seems to follow you around. I'm sure there are many reasons. One of them has to be simple probability. Some people are just bound to have more bad luck than others, and you seem to fit the bill. But you certainly were predisposed to it by your unfortunate upbringing.
But something else probably also contributed--not in every case like the present one with the Indian family, but in others--and that is your good looks. If you were plain-looking, men especially would respond differently and wouldn't bother you.
Being the narcissist that your mother is, I wouldn't be surprised if for a long time she has been jealous of you for your looks, kind of like the queen in the story of Snow White. I'll bet she was once pretty but was fading with age and saw in you one who surpassed her in looks, and she couldn't stand it and had to take you down. At this point in time, you are a real threat to her rather than just a perceived threat, so she's getting more and more desperate. I could be wrong about all this, but I think it plays a definite part in some of the troubles you've seen. - Jim
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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I think you're right on the money Jim. She actually had a big crush on me. My aunt warned me about it. Shut up kind of weird. Thank you Jim, your reviews were amazing as always. Got such awesome things to say and great insight too. You're such a valuable reviewer. I appreciate you very very much I hope you're having a great evening!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What absolute tension and trepidation you convey here as you wait for the monster to appear! Everything is on high alert. And when he eventually appears and apologises, you don't trust this ceasefire one little bit. This is an unbelievable way for you to be living, Lea, and, as ever, I feel so sorry that you can't seem to escape from the mire of this abuse. You understand the pattern so well but now you've got another family to guard and protect. There are some small edits: u(n)der such circumstances; she again (waved) her hand. Thank you for sharing this excellent chapter with yet another cliff-hanger (Oh dear!) Debbie x
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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What absolute tension and trepidation you convey here as you wait for the monster to appear! Everything is on high alert. And when he eventually appears and apologises, you don't trust this ceasefire one little bit. This is an unbelievable way for you to be living, Lea, and, as ever, I feel so sorry that you can't seem to escape from the mire of this abuse. You understand the pattern so well but now you've got another family to guard and protect. There are some small edits: u(n)der such circumstances; she again (waved) her hand. Thank you for sharing this excellent chapter with yet another cliff-hanger (Oh dear!) Debbie x
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you Debbie, I wouldn't have made those changes. I appreciate the match you know very much are valuable to me. I'm always happy to see your reviews and that you're reading along with me. Thank you so much that's always I appreciate it hope you're an evening is grand!
Comment from BethShelby
The story ends on another cliff hanger. It sound like you didn't want long for the bad thing you were anticipating to happen. I was surprised to find her husband still there after her weeping. I thought he was leaving her. I was even more surprise to hear him say he was sorry. Now, I want to know what her tears were all about.
Is your mother talking to you or you uncle about getting you out of that house?
Sleep could not be attained umder (under)
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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The story ends on another cliff hanger. It sound like you didn't want long for the bad thing you were anticipating to happen. I was surprised to find her husband still there after her weeping. I thought he was leaving her. I was even more surprise to hear him say he was sorry. Now, I want to know what her tears were all about.
Is your mother talking to you or you uncle about getting you out of that house?
Sleep could not be attained umder (under)
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Unfortunately, that's the nature of the abuser. They at first they're wonderful and great and show you all their best qualities. And then after a while they start getting picky. And then they start getting mean with their words. And then they start hitting and then they do a real beating. And then they take off and then they come back and they're real. Sorry and the honeymoon. starts again. And they're back to calling each other names and the circle goes round. It's not a pretty one but it's one I know. Thank you again my friend. I appreciate you. I hope you're having an awesome day and your evening is grand thanks again!
Comment from JSD
Again, we have some quiet and hope for a moment and I treasure these moments. Don't let it change. I fear the worst. Hope all's well with you, Lea. Much love. x
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Again, we have some quiet and hope for a moment and I treasure these moments. Don't let it change. I fear the worst. Hope all's well with you, Lea. Much love. x
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you I'm doing well and I hope you're well too I appreciate your comments and your fine review and your great waiting much love right back at you. I hope you have a awesome day!
Comment from Jacob1395
This is really intense Lea. It is horrific the life you have had to live, and I really felt for you as you could see in this scene that something bad was going to happen. Another well told chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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This is really intense Lea. It is horrific the life you have had to live, and I really felt for you as you could see in this scene that something bad was going to happen. Another well told chapter.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you jacob I really appreciate your reviews and your kind comments have an awesome afternoon!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
it would be unnerving to have to be constantly on pins and needles. You were still so young, and what you know of life is so tainted. It appears that for the present time, Mr. D is doing ok. I think that's the pattern of abusers though, they blow up and later apologize. Obviously, you can't do anything to prevent the situation that you're surrounded by, it would seem the best thing was to find an other place to stay. Easier said than done, I know.
As for what is going on with your mom, I read Dolly's response. She is much more forgiving than I was going to be, but she's also correct. It would be good to be able to move on for both of your sakes. Do you have a long term plan for your life, a place of your own, in perhaps another town or province? It might be the only way that you'll ever be free of your mother. Thanks for sharing gal.
Blessings,
Tom
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Hello Lea,
it would be unnerving to have to be constantly on pins and needles. You were still so young, and what you know of life is so tainted. It appears that for the present time, Mr. D is doing ok. I think that's the pattern of abusers though, they blow up and later apologize. Obviously, you can't do anything to prevent the situation that you're surrounded by, it would seem the best thing was to find an other place to stay. Easier said than done, I know.
As for what is going on with your mom, I read Dolly's response. She is much more forgiving than I was going to be, but she's also correct. It would be good to be able to move on for both of your sakes. Do you have a long term plan for your life, a place of your own, in perhaps another town or province? It might be the only way that you'll ever be free of your mother. Thanks for sharing gal.
Blessings,
Tom
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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It's funny you mention that cause it won't be long before I leave the problem entirely in the book anyway. First now I will be leaving lower mainland as soon as I am athe must get out of the clutches of the family so intent to cause damage. Thank you my friend again. I have to keep saying how much I appreciate your efforts. Your reviews and hanging in there with me!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
All seems calm just now Lea, but your senses are right on point as Mr D's temper could flare up at any moment. Once a man is violent towards his wife, it never stops. Men like this never change. You were right to be cautious.
Regarding your present situation with your Mother. You should show pity for her, she is disturbed by hearing the truth and facing up to it is hard for some people. Ghosts of the past come back to haunt us all and those regrets make us do odd things. Perhaps you should tell your Mother that you forgive her and ask her to be at peace and allow you the same gift. You have suffered enough Lea.
Perhaps she still thinks she is right and is trying to save herself the embarrassment. If only she could apologise to you and ask for forgiveness, then life could move forward. My parents never apologised for their bad behaviour and they felt justified in what they did. Some people have no patience when it comes to children.
Another fine chapter in your life Lea, had a wonderful day and think pleasant thoughts as life is good and should be enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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All seems calm just now Lea, but your senses are right on point as Mr D's temper could flare up at any moment. Once a man is violent towards his wife, it never stops. Men like this never change. You were right to be cautious.
Regarding your present situation with your Mother. You should show pity for her, she is disturbed by hearing the truth and facing up to it is hard for some people. Ghosts of the past come back to haunt us all and those regrets make us do odd things. Perhaps you should tell your Mother that you forgive her and ask her to be at peace and allow you the same gift. You have suffered enough Lea.
Perhaps she still thinks she is right and is trying to save herself the embarrassment. If only she could apologise to you and ask for forgiveness, then life could move forward. My parents never apologised for their bad behaviour and they felt justified in what they did. Some people have no patience when it comes to children.
Another fine chapter in your life Lea, had a wonderful day and think pleasant thoughts as life is good and should be enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you Dolly! I could certainly forgive her if she would only stop. I could get over it and pass it, if she would just stop. Her last maneuver a year ago has cost me alot. She involved my youngest son. Do what she wants to me but not my sons. I have no choice but to leave the area at some point soon and I have no choice but to cut contact at that point with any further engagement will just cost more. My mother will never apologize or acknowledge any wrong doing. I've known this for many years. So I must accept things as they are but protect myself in the process. I thank you for your wonderful review and for great thoughts. Your perspective is important to me and very often. You have great comments and things to share. Thank you for that and thank you for sharing yourself with me. Have a great day!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You somehow seem to divorce yourself from the action, make it seem as if you are there only on suffrage (perhaps as a foster child). Yet you also seem to fear that something terrible will happen to someone around you. Your writing is competent and rich, but you always end with no real answer to your fears.
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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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You somehow seem to divorce yourself from the action, make it seem as if you are there only on suffrage (perhaps as a foster child). Yet you also seem to fear that something terrible will happen to someone around you. Your writing is competent and rich, but you always end with no real answer to your fears.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Hi Carol, thank you so much for your review! I appreciate your curiosity and you're interest in this story. Thank you!
I can only say that the first book which is called Ghost has a lot of abuse I went through. My fears spring from there. Not only for myself going through it but watching my sisters go through it. It was a terrible time. I thank you so much for your review as well. I'm honored to receive your fine rating as well. I hope you have the best afternoon!