If I Was God
Sprucing up the planet33 total reviews
Comment from JSD
Reminds me of that Jim Carrey film - 'Bruce Almighty'. Really well written. The refrain works so well and the ideas you so assuredly write in faultless rhyme are excellent. Well done and good luck with this!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Reminds me of that Jim Carrey film - 'Bruce Almighty'. Really well written. The refrain works so well and the ideas you so assuredly write in faultless rhyme are excellent. Well done and good luck with this!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thanks, John. It's been awhile since I saw that movie. I'll have to dig it out.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I hate that I have no sixes to give. This is most excellent.
If I were God we would speak only truth.
Working bodies would not be just for the youth.
No one would behave uncouth,
If I was God.
Good writing here. Karen
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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I hate that I have no sixes to give. This is most excellent.
If I were God we would speak only truth.
Working bodies would not be just for the youth.
No one would behave uncouth,
If I was God.
Good writing here. Karen
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thanks for the review, Karen. Very nice poetic donation.
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I was inspired by you. Have a good weekend. Karen
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Comment from Lisasview
Very good use of receptive lines...
When we were children we often played the came of If I had one wish...
I always said I would wish for 1,000 wishes...
I wish I could remember even one of those childhood wishes now.
Lisasview
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Very good use of receptive lines...
When we were children we often played the came of If I had one wish...
I always said I would wish for 1,000 wishes...
I wish I could remember even one of those childhood wishes now.
Lisasview
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thanks for the review, Lisa. I wish I had thought of that one when I played that game. That's pretty clever for a child.
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Oh I was always a day dreamer and creative...
Lisa
Comment from Nicki Nance
I think God would agree. Sometimes when people tell me they are mad at God, I think God is probably not too happy with them either. Your poem is a powerful and a great application of the "mile in my shoes" concept.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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I think God would agree. Sometimes when people tell me they are mad at God, I think God is probably not too happy with them either. Your poem is a powerful and a great application of the "mile in my shoes" concept.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Nicki. I'm sure that God is not happy with what is going on down here.
Comment from nomi338
I have written a few poems that address the question of what do we think God sees when he looks at us? Since nothing is hidden from his gaze, just who do we think we are fooling. When charlatans pretend to act in his behalf, lying , stealing, misleading the gullible. Do they not know that there will be a day of reckoning?
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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I have written a few poems that address the question of what do we think God sees when he looks at us? Since nothing is hidden from his gaze, just who do we think we are fooling. When charlatans pretend to act in his behalf, lying , stealing, misleading the gullible. Do they not know that there will be a day of reckoning?
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thanks for the review, Nolan. You make some great points.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
This poem with its mono thyme three lines and the refrain line seem to describe the way I view Heaven. You have two contradicting stanzas.
If every day was warm and sunny, then everyone would be praying for rains at some time. I also think that some criticism is good and should be allowed. Responding well to it is how we grow.
I would be happy in a pollution and war free world.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Have a nice holiday season.
Joan
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Hi
This poem with its mono thyme three lines and the refrain line seem to describe the way I view Heaven. You have two contradicting stanzas.
If every day was warm and sunny, then everyone would be praying for rains at some time. I also think that some criticism is good and should be allowed. Responding well to it is how we grow.
I would be happy in a pollution and war free world.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Have a nice holiday season.
Joan
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Joan. Nice pickup on the sun and rain.
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You're welcome. Maybe somehow state rain only when needed most and only in the right amount. Never floods or droughts.
Joan
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I like your world that you'd create if you were God. it sounds like the Garden of Eden, and more. But it would never happen, unfortunately. I'd also give us all wings to fly, to get rid of all the polution. What a great place our world would be. Are you sure the job isn't open?? LOL. This is a wonderful contest entry, and I can only wish you the very best of luck!! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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I like your world that you'd create if you were God. it sounds like the Garden of Eden, and more. But it would never happen, unfortunately. I'd also give us all wings to fly, to get rid of all the polution. What a great place our world would be. Are you sure the job isn't open?? LOL. This is a wonderful contest entry, and I can only wish you the very best of luck!! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Sandra. I'm going to check the help wanted ads.
Comment from royowen
The problem is with these ideals, they would be wonderful, but the problem is, what would you do with murderers, rapists, child abusers? For in a bad, bad world, nice doesn't quite cut it, heh heh, but I like your world, beautifully wrutten, and I think the job is taken, good Lucille, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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The problem is with these ideals, they would be wonderful, but the problem is, what would you do with murderers, rapists, child abusers? For in a bad, bad world, nice doesn't quite cut it, heh heh, but I like your world, beautifully wrutten, and I think the job is taken, good Lucille, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Roy. I'm probably not qualified anyway.
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Well done
Comment from Sarita Méndez
I appreciate very uch this poem, its rhythm and its rhymes. You tell such right things here, and this world of yours if you were God would be so peaceful and such a paradise to live in...
Thank you for sharing and good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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I appreciate very uch this poem, its rhythm and its rhymes. You tell such right things here, and this world of yours if you were God would be so peaceful and such a paradise to live in...
Thank you for sharing and good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Sarita. We can only dream.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
In a perfect world we all would do a lot of things differently. Life is way too hard sometimes and it seems that others don't always understand. You did a great and I'd give you a go and see what you could do.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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In a perfect world we all would do a lot of things differently. Life is way too hard sometimes and it seems that others don't always understand. You did a great and I'd give you a go and see what you could do.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thanks for the review. I've sent in my application. Now we'll wait and see.