Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Searcher "This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like the most optimistic post I have read so far Lea. Not that I expect you to just write an optimistic tale, we want to hear the truth, but I am just glad that things seem to be looking up for you at last. I also know that life can keep throwing hard balls when we are not looking though. Another fine chapter Lea, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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This sounds like the most optimistic post I have read so far Lea. Not that I expect you to just write an optimistic tale, we want to hear the truth, but I am just glad that things seem to be looking up for you at last. I also know that life can keep throwing hard balls when we are not looking though. Another fine chapter Lea, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much again Dolly! I appreciate all your kind comments always and forever grateful! Okay have the greatest day ever!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This post was calmer. I am wondering if this is the calm before the storm. I am guessing so. Thank you for sharing.
The next morning I woke with (The following morning and a comma after morning)
Oh shit!" He exclaimed. (lower case 'h' on 'he')
"Oh, yes please." I answered. (comma after please,")
I sat down with my coke and waited. (you can omit 'down' it's understood)
Not correcting the rest of the dialogue
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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This post was calmer. I am wondering if this is the calm before the storm. I am guessing so. Thank you for sharing.
The next morning I woke with (The following morning and a comma after morning)
Oh shit!" He exclaimed. (lower case 'h' on 'he')
"Oh, yes please." I answered. (comma after please,")
I sat down with my coke and waited. (you can omit 'down' it's understood)
Not correcting the rest of the dialogue
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you again. I shall do a little self toughest as well. Try get this under control. I have gotten some help and i'm learning well thank you again!
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I write novels and actually writing the story is easy. It's the editing that's the hardest part. Of course, I write romance, your story is much different, so I'm sure writing is hard too. The editing is what many publishers look at. Of course, you can self-publish, but you'll struggle with marketing.
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Thank you so much. I appreciate you're exactly right. You're worthless and important and I have read some of your work too I think that you're an amazing writer and you're where you're at for a reason because you are so anything you have to say to me is like gold. Thank you again.!
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Thank you. I have 5 published books. Another one should be out in January. It's been through 3 editors and is now ready for me to okay it, but I'm finding additional errors, so it may have to go through another editing.
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I believe that that makes sense. I wanted to be perfect even if I can't make it so. I think that with your advice and others I will get there thank you again!
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I know you will.
Comment from EILEEN LAW
Again - powerful clear writing. You bring the reader along on the journey. I could almost feel the kink in my neck! And drink the warm Chai tea. Keep going!
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Again - powerful clear writing. You bring the reader along on the journey. I could almost feel the kink in my neck! And drink the warm Chai tea. Keep going!
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you again!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is sounding much better now. And do I assume that those raised voiced didn't result in your eviction? It's a lovely read after all the trauma you've suffered and the start of an affirmation that not all human life is to be avoided...I hope:) As ever, I always welcome your fine nature descriptions which so perfectly capture the glow of optimism and beauty that can never be extinguished. Take care, Lea! Debbie x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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This is sounding much better now. And do I assume that those raised voiced didn't result in your eviction? It's a lovely read after all the trauma you've suffered and the start of an affirmation that not all human life is to be avoided...I hope:) As ever, I always welcome your fine nature descriptions which so perfectly capture the glow of optimism and beauty that can never be extinguished. Take care, Lea! Debbie x
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you, Gabby, I'm glad you like it. I'm glad you like the nature stuff because I'll just adore it! That's always i'm very happy to see your review Your helpful comment and for supporting me I am eternally grateful! I hope your day is amazing!
Comment from Jacob1395
You tell your life story really well, Lea, in a really engaging way. I really can't imagine the trials you've been through. Another excellent chapter, it was really engaging.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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You tell your life story really well, Lea, in a really engaging way. I really can't imagine the trials you've been through. Another excellent chapter, it was really engaging.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you again you are very insightful. I appreciate your comment very much. Thank you for your review. Thank you for hanging in there with me. Hope you have the best day!
Comment from BethShelby
I'm wondering how people were able to get in touch with you. I would doubt if your folks would be paying for a phone for you. I don't know if people had cell phones then. Maybe you had the phone of the place where you was staying. Did any job you applied for sound promising? The guy that spilled your fries sounds neat.
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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I'm wondering how people were able to get in touch with you. I would doubt if your folks would be paying for a phone for you. I don't know if people had cell phones then. Maybe you had the phone of the place where you was staying. Did any job you applied for sound promising? The guy that spilled your fries sounds neat.
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Yes, no. There was no cell phone saying. I gave him the number of the house that I was at.
Yes I did get a job after many applications that I put out. Thank you back thank you again Beth hope you are well!
Comment from Jim Wile
I loved the concluding lines of your initial remarks: "Can I do or change anything in my life? Can I make it better in the future?
I can try...that is all."
I think you've learned that you can't change anything in the past--only your perception of it, but you do have control over your future. I think what you learned about the past is that almost no one can be trusted, which is such an unfortunate way to view life. Hopefully, though, your fan base here has made you question that earlier perception and has let you know there are really people who care about you and want you to have a happy life and not just use you to fulfill their own desires.
I wonder about that collision in the McDonald's--if it was really an accident or a clumsy ploy for him to meet you. Let's hope he turns out to be a decent guy and not just some opportunist who wants to use you like so many others. In your story, is it time to "shake off the disease the manipulators leave and find a new direction?" I'm guessing you're a long way from there yet. - Jim
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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I loved the concluding lines of your initial remarks: "Can I do or change anything in my life? Can I make it better in the future?
I can try...that is all."
I think you've learned that you can't change anything in the past--only your perception of it, but you do have control over your future. I think what you learned about the past is that almost no one can be trusted, which is such an unfortunate way to view life. Hopefully, though, your fan base here has made you question that earlier perception and has let you know there are really people who care about you and want you to have a happy life and not just use you to fulfill their own desires.
I wonder about that collision in the McDonald's--if it was really an accident or a clumsy ploy for him to meet you. Let's hope he turns out to be a decent guy and not just some opportunist who wants to use you like so many others. In your story, is it time to "shake off the disease the manipulators leave and find a new direction?" I'm guessing you're a long way from there yet. - Jim
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Good question Jim! If you're like excuse the expression. I know it's kind of crude but life is kind of like lousy, sex lots of up and down to no real climax. It's crude but accurate terrible. I know. Please excuse me, I thank you so much for your review. I'm always happy to receive them! I'm happy to have to here you here you have the best reviews ever. Thank you so much!