Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Lost"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
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Comment from Chuck Keller
Sometimes survival requires extreme action
I'm glad you survived this horror
Leaving the relative "comfort" of your space under the stairs and seeking peace elsewhere is frightening but necessary.
I know you made it out because you're writing this.
Like the old saying says:
What doesn't kill you makes you stronger.
I'm not sure about that but it does give you a certain grit that evades those who have it easy
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Sometimes survival requires extreme action
I'm glad you survived this horror
Leaving the relative "comfort" of your space under the stairs and seeking peace elsewhere is frightening but necessary.
I know you made it out because you're writing this.
Like the old saying says:
What doesn't kill you makes you stronger.
I'm not sure about that but it does give you a certain grit that evades those who have it easy
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Gives a person a thick skin on a lot of things for sure! There's not many things in the world that surprise me anymore. Haven't for a long time although I still keep myself on the lookout. I haven't open mind about all things. Really that's how we expand ourselves other than tons of ice cream and jelly donuts. L o l Thank you again, chuck as always. I'm happy to see you here and you're a very talented rider too I hope your holiday was great!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh wow, Lea! Not that E didn't have it coming but I didn't expect that from you! Your totally understandable anger has come to the fore in a way that has left you now, physically, out to retaliate. E is bearing the full brunt of your grievances against the world. No one appears to be on your side except your reader of course! Is this the emergence of the girl who is no longer prepared to be invisible? Well done, Lea! Love Debbie x
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Oh wow, Lea! Not that E didn't have it coming but I didn't expect that from you! Your totally understandable anger has come to the fore in a way that has left you now, physically, out to retaliate. E is bearing the full brunt of your grievances against the world. No one appears to be on your side except your reader of course! Is this the emergence of the girl who is no longer prepared to be invisible? Well done, Lea! Love Debbie x
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Yes, I build up my ladyballs as they call them overtime, begin to my shirt myself over time, it took a while but my anger seems to be the progenitor of a lot of things when it came to surviving and changing my way of doing things. I thank you again thank you so much! You're fine reviews you're fine rating and you're Selfless donation of your time is wonderful to me have a great night!
Comment from BethShelby
I'm wondering now how her mother is going to take the fact she has had a stray living under her stairs, but I'm glad you ran away from the guy your friend set you up with. Apparently her mother must have raised a slut because she does seem to mind sleeping with guys for extra money.
Apparently you like in Western Canada. I had pictured you in East Canada. I did a Canadian Rocky tour once and I loved western Canada. It is beautiful.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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I'm wondering now how her mother is going to take the fact she has had a stray living under her stairs, but I'm glad you ran away from the guy your friend set you up with. Apparently her mother must have raised a slut because she does seem to mind sleeping with guys for extra money.
Apparently you like in Western Canada. I had pictured you in East Canada. I did a Canadian Rocky tour once and I loved western Canada. It is beautiful.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Oh, I'm so glad you liked it. Canada, especially the West Coast. What's called? The Southern West Coast is called the at Florida of Canada. It is the warmest spot in the entire country. But we also have a chunk of desert arid land as they call it right in what we call the okanagan. Yes, she was pimping me out. Alright, got that right? My rage was over the top. I am happy to say that my would be pinned. Got out of the business and she's the postal lady delivers the mail every day. Hope for everyone I guess eh? Thank you again, my friend.
I'm late to see you here i'm i'm always unhappy for your comments. I hope you enjoyed your thanksgiving!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Those mountains sound wonderful Lea.
This girl is no friend of yours and what would her Mother think if she knew what she was doing at night? Oh my goodness Lea, she is a pimp! I am glad you refused to let yourself into this murky world, but with nowhere to live and no money, I fear for you. Another great chapter, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Those mountains sound wonderful Lea.
This girl is no friend of yours and what would her Mother think if she knew what she was doing at night? Oh my goodness Lea, she is a pimp! I am glad you refused to let yourself into this murky world, but with nowhere to live and no money, I fear for you. Another great chapter, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Yeah, unfortunately, I've been in that spot before. Why it's fine because I knew how to survive. But I didn't know how to fit into the real world. Thank you Dolly, I'm so happy you're hanging reading these chapters. I know they're tough some of them. But as usual, you understand me. You always have valuable things to say thank you so much!
Comment from Wendy G
Your story is a powerful and confronting one, and yes, I can see that some chapters will indeed be filled with horror and despair. A few points to edit, as below. Best wishes for your books.
Wendy
Edit: Bird's (birds)
We are nestled in the Valley (valley)
Such (So) much so, it gives me peace.
"Hey man, I tried to help you." She said. ("Hey man, I tried to help you," she said.
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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Your story is a powerful and confronting one, and yes, I can see that some chapters will indeed be filled with horror and despair. A few points to edit, as below. Best wishes for your books.
Wendy
Edit: Bird's (birds)
We are nestled in the Valley (valley)
Such (So) much so, it gives me peace.
"Hey man, I tried to help you." She said. ("Hey man, I tried to help you," she said.
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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I really appreciate the easy corrections that you've seen and your suggestions for edit. Those are like gold to me as far as much I need to learn. I'm a new writer and When I write, I just tend to shoot from the hit. Sometimes my fingers don't cool as fast as my mouth. Lol. Thank you again so much. I appreciate your fine review and your evening and I hope your holiday was grand!
Comment from Jacob1395
I was really interested to know what happened after you left E and the men behind. I can't believe how E treated you as well, and how she blamed you for running away. I don't blame you at all for reacting in the way that you did. Another powerful, brilliantly told chapter, Lea.
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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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I was really interested to know what happened after you left E and the men behind. I can't believe how E treated you as well, and how she blamed you for running away. I don't blame you at all for reacting in the way that you did. Another powerful, brilliantly told chapter, Lea.
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thank you again Jacob. You have some really good way of thinking about you. That's what I like about men, there practical thinkers and don't beat around the bush. Your words are kind and thoughtful and right to the meat of the matter. I'very much appreciate that. Thank you again my friend. Hope you have a great evening!