A Portal Opens
A brain injury results in opening another dimension.32 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Wow, That's different! You might be onto something new here or maybe not. I am
not a sci-fi person, but I find this intriguing, Beth. Is this the start of something but just an offering for the contest? Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Wow, That's different! You might be onto something new here or maybe not. I am
not a sci-fi person, but I find this intriguing, Beth. Is this the start of something but just an offering for the contest? Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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I've never been interest in fantasy. Real but unexplained things do interest me. I perfer to write what I actually know to be true. Several people want me to continue this. but my original idea was to do it once to say I'd tried it. Thanks for a great review and the six stars.
Comment from Navada
What an interesting concept. I really enjoyed this and it is most creative. I found myself actually hoping there was a subsequent chapter or two - I feel that this has the potential to become a much larger story. I have questions about both sides in the other dimension and the third of the world population mesmerised by falsehoods - I'd love to find out what happens next!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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What an interesting concept. I really enjoyed this and it is most creative. I found myself actually hoping there was a subsequent chapter or two - I feel that this has the potential to become a much larger story. I have questions about both sides in the other dimension and the third of the world population mesmerised by falsehoods - I'd love to find out what happens next!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the nice review. I have several people suggesting that I turn this into a longer story. I will give it some thought. Since this it the first time I've tried Science fiction, I'm not totally comfortabel with it but I may continue it.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
This story is inventive and brilliant. You keep the reader's interest right to the conclusion. Bringing in the element of today's society problems woven into your story without it being heavy-handed was so well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Best regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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This story is inventive and brilliant. You keep the reader's interest right to the conclusion. Bringing in the element of today's society problems woven into your story without it being heavy-handed was so well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Best regards,
Mary
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much for a great review and for the six stars.
Beth
Comment from Barry Penfold
An interesting concept for this entry. Believable and with scope for more to come. Well done and I hope you do well in the competition.Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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An interesting concept for this entry. Believable and with scope for more to come. Well done and I hope you do well in the competition.Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thank you Barry. Several people seem to think I should take this further. I'll give it some thought.
Beth
Comment from Jacob1395
I think this could work really well as a longer piece, as I want to know what happens to her next and if these beings allow the portal to remain open. I can totally understand why they've cut of man from this realm, we are definitely too power hungry. A really engaging piece Beth. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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I think this could work really well as a longer piece, as I want to know what happens to her next and if these beings allow the portal to remain open. I can totally understand why they've cut of man from this realm, we are definitely too power hungry. A really engaging piece Beth. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much Jacob. Several people have asked me about extending it into something longer. I'll give it some thought.
Beth
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Why not? It could happen.
Well written. Good work.
I only hope that it is, indeed, only about a third of the population that has crossed over to the dark side.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Why not? It could happen.
Well written. Good work.
I only hope that it is, indeed, only about a third of the population that has crossed over to the dark side.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Thank you, Wayne. I believe it could happen. I hope it only a third of the population too. Somethings it feels like over half.
Beth
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Super cool, really like this one. I'll have an ability such as that, but go through what she went through in order to get it crazy! This is a very interesting story. I always like stories like this. My favorite genre for fantasy or I also like stephen king conner books too. This one struck my interest right away. I think it's an awesome job. I appreciate the ideas behind it and your fluidic way of writing your characters are quite believable. A senior issue with grammar a static sentence structure or subject matter. I hope your evening is awesome!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Super cool, really like this one. I'll have an ability such as that, but go through what she went through in order to get it crazy! This is a very interesting story. I always like stories like this. My favorite genre for fantasy or I also like stephen king conner books too. This one struck my interest right away. I think it's an awesome job. I appreciate the ideas behind it and your fluidic way of writing your characters are quite believable. A senior issue with grammar a static sentence structure or subject matter. I hope your evening is awesome!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Thank you Lea. I've not tried writing fantasy fiction before but I do have some of the things if your can call them abilities that this character does. I see images and patterns behind my eyelids. I've also had dreams come true and once some force took over the wheel of my car and prevented an accident.
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Holy smokes! I run a website called The Oricle
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine inventive story with an element of truth within. Falling over in my home is one of my biggest fears because living alone means that help would not come for quite a while. Having said that, I do try to be careful. Your story is a little scary and this idea of yours is very clever, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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A fine inventive story with an element of truth within. Falling over in my home is one of my biggest fears because living alone means that help would not come for quite a while. Having said that, I do try to be careful. Your story is a little scary and this idea of yours is very clever, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Thank you Dolly. I really appreciate the review. I've fallen many time just tripping over something and being careless but I've never injuured my head. However, I've known someone with head injuries that had strange things happen afterwards.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
That is a very weird way to end up communicating with people in another dimension. It certainly will make the life of the person affected very different going forward. This is an interesting SF/Fantasy story.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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That is a very weird way to end up communicating with people in another dimension. It certainly will make the life of the person affected very different going forward. This is an interesting SF/Fantasy story.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thank you Carol. I think science fiction is weird. I've avoided it in the past but I thought I should at least try writing it.
Beth
Comment from jim vecchio
Something must be in the air! You posted a weird tale very unlike your family drama offerings and I just finished a straight love story with no angles and told in a traditional manner (I will post tomorrow). Maybe we both need to be turned around. Anyhow, this was a virtual 7!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Something must be in the air! You posted a weird tale very unlike your family drama offerings and I just finished a straight love story with no angles and told in a traditional manner (I will post tomorrow). Maybe we both need to be turned around. Anyhow, this was a virtual 7!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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I'm flattered with a virtual seven an and very happy with a real six star reviews. I guess we are both trying to expand the type of writing we do. I really appreciate the review.
Beth
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I don't want to fall into a rut and don't care for writing that dishonors The Lord.