Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Other World P3"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
My prayers are with you.
if a guy desired me, then he must love me too. (Far too many females still fall into that trap.)
"It's okay honey, I like it this way." The mans voice said. (way," The man's voice)
"Your thirsty." he said. "Drink this." He gave me something that tasted like honey and had a weird chemical aftertaste. "What was that?" I slurred. "Untie me." "Take it easy beautiful, just relax." (TRY:
"Your thirsty," he said. "Drink this." He gave me something that tasted like honey and had a weird chemical aftertaste.
"What was that?" I slurred. "Untie me."
"Take it easy beautiful, just relax.")
"You got laid, that's what happened." She said. (happened," she) & and you need to correct the rest of your dialogue)
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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My prayers are with you.
if a guy desired me, then he must love me too. (Far too many females still fall into that trap.)
"It's okay honey, I like it this way." The mans voice said. (way," The man's voice)
"Your thirsty." he said. "Drink this." He gave me something that tasted like honey and had a weird chemical aftertaste. "What was that?" I slurred. "Untie me." "Take it easy beautiful, just relax." (TRY:
"Your thirsty," he said. "Drink this." He gave me something that tasted like honey and had a weird chemical aftertaste.
"What was that?" I slurred. "Untie me."
"Take it easy beautiful, just relax.")
"You got laid, that's what happened." She said. (happened," she) & and you need to correct the rest of your dialogue)
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Hi Barbara, thank you so much for this. Yeah, punctuation is not my strong suit. It is true I will need to edit for Punctuations and some sentence structures issues perhaps. Thank you. I appreciate you pointing out the edits.
That's awesome.. Thanks so much! I hope your day is amazing and I thank you for your fine review and rating!
Comment from patcelaw
I am so sorry that you have to go through this, but I am thrilled that you have been able to write about it and be able to get some freedom from the pain that you suffered from the abuse. I admire your work and I wish you the very best with all of your books. Patricia.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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I am so sorry that you have to go through this, but I am thrilled that you have been able to write about it and be able to get some freedom from the pain that you suffered from the abuse. I admire your work and I wish you the very best with all of your books. Patricia.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Further to my message. Thank you again. Have a great day!
Comment from Jacob1395
This is such a powerful, emotive, and an intense piece of writing. I could sense the fear and feel the anger coming through, and I am really sorry for what you went through. This is a really well told piece and I applaud you for having the courage to tell your story.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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This is such a powerful, emotive, and an intense piece of writing. I could sense the fear and feel the anger coming through, and I am really sorry for what you went through. This is a really well told piece and I applaud you for having the courage to tell your story.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Thank you again thank you so much!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ohhhhhh, Honey. Oh, Sweetie, Sweetie Girl. Not ONE part of that is on you. Not. One. Single. Second of that has ANYTHING to do with perceived .shortcomings of YOURS. You're a grown-up now. You know things. If you were watching this happen to a seventeen-year-old girl, would you for ONE MOMENT think, "Oh, she did this to herself." You know for a fact you would NEVER think that. Because it would be wrong. This is an egregious wrong that was committed against you. I hope the perpetrators suffer long, tortured, horrible lives. You were a child, and they used that to their fullest disgusting advantage. Ugh. Sending you just SOO so much love today, you amazing BRAVE, extremely talented woman.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Ohhhhhh, Honey. Oh, Sweetie, Sweetie Girl. Not ONE part of that is on you. Not. One. Single. Second of that has ANYTHING to do with perceived .shortcomings of YOURS. You're a grown-up now. You know things. If you were watching this happen to a seventeen-year-old girl, would you for ONE MOMENT think, "Oh, she did this to herself." You know for a fact you would NEVER think that. Because it would be wrong. This is an egregious wrong that was committed against you. I hope the perpetrators suffer long, tortured, horrible lives. You were a child, and they used that to their fullest disgusting advantage. Ugh. Sending you just SOO so much love today, you amazing BRAVE, extremely talented woman.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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You're always so kind to me.
Brings tears to my eyes. I appreciate it so very much I hope you know. I'm sure you do. You're understanding this is a great gift too! I appreciate everything you say all your advice and all your kind words. Thank you so much and for the review as well as your fine rating, thank you!
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Always my pleasure, Sweetie. xo
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh God, Lea, this is everything your story was building up to and now, at least, it's out in the open and you've, hopefully, found that much needed release and relief. From one evil you've now been subjected to another, not because you were ever responsible because you can't be responsible when you're still a ghost, still struggling to understand emotions that have never been shown to you. This is a powerful read and your bravery, as ever, is utterly inspiring. There are edits but I wouldn't dare mention them now. Love Debbie x
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Oh God, Lea, this is everything your story was building up to and now, at least, it's out in the open and you've, hopefully, found that much needed release and relief. From one evil you've now been subjected to another, not because you were ever responsible because you can't be responsible when you're still a ghost, still struggling to understand emotions that have never been shown to you. This is a powerful read and your bravery, as ever, is utterly inspiring. There are edits but I wouldn't dare mention them now. Love Debbie x
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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You're so smart truly! I believe Rachelle is going to be assisting me with editing cause punctuation isn't my Is strongest suit. Thank you for your understanding and for clearly seeing the full picture offering your comments that are always wise and empathetic. I thank you for that too, and for your review and fine rating. Don't let the bed bugs bite!
Comment from JSD
But you are not to blame as your naivety was created by the lack in your upbringing. Without parents to warn you and protect you, what could you do, what could you know. Your 'friend' is not a good friend though.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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But you are not to blame as your naivety was created by the lack in your upbringing. Without parents to warn you and protect you, what could you do, what could you know. Your 'friend' is not a good friend though.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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You're absolutely right about that john completely! Yeah I didn't know nothing about Living on the outside as I call it. You are the best, John, I'm very smart too. Thank you so much for your kind review and you're fine rating. Don't let the bed bugs bite!
Comment from BethShelby
Many girls have lived through their first encounter with sex as victim of date rate drugs and I'm sure all of them have some thoughts they might have in someway contributed to what happened. It is something they remember with shame, and some let it ruin their life. In a home where you grew up, you were fortunate it didn't happened to you as a young child. With many they feel scarred for life and as though now they damaged goods and they may as well become promiscuous. Others learn to hate sex and become frigid. I'm wondering how it went for you.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Many girls have lived through their first encounter with sex as victim of date rate drugs and I'm sure all of them have some thoughts they might have in someway contributed to what happened. It is something they remember with shame, and some let it ruin their life. In a home where you grew up, you were fortunate it didn't happened to you as a young child. With many they feel scarred for life and as though now they damaged goods and they may as well become promiscuous. Others learn to hate sex and become frigid. I'm wondering how it went for you.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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I did not experience pleasure in sex until I met my sons father. I tried to keep myself outside of myself so I wouldn't experience so much if that makes sense. Thank you as always beth i'm so happy to have you here! And thank you again for your fine review and your day is great and happy holidays to you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a shocking post Lea, if seems your suffering never ends as this is probably worse than anything you have experienced so far. Learning the hard way is an understatement when it comes to your early life. At least you are still alive at this point. The man involved should be punished with a prison sentence but I doubt that will happen here. I feel sad that he is not punished for doing this to you. I would feel like getting revenge if it were me. As you say, your innocence is lost at this point in time. How very sad this is Lea.
A difficult chapter for you to write and I wonder why you did not expose this man and write his full name in your post? At least it would shame him. Or perhaps you did go to the Police to make a report? Whatever your reasons, I understand.
Love Dolly x x x
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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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This is a shocking post Lea, if seems your suffering never ends as this is probably worse than anything you have experienced so far. Learning the hard way is an understatement when it comes to your early life. At least you are still alive at this point. The man involved should be punished with a prison sentence but I doubt that will happen here. I feel sad that he is not punished for doing this to you. I would feel like getting revenge if it were me. As you say, your innocence is lost at this point in time. How very sad this is Lea.
A difficult chapter for you to write and I wonder why you did not expose this man and write his full name in your post? At least it would shame him. Or perhaps you did go to the Police to make a report? Whatever your reasons, I understand.
Love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Dolly I appreciate you so very much really I do! I never knew the man's full name, only his first name. As for the police, It didn't occur to me at the time. Because I would only end up back at my parents house. My experience with police and social services kept me far away. Thank you for your understanding too. We only know what we know at the time. Can't give away what we don't have. Yes, I learned many things the hard way. Some even worse than hard. I was never prepared to be out in the world. I thank you for your fine review and for your great rating. And I hope you have the best day!