Miranda's Trouble In Paradise
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Mad Woman"Miranda tries to find Dougie.
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Comment from BethShelby
Miranda is a really strong and stubborn character. You have developed her well. Even when she is doing something stupid, one can help but admire her. I enjoy this story.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Miranda is a really strong and stubborn character. You have developed her well. Even when she is doing something stupid, one can help but admire her. I enjoy this story.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Lol. I'm glad you like her. I love that you can admire her even when she does something stupid. That is priceless. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I don't know if I agree with Miranda's Momma or not. Part of me thinks who in the hell is Mitch to decide for Miranda what she needs. It is not his business to make those decisions. Or her Mother's. I am dug into your stories. I like them a lot. Karen
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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I don't know if I agree with Miranda's Momma or not. Part of me thinks who in the hell is Mitch to decide for Miranda what she needs. It is not his business to make those decisions. Or her Mother's. I am dug into your stories. I like them a lot. Karen
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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I'm glad you are enjoying the stories I post. That is nice to hear. Mitch only did it because it was Momma's idea. Thank you for this nice review. Gretchen
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Have a good week. Karen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I love the tension in the beginning when Preston rushes out and his departure seems to be linked to the telephone call Miranda has received. His efforts to stop the woman filling up with diesel are met with derision and ignorance, nicely captured in Miranda's final punch line (great!) And then the unresolved issue of Mitch might now take a turn for the better because, if Miranda is going to listen to anyone, it would be her Momma. Another enjoyable chapter with some developing elements to the story. No errors noted. Well done, Gretchen, Debbie
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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I love the tension in the beginning when Preston rushes out and his departure seems to be linked to the telephone call Miranda has received. His efforts to stop the woman filling up with diesel are met with derision and ignorance, nicely captured in Miranda's final punch line (great!) And then the unresolved issue of Mitch might now take a turn for the better because, if Miranda is going to listen to anyone, it would be her Momma. Another enjoyable chapter with some developing elements to the story. No errors noted. Well done, Gretchen, Debbie
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you, Debbie. I really like Preston. And as mad as she was with her momma, she was relieved Mitch was just a pawn. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well done. Good chapter.
I didn't think Miranda would do it, call Mitch. Pride is pretty stubborn. People will walk right into a fire just to prove they are right.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Well done. Good chapter.
I didn't think Miranda would do it, call Mitch. Pride is pretty stubborn. People will walk right into a fire just to prove they are right.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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She was glad to know Mitch didn't want to do it. You tell the truth about proving themselves right. Great review. Gretchen
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I've lost the context of this in terms of a novel, obviously. However this chapter grips the reader and is well-constructed. I hope the woman putting diesel in her car will figure some more, she is very interesting. kay
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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I've lost the context of this in terms of a novel, obviously. However this chapter grips the reader and is well-constructed. I hope the woman putting diesel in her car will figure some more, she is very interesting. kay
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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I think she'll be back. Maybe with boyfriend in tow. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
Oh my goodness - three dramas. The guy on the phone (how creepy), the diesel ( what a nitwit the woman is!) and M's mother. Now, I have to just wait and hope that she and Mitch will forgive each other and get back together, and that they'll solve the other situation!!! Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Oh my goodness - three dramas. The guy on the phone (how creepy), the diesel ( what a nitwit the woman is!) and M's mother. Now, I have to just wait and hope that she and Mitch will forgive each other and get back together, and that they'll solve the other situation!!! Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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We shall see. Nothing is ever easy with Miranda. I thank you, Wendy, for this awesome review. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Miranda is struggling, first of all Preston tries to rescue a woman from putting diesel in a petrol driven motor, which requires the tank coming off and given a thorough cleaning, unless she actually runs it and wrecks the motor, and then she rings Mitch by the urging of her mum, but leaves a message. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : I've just about (had) enough
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Miranda is struggling, first of all Preston tries to rescue a woman from putting diesel in a petrol driven motor, which requires the tank coming off and given a thorough cleaning, unless she actually runs it and wrecks the motor, and then she rings Mitch by the urging of her mum, but leaves a message. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : I've just about (had) enough
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you for this. I'm wondering if Mitch will reconcile. He's got a smidgen of pride himself. Thanks for catching the spag. Gretchen
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It's either that or stay single
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Now what kind of apology is that? Poor Mitch. He was only trying to help her and she became angry and walked away. He's such a nice guy. Preston is going to be a big help to Marinda. He's a very observant person. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Now what kind of apology is that? Poor Mitch. He was only trying to help her and she became angry and walked away. He's such a nice guy. Preston is going to be a big help to Marinda. He's a very observant person. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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I love Preston. He's going to be a major player in this story, I have a feeling. Thank you for the awesome comments and review. I appreciate the extra star. Gretchen
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I like him too. Sounds good! Nancy:)
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You do a good job of character development. I thought of Preston as a big helpful dog and that is the way you describe him. The phone call is certainly creepy and has upped the tension with the mention of Dougie's favorite beer. Mama does a good job convincing Miranda that the shrink was her idea. Miranda finally sees reason.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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You do a good job of character development. I thought of Preston as a big helpful dog and that is the way you describe him. The phone call is certainly creepy and has upped the tension with the mention of Dougie's favorite beer. Mama does a good job convincing Miranda that the shrink was her idea. Miranda finally sees reason.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Miranda is going to have to pull up her big girl pants and apologize for going AWOL on Mitch. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from damommy
Oh, dear, I do hope Miranda can make up with Mitch. Miranda is a bullheaded woman, and sometimes, our pride stand in our way of making the best decision. I learned the hard way.
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Oh, dear, I do hope Miranda can make up with Mitch. Miranda is a bullheaded woman, and sometimes, our pride stand in our way of making the best decision. I learned the hard way.
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Comment Written 05-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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She is very stubborn. But will usually do the right thing. Will be interesting to see her have to admit she's wrong. Gretchen