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Comment from JSD
Another painful process for you. My heart is in my mouth as I imagine the fears of going back. Let's hope you fatten up a bit before running away again!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Another painful process for you. My heart is in my mouth as I imagine the fears of going back. Let's hope you fatten up a bit before running away again!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Oh, yeah, I'll get a bit bit of a break here. As far as that goes, yes on somethings and no and others it's my grandmother She is in the center of that rabbit hole and in fact the leader. Thank you again, John, I hope you're doing okay. I appreciate you why not reply with a few here. Take it easy on yourself and have a great night!
Comment from BethShelby
I assume these are your mother's partents since the Man wasn't your biological father. I get the impression that the grandmother wants the doctor to say you have mental problems. When he said you were intact, she probably thought you were no long a virgin. I hope you'll get the chance to talk to the sister and find out why she is there. Why does she call you efer? Do you have another grandmother? The social worker said earlier she was talking to your grandmothers.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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I assume these are your mother's partents since the Man wasn't your biological father. I get the impression that the grandmother wants the doctor to say you have mental problems. When he said you were intact, she probably thought you were no long a virgin. I hope you'll get the chance to talk to the sister and find out why she is there. Why does she call you efer? Do you have another grandmother? The social worker said earlier she was talking to your grandmothers.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Just the one grandmother at the time. Must be a typo. I absolutely did get to talk to my sister. And I found out some very pivotal facts. You're so very close to the truth, It's interesting actually. Yes all will be revealed! Thank you again, Beth congratulation on your win as well. Hope you have a great night.
Comment from Jim Wile
I can really picture that big breakfast waiting for you and how you stuffed yourself on it, getting uncomfortably full in the process.
It was wise of your grandparents to send you to the doctor right away. It's just a shame you felt so uncomfortable with the exam and its aftermath. I'm not sure what it was you heard that triggered your feelings of dread, but it seems like it was very real and such a shame that you couldn't rejoice in your rescue but instead had your fears renewed.
I hope you were finally listened to and believed about all the horrors you went through, Lea. - Jim
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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I can really picture that big breakfast waiting for you and how you stuffed yourself on it, getting uncomfortably full in the process.
It was wise of your grandparents to send you to the doctor right away. It's just a shame you felt so uncomfortable with the exam and its aftermath. I'm not sure what it was you heard that triggered your feelings of dread, but it seems like it was very real and such a shame that you couldn't rejoice in your rescue but instead had your fears renewed.
I hope you were finally listened to and believed about all the horrors you went through, Lea. - Jim
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Hi Jim, I wish I could say that life is beautiful beyond that. Life is hardly that and equally unfair to everyone. The rabbit hole goes very deep with my grandmother at the center for which I will write more about. Thank you again, thank you for everything. Thank you for your support.
And your wisdom may your day be great!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Ok, this is, as ever, beautifully written with some stunning imagery ("emerald dappled smile" etc) but it does need a proof read and attention to punctuation. Your story evolves with pace and concludes with a disarming sense of conspiracy among the adults. I became distinctly uncomfortable with that internal examination which, in my view, he had no right to do. Once again you're being treated as though you have no rights or agency over your own body and that is out of order. You're rightfully, full of suspicion. Your grandfather has simply been playful and distant and you feel like an onlooker watching your own life unfold. Small edits: "So I'll ask to try to ask..?" "quickly shut the door and sa(t)"; "rearing (i)ts" "I knew somewhere somehow on one level or another (t)his (one sentence) This excellently moves the story on but, at the same time, seems to mire you further into that sense of vulnerability and isolation. Well done, Lea! Debbie
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Ok, this is, as ever, beautifully written with some stunning imagery ("emerald dappled smile" etc) but it does need a proof read and attention to punctuation. Your story evolves with pace and concludes with a disarming sense of conspiracy among the adults. I became distinctly uncomfortable with that internal examination which, in my view, he had no right to do. Once again you're being treated as though you have no rights or agency over your own body and that is out of order. You're rightfully, full of suspicion. Your grandfather has simply been playful and distant and you feel like an onlooker watching your own life unfold. Small edits: "So I'll ask to try to ask..?" "quickly shut the door and sa(t)"; "rearing (i)ts" "I knew somewhere somehow on one level or another (t)his (one sentence) This excellently moves the story on but, at the same time, seems to mire you further into that sense of vulnerability and isolation. Well done, Lea! Debbie
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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You are so smart so insightful you miss nothing I swear, very valuable, an amazing talent you have... I Went ahead and made those corrections rewrote some things and when it's time for rewrites, I will be super diligent. Thank you again for everything for reviewing reading and all that you do I hope you have a rockin day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your Grandparents were caring people and they gave you shelter, food, clean clothes and took you to the doctor to check your health. All these things your Mother and your Stepfather should have done for you Lea. This chapter is less traumatic and it sounds like you are on the road to recovery here and I am glad your sister is safe too, love Dolly x x x
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Your Grandparents were caring people and they gave you shelter, food, clean clothes and took you to the doctor to check your health. All these things your Mother and your Stepfather should have done for you Lea. This chapter is less traumatic and it sounds like you are on the road to recovery here and I am glad your sister is safe too, love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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We were safe for the short-term. Unfortunately, the rabbit hole will go really eat with my grandmother. At the center, Marco folmore reveal.
Thank you again. I appreciate seeing you and your review as always. Kind and compassionate for which I am truly grateful. Have an awesome night!
Comment from royowen
I think fear of repetition must be normal, I would imagine it would take sometime for the feeling of impending doom to dissipate, but I don't think it will ever vanish, as a parent you endeavour to raise one's children in a protective bubble, but if the trouble in internal how terrible, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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I think fear of repetition must be normal, I would imagine it would take sometime for the feeling of impending doom to dissipate, but I don't think it will ever vanish, as a parent you endeavour to raise one's children in a protective bubble, but if the trouble in internal how terrible, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Yes, thank you so much. I got that appreciate you telling me about that. Fixing issues is very important. I am always willing to listen to my fellow writer or reviewer. I am grateful for it. The kind comments and your compassion, too, thank you!
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Well done