October Days
Wrapped in Autumn39 total reviews
Comment from Navada
How lovely! Autumn has always been one of my favourite seasons, principally because our Australian winters are brisk, but nothing like as freezing as those experienced by you in the Northern Hemisphere. I also love the foliage. Your vocabulary choices are lovely and the final two stanzas reminded me of the parfait layers that life often presents us. Thank you so much for the share.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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How lovely! Autumn has always been one of my favourite seasons, principally because our Australian winters are brisk, but nothing like as freezing as those experienced by you in the Northern Hemisphere. I also love the foliage. Your vocabulary choices are lovely and the final two stanzas reminded me of the parfait layers that life often presents us. Thank you so much for the share.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you Navada for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Janet
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I thought this was an interesting take on autumn days.
My favorite stanza was:
If only fears could blow away
like last year's auburn autumn leaves,
this world would be a joy filled place
of endless possibilities.
and also these lines:
Fall breezes sing sweet melodies.
The sounds are old; the tune is new.
I thought this was definitely a timely, lovely post.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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I thought this was an interesting take on autumn days.
My favorite stanza was:
If only fears could blow away
like last year's auburn autumn leaves,
this world would be a joy filled place
of endless possibilities.
and also these lines:
Fall breezes sing sweet melodies.
The sounds are old; the tune is new.
I thought this was definitely a timely, lovely post.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you Crystie for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate hearing from you and thank you for sharing your favorite lines.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a beautiful poem Janet penned with talent and skill, fine rhymes and metre and a joy to read, you brought the beauty of Autumn to my eyes here, a fine post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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This is a beautiful poem Janet penned with talent and skill, fine rhymes and metre and a joy to read, you brought the beauty of Autumn to my eyes here, a fine post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you Dolly for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Douglas Goff
Agreed! But I guess I should say more. You vividly expressed the glory of fall, which is my favorite time of year!
Halloween is just the cherry on top of the sundae. Thank you for the beautiful read.
D
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Agreed! But I guess I should say more. You vividly expressed the glory of fall, which is my favorite time of year!
Halloween is just the cherry on top of the sundae. Thank you for the beautiful read.
D
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you D for your thoughtful and encouraging review. It's my favorite time of year as well. It's been a little crazy here lately so I'm just getting to my responses and guess what, it's Halloween night.
So----Happy Halloween from my house to yours with a bright red cherry on top of our sundae. (smile).
Blessings
Janet
Comment from lyenochka
Good to see you back, Janet! Thanks for reminding us to see the beauty all around us even as winter approaches. I can't help but read into the lines:
"If only fears could blow away
like last year's auburn autumn leaves,"
that you are concerned about health issues for your husband and I hope all is going well for both of you. Lovely poem!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Good to see you back, Janet! Thanks for reminding us to see the beauty all around us even as winter approaches. I can't help but read into the lines:
"If only fears could blow away
like last year's auburn autumn leaves,"
that you are concerned about health issues for your husband and I hope all is going well for both of you. Lovely poem!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you. It is good to post something again but not sure when it will be again.
Thank you too for your understanding and seeing between the lines.
My husband is getting better - but ever so slowly. Thank you again for your kindness and compassion.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I too think it is important to look for the beauty in nature when other things in our world are in chaos. A lovely descriptive poem and autumnal presentation, Janet.
Cheers
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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I too think it is important to look for the beauty in nature when other things in our world are in chaos. A lovely descriptive poem and autumnal presentation, Janet.
Cheers
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you Pearl for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Mrs. KT
A beautiful and moving poetic verse, Janet, that resonates deeply with me.
I, too, share your thoughts of
If only fears could blow away
like last year's auburn autumn leaves,
this world would be a joy filled place
of endless possibilities.
So much sadness in the world...
But I have learned to acquiesce
and measure joy in other ways --
allowing me to see beyond
the beauty of October days.
Thank you for sharing, and I hope you are staying strong and positive...
diane
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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A beautiful and moving poetic verse, Janet, that resonates deeply with me.
I, too, share your thoughts of
If only fears could blow away
like last year's auburn autumn leaves,
this world would be a joy filled place
of endless possibilities.
So much sadness in the world...
But I have learned to acquiesce
and measure joy in other ways --
allowing me to see beyond
the beauty of October days.
Thank you for sharing, and I hope you are staying strong and positive...
diane
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you diane for your thoughtful and encouraging review and I greatly appreciate those special stars. I always enjoy hearing from you and I'm thankful for your understanding.
My husband is getting better - but ever so slowly so some days I'm strong and positive and some days not-so-much but, God is good and I draw on his strength when mine falters.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A beautifully written song of Autumn which is rich in colour and evocative detail. There is a poignancy associated with October and by the third stanza, there's a wish to see fears blown away like Autumn leaves. That theme continues to preoccupy although, by the end, there's an acceptance that nature's bountiful gifts will, in their turn, help to transcend the trials that have come to bear. Thank you for sharing this well-crafted and atmospheric verse which was a pleasure to read. Debbie
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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A beautifully written song of Autumn which is rich in colour and evocative detail. There is a poignancy associated with October and by the third stanza, there's a wish to see fears blown away like Autumn leaves. That theme continues to preoccupy although, by the end, there's an acceptance that nature's bountiful gifts will, in their turn, help to transcend the trials that have come to bear. Thank you for sharing this well-crafted and atmospheric verse which was a pleasure to read. Debbie
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you Debbie for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from gramalot8
Very beautiful poem bringing all the visions of October to your readers with your expressive words. October is my favorite month, nature wise. The Autumn colors are so vibrant and warm. They can be good for brightening up ones gloomy day. Thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Very beautiful poem bringing all the visions of October to your readers with your expressive words. October is my favorite month, nature wise. The Autumn colors are so vibrant and warm. They can be good for brightening up ones gloomy day. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate hearing from you. (Autumn is my favorite season as well)
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
There is much to praise about this poem. Writing in iambic tetrameter is a unique challenge and you did exceptionally well.
I'm always mindful in this particular form, of putting adjectives before nouns, unessary words and using 3 syllable words unless it is intentional. It can put a hiccup up your metric flow.
Just to give you an example,in your first stanza you informed the reader it's fall in your first line by saying it's October
In your second line you say
Fall breezes sing...
The reader already knows its fall.
The use of the word "and" in its place keeps the flow smoother from the first line to the second...
And breezes sing sweet melodies with...
(Brilliant line by the way)
Iambic tetrameter is a tricky scheme and you are to be commended for even crafting one all through so brilliantly.
Like I stated these things are a matter of intention and it's ultimately up to the author.
The accents on the syllables of each line is the key...
da-DUM, da-Dum, da- DUM, da-DUM =8
It stands as a six regardless.
Just took the time to give you some food for thought because I love this poem so much.
I'm a retired teacher and have taught poetry before.
Best autmn-related poem I've read here yet! It really resonated with me.
Kudos.
Luv&stuff!
Katiemaedead
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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There is much to praise about this poem. Writing in iambic tetrameter is a unique challenge and you did exceptionally well.
I'm always mindful in this particular form, of putting adjectives before nouns, unessary words and using 3 syllable words unless it is intentional. It can put a hiccup up your metric flow.
Just to give you an example,in your first stanza you informed the reader it's fall in your first line by saying it's October
In your second line you say
Fall breezes sing...
The reader already knows its fall.
The use of the word "and" in its place keeps the flow smoother from the first line to the second...
And breezes sing sweet melodies with...
(Brilliant line by the way)
Iambic tetrameter is a tricky scheme and you are to be commended for even crafting one all through so brilliantly.
Like I stated these things are a matter of intention and it's ultimately up to the author.
The accents on the syllables of each line is the key...
da-DUM, da-Dum, da- DUM, da-DUM =8
It stands as a six regardless.
Just took the time to give you some food for thought because I love this poem so much.
I'm a retired teacher and have taught poetry before.
Best autmn-related poem I've read here yet! It really resonated with me.
Kudos.
Luv&stuff!
Katiemaedead
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you Katiemaedead for your Stellar review, encouraging remarks, food for thought and those special stars. I appreciate your helpful comments and I'm so pleased that "October Days" resonated with you. I wish you were sitting beside me when I was making some poetic choices. Writing a whole piece in the same tense is a real challenge for me at times.
Blessings
Janet
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You're most Welcome Janet. I wish lot of people would sit beside me as I have things I'm good at and things I'm not so good at.
I forgot I intended to bookcase this.
Take care!