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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Bad news is always hard to take. How mundane that another person is being called in to possibly hear that same awful result of tests. Good story with very few words.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023
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Bad news is always hard to take. How mundane that another person is being called in to possibly hear that same awful result of tests. Good story with very few words.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Carol, for your kind review and thoughtful comments, all greatly appreciated! Debbie x
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You show both the trepidation of the patient awaiting her results and the less than compassionate Doctor in this Dribble flash fiction, Debbie. Unfortunately there are some like that around. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023
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You show both the trepidation of the patient awaiting her results and the less than compassionate Doctor in this Dribble flash fiction, Debbie. Unfortunately there are some like that around. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Valda, for your kind review and thoughtful comments. Yes, this doesn't speak for all but, in my experience, some (with their desk barriers and insensitive manners etc) have a lot to learn about doctor/patient relations! Take care Debbie x
Comment from Lea Tonin1
This is great, the first paragraph of this short story really makes the whole thing order an excellent use of words and do it in so short, a space really is remarkable!
I like the fingers in the ears picture so many times I would have liked to have done just the same!
This short story is grammatically perfect aesthetically pleasing and very well written a great submission! I hope you're having a great night!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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This is great, the first paragraph of this short story really makes the whole thing order an excellent use of words and do it in so short, a space really is remarkable!
I like the fingers in the ears picture so many times I would have liked to have done just the same!
This short story is grammatically perfect aesthetically pleasing and very well written a great submission! I hope you're having a great night!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Lea, for your lovely review and thoughts! I'm so grateful for your time and care. Debbie
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Being told your tests have come back possitive is bad enough on its own, but to be told it in such an uncaring way, with a large desk between you is monstrous!! This is an excellent flash fiction story, well done! Good luck in the contest!! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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Being told your tests have come back possitive is bad enough on its own, but to be told it in such an uncaring way, with a large desk between you is monstrous!! This is an excellent flash fiction story, well done! Good luck in the contest!! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Sandra, for your kind review and thoughts and for nailing it! (There's been a little bit of confusion:( ) Always appreciated. Debbie xx
Comment from LJbutterfly
I would have flown out of there also. There are doctors just as cold as your dribble fiction demonstrated. I once had a rheumatologist tell me my fingers were going to curl up. He even demonstrated. I left his office and never went back. My fingers never curled.
This is a great short story that resonated with my spirit. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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I would have flown out of there also. There are doctors just as cold as your dribble fiction demonstrated. I once had a rheumatologist tell me my fingers were going to curl up. He even demonstrated. I left his office and never went back. My fingers never curled.
This is a great short story that resonated with my spirit. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much for this! I really value your lovely review and understanding here. I appreciate exactly your experience. I was told all the negative issues that would develop and, when someone tells you that so assertively, you're forever expecting them to occur (they haven't entirely). Nothing positive. I've also had a patronising drawing sketched (on a large dividing desk!) that could have been much more simply and effectively explained in a few words:( Thank you again for your time and thoughts. Debbie
Comment from Diana Harris
You have painted a gut wrenching picture with your words here. The feeling of being that patient and feeling like just another chart to see is very vivid. We have all felt something similar, if not quite as dire. Emotion evoked! Excellent job. Thank you. Diana
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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You have painted a gut wrenching picture with your words here. The feeling of being that patient and feeling like just another chart to see is very vivid. We have all felt something similar, if not quite as dire. Emotion evoked! Excellent job. Thank you. Diana
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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Wow, thank you again! I'm so pleased you nailed my intention. I know it doesn't chime with everyone's experience but, for me, the doctor's 'bedside manner' (there should never be a desk/barrier between patient and doctor) and the receptionist's coldness leave a lot to be desired. Thank you so much for your time and thoughts. Debbie
Comment from Jacob1395
It can be so scary waiting to hear back results after medical tests and you managed to capture that well in a few short lines. This also shows how many doctors can be so cold when delivering results and then, for them, it's on to the next person. A well written, engaging piece. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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It can be so scary waiting to hear back results after medical tests and you managed to capture that well in a few short lines. This also shows how many doctors can be so cold when delivering results and then, for them, it's on to the next person. A well written, engaging piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much for your excellent review and for nailing what I wanted to say. I really appreciate your words, thoughts and good wishes. Take care Debbie
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
We don't know if you are pregnant. going through menopause, have a cancerous lesion, have a broken collarbone, or what is going on with your health.
I hope you are okay. Karen
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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We don't know if you are pregnant. going through menopause, have a cancerous lesion, have a broken collarbone, or what is going on with your health.
I hope you are okay. Karen
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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It doesn't matter does it? It's obviously serious and partly fictional. A generic take on the indifference in doctor's surgeries (in my experience). There shouldn't have been the barrier of a table/desk between doctor and patient and, well, receptionists (in my experience) are usually plain beastly! Thanks for the review, Karen, always welcome and appreciated. Debbie x
Comment from Sarah Robin
This was a great post. I wanted nurse to call out
"Wait". But we got "next" instead. This post was very well done. You said a lot in fifty words. Sarah
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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This was a great post. I wanted nurse to call out
"Wait". But we got "next" instead. This post was very well done. You said a lot in fifty words. Sarah
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much for this exceptional review! I'm really honoured by it. And thank you for absolutely nailing it (it has confused at times:( ) Your thoughts are greatly valued. Take care Debbie
Comment from lyenochka
Superb job with this dribble flash fiction! I loved your loaded verb choice of "marooned" showing how lonely and desperate the narrator feels while awaiting for the medical verdict. And the "positive" for a bad illness like cancer would be awful. If it were "pregnancy" it could also cause the patient to flee. Hope this does well in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023
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Superb job with this dribble flash fiction! I loved your loaded verb choice of "marooned" showing how lonely and desperate the narrator feels while awaiting for the medical verdict. And the "positive" for a bad illness like cancer would be awful. If it were "pregnancy" it could also cause the patient to flee. Hope this does well in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Helen, for your kind review and thoughts which I always greatly appreciate! I just wanted to convey a sense of sheer panic when, sometimes, these appointments take place and a criticism (which I know isn't always the case) of a lack of compassion in the doctor's surgery. For example, there should never be the barrier of a table/desk between patient and doctor and receptionists can be plain beastly (again my experience). Bless you for your good wishes. Debbie x
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Interesting. Now that I recall my doctor visits here, we never have a desk or table between us. The desk is usually facing a wall and only holds the computer but there is no barrier between doctor and patient.
