Comment from Elizabeth Henderson

Good

Interesting read. Well written but I found it a little hard to follow. For instance you begin with, "sitting here crying like a bunch of sheep.." (implying many) but then you say "approaching my site" (implying only one person). Is this story about a bunch of people or just one person? I found myself wondering who else is sitting crying with the girl? I'm assuming from the story that the young girl was abused by her father, but again it isn't clear. Perhaps this is on purpose since this is a chapter in a book. Anyway, it left me wondering what was going to happen next, both to the girl as well as the lady with the walking stick.

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 Comment Written 18-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2023

Hi thank you so much! The line is actually "bawling like a bunch of sheep". Referring to myself (the girl) while I sat there loudly crying...sounds like a sheeps call. It's a metaphor. So this being a metaphor there wouldn't be other people and there is myself and the other in this chapter.
Below in my notes it mentions that this chapter in a book, yes, you are correct, called "Ghost" It's autobiographical in nature and it can be found on my portfolio I welcome you to read if you wish it will give you a better idea of what's going on, and you may find it interesting. Feel free to have a read if you like.
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