Sories Poetically Speaking
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Tempted to Stifle"A complete story in written as a poem.
29 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A funny and very creative approach to a common problem.
Great job in rhyming
Great picture compliments your words.
I enjoyed reading.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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A funny and very creative approach to a common problem.
Great job in rhyming
Great picture compliments your words.
I enjoyed reading.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Thank you Mary. I'm glad you liked my poem. I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from JSD
You don't need the comma in line 6, I'm sure. But this is a very funny and clever take on the prompt of Temptation. Your rhyme and rhythm are excellently assured. I love it. Well done and good luck!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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You don't need the comma in line 6, I'm sure. But this is a very funny and clever take on the prompt of Temptation. Your rhyme and rhythm are excellently assured. I love it. Well done and good luck!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the review and commits and pointing a comma that didn't belone. I'm glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from Annmuma
Very creative approach to the contest theme! I found it humorous, nice rhythm and easy to identify with. Great job. This piece should do well in the contest. ann
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Very creative approach to the contest theme! I found it humorous, nice rhythm and easy to identify with. Great job. This piece should do well in the contest. ann
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much for a great review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Ben Colder
Best to you, this reminds me of a person who suffered with this problem when I was under the tent preaching in New Mexico. Her request was for God to help her husband with this problem. I am sure He did and they stayed together until death. Sending blessing your way.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Best to you, this reminds me of a person who suffered with this problem when I was under the tent preaching in New Mexico. Her request was for God to help her husband with this problem. I am sure He did and they stayed together until death. Sending blessing your way.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the review. The person who prayed for God to help her husband may have had God help her to tolerate the problem. Either way I sure God answers prayer.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh dear, I know this all too well as my husband used to snore and it drove me crackers! You made me smile here Beth, loved the matching rhymes and sentiments, a good post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Oh dear, I know this all too well as my husband used to snore and it drove me crackers! You made me smile here Beth, loved the matching rhymes and sentiments, a good post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Dolly. I really appreciate the review. Snoring is very annoying, and you feel guilty for your thoughts because you know they are doing it deliberately.
Comment from Mimi Linny
This is just too funny! Love the perfect rhyme and rhythm of each stanza! You did a great job of creating the scene and added the funny picture to match the temptation! Nicely done!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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This is just too funny! Love the perfect rhyme and rhythm of each stanza! You did a great job of creating the scene and added the funny picture to match the temptation! Nicely done!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much Mimi. I appreciate you dropping by to review my poem. I'm glad you found it funny.
Beth
Comment from jake cosmos aller
great witty poem about living with a snorer
The doctor had a nose device to help him get more air,
and now things are more pleasant in the bed that they both share.
Still, Stu makes sure she is asleep before his eyes dare close.
He's too afraid to take the chance she won't mess with his nose.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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great witty poem about living with a snorer
The doctor had a nose device to help him get more air,
and now things are more pleasant in the bed that they both share.
Still, Stu makes sure she is asleep before his eyes dare close.
He's too afraid to take the chance she won't mess with his nose.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the nice review. I appreciate it.
Beth
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This is a completely different kind of temptation - poor Stu is afraid to tempt her to mess with him again! I say it every time you post a poem, but I enjoy it. This was funny and rhymed perfectly.
A sure top-three for this contest, I think. Good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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This is a completely different kind of temptation - poor Stu is afraid to tempt her to mess with him again! I say it every time you post a poem, but I enjoy it. This was funny and rhymed perfectly.
A sure top-three for this contest, I think. Good luck.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Thank you Pam. I really appreciate the review. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. I managed to place third and second in the last two committee contests and that was shock to me. It will likely be a while before I place again.
Beth
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Looks like you were wrong about that - congratulations:-) You're on a roll.
Comment from Wendy G
What a fun entry for the temptations contest. I can fully identify with Susie, and understand her frustration. Your poem was very cleverly and humorously written, with very smooth metre and excellent rhyme.
Wendy
Edit the title: ("Stifle" not "stiffle")
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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What a fun entry for the temptations contest. I can fully identify with Susie, and understand her frustration. Your poem was very cleverly and humorously written, with very smooth metre and excellent rhyme.
Wendy
Edit the title: ("Stifle" not "stiffle")
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the review. I'm so glad you found it fun to read.
Beth
Comment from jmdg1954
Very nicely conveyed, Beth.
A spouses demise at the hands (or nose) of the snore.
Funny ending with hubby waiting for her to fall asleep for his own safety.
Excellent rhymes. Nicely done.
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Very nicely conveyed, Beth.
A spouses demise at the hands (or nose) of the snore.
Funny ending with hubby waiting for her to fall asleep for his own safety.
Excellent rhymes. Nicely done.
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Thank you John. I'm glad you found the ending funny. He's wise not to take a chance.
Beth
