Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

These two verses together blend so perfectly to create a sensual moment in time with this build-up of colour and passion to the climax of the satori. Beautifully done! Debbie

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 Comment Written 15-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Gypsy hugs

Comment from BermyBye50

Excellent

Gypsy,

This is another masterpiece of Japenese poetry. You have brilliantly crafted an exceptional Tanka and Haiku poem. You are without exception the standard bearer for Japanese poetry forms and Haikus. I will not be surprised if you achieve the # 1 ranking on Fanstory for 2023. You are a talented and highly skilled poet and mentor by example to me in learning the art of creating Japanese poetry. I'm only sorry I could not give this poem a 6 star review as I have used all the 6s I've been allotted.

All the best,

Eugene



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 Comment Written 15-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023

It's okay, your kind words are better.

Thanks you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Gypsy hugs