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Coffee With Iris

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Two opposites meet and connect.

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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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D'you know I can't find words for this! It's as if you're actually Iris and experiencing all these symptoms yourself! The story is exquisitely written, evoking a scene of deep pathos and yet always a much needed element of humour to lighten the mood for a moment. Well done, Gretchen! Debbie

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    Thank you, Debbie. I watched my mom struggle to breath for se real years. You don't forget that. Gretchen
Comment from JSD
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Oh you are so skilled. Heart in mouth stuff. I hope he can be there for him. Don't let her die alone Gretchen, please. Thank you, again, for sharing this wonderful tale.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    Thank you so much. Death can sometimes be beautiful. Stay tuned. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is a sad post as Iris calls for an ambulance and is take away to hospital, could this be the end for Iris I wonder? She has great faith in Jameson and I pictured the typewriter sitting on the desk just as it was left by its owner, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    Thanks, Dolly. Glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I don't have a six!! OMG! Iris is going, and they didn't understand she wants Jameson with her! I knew this was coming, but it's still a huge shock. I really feel that Iris is family. Will someone know to get Jameson? Is this really the end for her? I suspect it is. Gretchen, you have done an amazing job with this scene, it's incredible. It's as if I was there, hearing the small talk, the warmth of that kind paramedic, her heart speeding up, the sirens, I was there all the way through. Well done, my friend, I can't wait for the next part and I'll have another bunch of 6s. Love and hugs, Sandra xx

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    No six needed. You care about them both. That is enough. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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good wrtg fel hut both palms right kne pas wrd arond wil be off a whil. krn**********************************************************************************************************************************************

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    Heal fast. Sorry about your accident. Prayers. Gretchen
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 25-Aug-2023
    after sleeping quite a bit I can report and pass the news around please as I can only peck with one or two fingers,
    My right hand is not bruised up just sore. My right hand is deeply bruised and not functional. Left leg fine. Right leg mostly okay except for knee which is all bruised up and very tight. Could have been so much worse. I am lucky. Won't be on much for a while. Thanks for all the best wishes and prayers. Karen
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 25-Aug-2023
    reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 25-Aug-2023 after sleeping quite a bit I can report and pass the news around please as I can only peck with one or two fingers,
    My right hand is not bruised up just sore. My right hand is deeply bruised and not functional. Left leg fine. Right leg mostly okay except for knee which is all bruised up and very tight. Could have been so much worse. I am lucky. Won't be on much for a while. Thanks for all the best wishes and prayers. Karen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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It seems too soon for Iris to lose her fight to live. Jamison will have good memories of his last time with her if this is that. Then he's in for a real shock.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    Thank you, Carol. I'm glad you liked this. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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It sounds as though this is the end for Iris. I have a congestive heart and a DNR. Every morning I can hear my heartbeat in my ears. I am going deaf but I can sure hear that. LOL This is good writing Gretchen because you tell it like it is . Well done. Nancy:)

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    Nancy, as always, thank you. Love hearing from you. Gretchen
Comment from jmdg1954
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Damn it! I knew the end was near, but was hoping it was a few chapters away.

You drew us in with this sad chapter, the way you drew us into all the chapters.

One part for me I found just a bit awkward...

I fumble for my phone, pressing the number for emergency services. While the operator takes my information, the paramedics, police and fire department all show up.

I think before this paragraph when she's putting the photo albums away, you should mention somehow that Jameson had already left.

I thought he was still there.
Could just be me...

Excellent post!
John

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    I'll go back and look at it. Thanks for the suggestion. I'm dreading the next couple of chapters but it has to be finished. Gretchen
Comment from Teri7
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This is a great chapter but it's at a hanging point. Now I will be waiting for the next chapter. I hope something really good happens. You used great descriptive words and great dialogue! love and blessings, teri

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    Thanks, Teri. It's pretty evident what's going to happen but death can be a beautiful thing as well. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
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It sounds like it might be at the end, will Jameson come. It's quite a sad episode, I get attached to your characters, and Iris is no exception, as is Jameson, but he will live on, but will remember Iris as a special friend and confidante, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    Thanks, Roy. I'm glad you liked it. Gretchen
reply by royowen on 25-Aug-2023
    A pleasure