2023 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Relentless Autumn Storm"-
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Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
I read the sadness this poem generates within my soul. On reading the first two lines it could be just as it says... but the sweeping newspapers, the wet cardboard, working for food signs, takes this poem to a whole different level of consciousness.
I thought it very clever you tangle gold and crimson... obviously the colours of autumn leaves, but I read it as the poor, and homeless co-existing in the very same area as the well off, the filthy rich... only one of these demographics has doors.
Most beautiful presentation, image, colour and impact... even the hint of purple dusk peaking through the left hand corner brings the signal of yet another cold and lonely night.
With our thoughts we create...
decent action.
Warm regards,
James.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Hi MariVal,
I read the sadness this poem generates within my soul. On reading the first two lines it could be just as it says... but the sweeping newspapers, the wet cardboard, working for food signs, takes this poem to a whole different level of consciousness.
I thought it very clever you tangle gold and crimson... obviously the colours of autumn leaves, but I read it as the poor, and homeless co-existing in the very same area as the well off, the filthy rich... only one of these demographics has doors.
Most beautiful presentation, image, colour and impact... even the hint of purple dusk peaking through the left hand corner brings the signal of yet another cold and lonely night.
With our thoughts we create...
decent action.
Warm regards,
James.
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Thank you, James. I hope you and Jade are having a wonderful weekend. Yes, I wrote it intuitively but reading it now, I see the leaves colors can have a deeper meaning. I am happy you noticed it. You are the best reviewer. I worked helping homeless people for three years. It was very rewarding and I learned a lot from my clients. I started several groups for them, besides helping them with getting basic needs, Folk art, AA groups, employment skills, and budgeting for the ones with social security income. Once I was homeless for one day... that is another story. The sad thing was that not all homeless were the sterotipical. We had families with small children who were out of work. In America, many people live one paycheck away from homelessness.
Take care, James. I hope you are having good weather. We are having storm and flood warnings.
Besitos y abrazos
MariVal
"Not only slugs leave trails of homelessness." - Florin-Marian Hera, Ten Loud Rocks
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I slept rough on the streets for a while when my life went a tad haywire... I guess that's what my surfing and elecucution story is alluding to down the track. I was sixteen and naive to that scene... scary and eye-opening for sure.
Had a small chuckle to myself with the quote you left... guess they should have teamed up with a snail, hey?
Stay safe and away from any flood affected areas if and when you can... and a beautiful-peaceful weekend to you Reina Lobo Gitana.
Never be a prisoner of your past,
it was just a lesson, not a life sentence.-author unknown.
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Having a bad day I hope you're well.
Abracitos
Marival
"We are not meant to be perfect. We are meant to be whole". -- Oprah Winfrey.
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Wishing you better headspace and the caring that goes with that dear friend.
I think 'perfect' may be one of those words that conjurer's up expectation.
Healing thoughts!
Comment from lyenochka
I think it's when the weather is harshest with extreme heat or cold and storms that the homeless are most vulnerable. You show us the signs of the homeless in the park with " wet cardboard, and work for food sign" which describes the scene accurately.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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I think it's when the weather is harshest with extreme heat or cold and storms that the homeless are most vulnerable. You show us the signs of the homeless in the park with " wet cardboard, and work for food sign" which describes the scene accurately.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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I don't know if I told you, but I worked for homeless people for three years. It was a very rewarding job. Thank you, big sister (*=*)
love xoxox
marival
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Yes, I remember! You have the compassion to do that work! 💖
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like the debris has accumulated with the Autumn leaves here to make a mess in the park, a mix of nature and human waste here, am ambient write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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This sounds like the debris has accumulated with the Autumn leaves here to make a mess in the park, a mix of nature and human waste here, am ambient write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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thank you very much, Dolly. I hope you are having a wonderful weekend. :)
gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your Gogyohka poem- nice picture presentation - poem flows together nicely connecting-
Good metaphors of details - cardboard -newspapers- food sign - Good job AP
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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I like your Gogyohka poem- nice picture presentation - poem flows together nicely connecting-
Good metaphors of details - cardboard -newspapers- food sign - Good job AP
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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"To the world you may be just one person, but to one person you may be the world."--Dr Seuss
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Amazing quote - says it all.
Needed to read this today- funny how it all works- hug
Comment from Iza Deleanu
My Beautiful Rose: you have a way with words:) every time I read something posted by you, I am mesmerized:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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My Beautiful Rose: you have a way with words:) every time I read something posted by you, I am mesmerized:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from GWHARGIS
I have to say, I liked the fury of this poem. I could see the wet debris blowing around. Your use of color and texture were exquisite. Thank you for sharing this. Gretchen
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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I have to say, I liked the fury of this poem. I could see the wet debris blowing around. Your use of color and texture were exquisite. Thank you for sharing this. Gretchen
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
