Revival
The Fabulous Free Versers Club. Topic- dust38 total reviews
Comment from karenina
It's fascinating how you draw on our senses throughout... We see the dust, we imagine her touching it, we hear the old stool...
This sets your free verse apart. I'm emtionally invested and then can fully imagine the memories taking over and the sudden need to stir the passion of music once again!
Wow.
Karenina
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It's fascinating how you draw on our senses throughout... We see the dust, we imagine her touching it, we hear the old stool...
This sets your free verse apart. I'm emtionally invested and then can fully imagine the memories taking over and the sudden need to stir the passion of music once again!
Wow.
Karenina
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
Comment from LJbutterfly
As a pianist, every word of this beautiful poem resonates with me. Your description is filled with vivid imagery that serves as a trigger. I've owned a piano all my life, but had to sell my piano prior to my move to another state. There was no space for it.
"She hesitates, then touches a key." SHE is me, tearfully longing to sweep my fingers over piano keys. This poem is sheer creative beauty.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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As a pianist, every word of this beautiful poem resonates with me. Your description is filled with vivid imagery that serves as a trigger. I've owned a piano all my life, but had to sell my piano prior to my move to another state. There was no space for it.
"She hesitates, then touches a key." SHE is me, tearfully longing to sweep my fingers over piano keys. This poem is sheer creative beauty.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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I am honored by your kind words, thank you so much!
Comment from Nina Sexton
I loved the progression of this poem. By the time you get to the bottom of the dust, it feels as if you've witnessed a symphony perform a Beethoven piece. Nice work here. Have a good day.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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I loved the progression of this poem. By the time you get to the bottom of the dust, it feels as if you've witnessed a symphony perform a Beethoven piece. Nice work here. Have a good day.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Nina, thank you so much for this comment. I'm honored! Xo
Comment from PUPA
An awesome well written poem that made me visualise the scene of that old piano and the dust. I longed to reach the end to happily see she did use it and revived the old piano after all.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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An awesome well written poem that made me visualise the scene of that old piano and the dust. I longed to reach the end to happily see she did use it and revived the old piano after all.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Thank you, that means a lot!!
Comment from Mintybee
This is a brilliant poem. I love how it builds up to the conclusion. Each stanza is lovely, and they work together to move from a silent, dusty piano, to the reawakening of a love to play the piano. I see this poem has recognized status. You earned it. I love this poem.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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This is a brilliant poem. I love how it builds up to the conclusion. Each stanza is lovely, and they work together to move from a silent, dusty piano, to the reawakening of a love to play the piano. I see this poem has recognized status. You earned it. I love this poem.
Mintybee
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, mintybee! I'm honored. Xo
Comment from BermyBye50
Jessica,
This is masterfully written free verse on the subject of dust. Your muse - the idle piano is perfect as the medium for creating and describing the dusts impact on the musician and the piano resulting in the lack of the piano's musical voice expounding its warmth and emotional joy to the hearers of if inspiring sounds. Each stanza is carefully curated to express the long missed magic of the pianist playing exquisite music upon the neglected piano keys. If this was a contest entry it would win hands down. Well done.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Jessica,
This is masterfully written free verse on the subject of dust. Your muse - the idle piano is perfect as the medium for creating and describing the dusts impact on the musician and the piano resulting in the lack of the piano's musical voice expounding its warmth and emotional joy to the hearers of if inspiring sounds. Each stanza is carefully curated to express the long missed magic of the pianist playing exquisite music upon the neglected piano keys. If this was a contest entry it would win hands down. Well done.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Eugene, I?m honored by your review. Thank you so much for your kind and insightful words. Truly means the world!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from estory
I loved the wafting rhythm of the meter in the stanzas, the carefully composed scene of the pianist sitting down at the piano and bringing the music in it back to life. I thought you had some really colorful, evocative images in this; the piano sitting there neglected under its coating of dust, the sunlight catching the little particles of dust in the air above it that seemed to stand for the unrealized notes about to come back into the world. Romantic, in that captures this poignant moment in the life of a musician. estory
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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I loved the wafting rhythm of the meter in the stanzas, the carefully composed scene of the pianist sitting down at the piano and bringing the music in it back to life. I thought you had some really colorful, evocative images in this; the piano sitting there neglected under its coating of dust, the sunlight catching the little particles of dust in the air above it that seemed to stand for the unrealized notes about to come back into the world. Romantic, in that captures this poignant moment in the life of a musician. estory
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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I'm honored by this review, thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Terry Broxson
Jessica, this is a very nicely written poem. You have created a visual image of the piano and the pianist very effectively. I can see her hand and fingers moving and hear the notes develop as they stir the dust (excellent sights and sounds). Well done. Terry.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Jessica, this is a very nicely written poem. You have created a visual image of the piano and the pianist very effectively. I can see her hand and fingers moving and hear the notes develop as they stir the dust (excellent sights and sounds). Well done. Terry.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Terry!
Comment from Aussie
Brilliant! I could see the old piano sitting beside the window with dust moats dancing in the sunlight, the piano felt lost and needed to breathe. She lifted the lid and breathe it did.
This a super poem for the Fabulous Free Versers Club. Wishing you good luck. K xx
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Brilliant! I could see the old piano sitting beside the window with dust moats dancing in the sunlight, the piano felt lost and needed to breathe. She lifted the lid and breathe it did.
This a super poem for the Fabulous Free Versers Club. Wishing you good luck. K xx
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, that means the world!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These dormant objects are brought to life by good players and I enjoyed your free-write for the club as I heard the gentle thud of the keys and the music of the piano, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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These dormant objects are brought to life by good players and I enjoyed your free-write for the club as I heard the gentle thud of the keys and the music of the piano, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Dolly! Xo