Swift Water Rescue
Teenager loses her dog18 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
Kay, This is a very well written story full of great suspense with the young girl and her dog getting out in that storm. I didn't think either of them would be for making this a happy ending, even if it wasn't in real life. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Kay, This is a very well written story full of great suspense with the young girl and her dog getting out in that storm. I didn't think either of them would be for making this a happy ending, even if it wasn't in real life. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Yes, Teri, she was swept away and never found. There was no dog involved. I made it a happy ending but it wasn't. Bless you, my dear friend. K xx
Comment from aryr
Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Aussie/ Kay. There is such devastation for all who live close to the river, whether it is in the UK, the USA or in Australia. People die and people are frustrated. Blessings n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Aussie/ Kay. There is such devastation for all who live close to the river, whether it is in the UK, the USA or in Australia. People die and people are frustrated. Blessings n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Hello, my friend, many thanks for reading. I gave it a happy ending but she was never found. It was a scary time during those six weeks of floods. Love, Kay xx
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I know that these were reasons behind these scary times but we can pray upon it. You are so welcome, Kay.
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For every man there opens a highway and a low, each man decides which way his soul shall go.
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So true!
Comment from lyenochka
Whether this wins or not, this story is a winner! I loved the descriptions you added for this dramatic situation. I remember reading about the flooding from Wendy's writings last year. Great idea to have a dog and girl being saved and Toby helped get attention to Heather.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Whether this wins or not, this story is a winner! I loved the descriptions you added for this dramatic situation. I remember reading about the flooding from Wendy's writings last year. Great idea to have a dog and girl being saved and Toby helped get attention to Heather.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Hi Lena, I made it a happy ending - it wasn't. She didn't have a dog and her little body was never found. Blessings and thanks for reading. Love, Kay xx
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Sigh.
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Amen.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh wow, you really brought this awful event to life with very evocative descriptive skill. I'm particularly fearful of water at the best of times but this event sounded absolutely horrendous. I can fully understand why you wanted to give it a positive ending but, equally, I think you would have mastered the reality of what actually happened and the momentum of your piece would have driven this home with greater impact. But this must be a strong contender for the contest and I wish you luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Oh wow, you really brought this awful event to life with very evocative descriptive skill. I'm particularly fearful of water at the best of times but this event sounded absolutely horrendous. I can fully understand why you wanted to give it a positive ending but, equally, I think you would have mastered the reality of what actually happened and the momentum of your piece would have driven this home with greater impact. But this must be a strong contender for the contest and I wish you luck! Debbie
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Hello Debbie, The teenager aged 14 was the first fatality. I don't think I would have cheered you up. Her body was never found. Thanks so much for your good wishes. And there was no dog. Blessings, K xx
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No, I knew it wouldn't cheer me up. I just thought you had the talent to explore and achieve that different ending.. What a dreadful tragedy that I've been thinking about ever since! Take care Debbie
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I was so moved to think of her parents and grandparents sad and bewildered. Yes, I could write the real deal. What would it achieve?
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Just the truth of the awfulness of it all. But please don't dwell on my personal thought because you did such an excellent job anyway.
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Australia is a land of droughts and flooding rains.
Comment from Wendy G
Well written and vivid story but how sad that in reality she lost her life. It must have been horrifying for her and for her parents and extended family. Best wishes for her contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Well written and vivid story but how sad that in reality she lost her life. It must have been horrifying for her and for her parents and extended family. Best wishes for her contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Hello Wendy, Thanks for reading. It was a scary time for the town. We lost 58 shops. Love, Kay.
Comment from w.j.debi
I was counting Heather and Toby as so lucky. I liked the happy ending, but then you let us know the ending wasn't really happy.
We had a similar story earlier this year with flooding. A young woman took her dogs for a walk along the river. The dogs came home, but the girl did not. They went to find her and saw evidence of where she had fallen into the rushing water. Her body was not found.
Thanks for giving us a great narrative and a happy ending, but also a warning that nature is dangerous.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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I was counting Heather and Toby as so lucky. I liked the happy ending, but then you let us know the ending wasn't really happy.
We had a similar story earlier this year with flooding. A young woman took her dogs for a walk along the river. The dogs came home, but the girl did not. They went to find her and saw evidence of where she had fallen into the rushing water. Her body was not found.
Thanks for giving us a great narrative and a happy ending, but also a warning that nature is dangerous.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Hello friend, Many thanks for reading. And a similar thing happened in your town. Never mess with Mother Nature. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Well done in telling this compelling story of survival. I was drawn into the story from the beginning to the end. Well done in setting the scene.
Best wishes,
Mary
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Well done in telling this compelling story of survival. I was drawn into the story from the beginning to the end. Well done in setting the scene.
Best wishes,
Mary
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Hello Mary, Many thanks for reading. We lived through six weeks of torrential rain and Heather (don't know her real name) was the first fatality. The family especially grandma were devastated. K XX
Comment from jmdg1954
A short story with a happy ending.
The manner in which you tell the story, draws the reader in. You kept the excitement and anticipation level high. Advantage-reader.
Good post. Best of luck in the contest.
John
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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A short story with a happy ending.
The manner in which you tell the story, draws the reader in. You kept the excitement and anticipation level high. Advantage-reader.
Good post. Best of luck in the contest.
John
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Hi John, I gave it a happy ending. She was the first fatality, never found her body. Thanks for reading friend. K XX
