Grasping the Elusive Dream
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Young Love or Just a Crush?"The Followup to Chasing the Elusive Dream
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Comment from jim vecchio
I ALWAYS love these chapter about your family and you always make me wonder what will happen next. Thanks for writing that bit bout epilepsy. My sister and many of the adults on my caseload had epilepsy, and i know how frightening some seizures can. Also, that creative writing class. The last one I attended, there was one "gentleman "who always wrote about his sexual exploits. It's difficult to participate in these things and remain a Christian.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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I ALWAYS love these chapter about your family and you always make me wonder what will happen next. Thanks for writing that bit bout epilepsy. My sister and many of the adults on my caseload had epilepsy, and i know how frightening some seizures can. Also, that creative writing class. The last one I attended, there was one "gentleman "who always wrote about his sexual exploits. It's difficult to participate in these things and remain a Christian.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Thank you Jim, I really appreciate your comments and the six stars. My writing teacher was the son of a Baptist preacher but he left the church and quit believing in God when the his father told hin Ghandi couldn't go to heavy because he wasn't a Christian. People lose faith for odd reasons. I don't think his father should judge. That is for God. I really appreciate the six stars.
Beth
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I agree. We will most likely be surprised when we reach Heaven.
Comment from Wendy G
Your family life is definitely interesting. The teacher was a bit strange. It's understandable that she couldn't prevent her own epileptic episodes, but to try and remove demons from children. That's way "off". I am enjoying your stories a lot.
Wendy
Suggestions: 1. With less children (fewer)
2. overtime, so. I decided (No need for a period here)
3. couldn't stop quite quick enough (quickly - adverb needed)
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Your family life is definitely interesting. The teacher was a bit strange. It's understandable that she couldn't prevent her own epileptic episodes, but to try and remove demons from children. That's way "off". I am enjoying your stories a lot.
Wendy
Suggestions: 1. With less children (fewer)
2. overtime, so. I decided (No need for a period here)
3. couldn't stop quite quick enough (quickly - adverb needed)
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much for the excellent review. I'm glad you're enjoying my stories. Thanks for your help with catching some things that got by me.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
Some of these stories are familiar and I liked the mysterious dog that was yours, well, briefly.
I'm glad you talked about your writing experience and agree with you about the language.
I know you are chronicling your family history but since you already did that, I wonder if you considered just choosing a few stories that pertain only to the title? The readers can feel going from subject to subject when you cover all the events of the time period. It would be nice to know more details about the kids and their love experiences.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Some of these stories are familiar and I liked the mysterious dog that was yours, well, briefly.
I'm glad you talked about your writing experience and agree with you about the language.
I know you are chronicling your family history but since you already did that, I wonder if you considered just choosing a few stories that pertain only to the title? The readers can feel going from subject to subject when you cover all the events of the time period. It would be nice to know more details about the kids and their love experiences.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Thanks Helen, The book I put on Amazon was about my life in a less detailed way. It had 28 chapter that was just my years in Jackson while the version where I was talking to Evan had 100 chapters for the same type period. It was surpposed to have sequel which is what I'm writing now. I only have a few chapter more of the New Orleans years and I will put in on Amazon as well so that is why you are seeing things you've read before. The other book was way to detailed. I was hoping by not looking at what I wrote before it would be a fresher version. You have too good a memory. LOL
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I find the continuing saga of interest but question if, since each new story is a "chapter" ... of a book, if is a hope for publication? Though interesting, would it sell? On the other hand If it is a journal for our progeny to read ir would be of interest for sure, especially the grands.
Journal
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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I find the continuing saga of interest but question if, since each new story is a "chapter" ... of a book, if is a hope for publication? Though interesting, would it sell? On the other hand If it is a journal for our progeny to read ir would be of interest for sure, especially the grands.
Journal
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Actually I put the years I spent in Jackson on Amazon already and it was suppose to be two part sequel. The Jackson yeas sold about 70 copies and didn't cost me a penny to put it on Amazon. What you are reading is part of the sequel. It was mostly for family but I was surprised other people bought it.
Comment from Ulla
I love to read about your family and every you're doing in this case when your children are becoming young adults, falling in and out of love all the time. Something perfectly normal at that age.
Just one minor thing at one point you change from past tense to present tense. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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I love to read about your family and every you're doing in this case when your children are becoming young adults, falling in and out of love all the time. Something perfectly normal at that age.
Just one minor thing at one point you change from past tense to present tense. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Thank you Ulla, I'll have read over and check that out. Every once in while I've deliberately brought what is happening in the present but dont mean to do it most of the time. I see if I can correct that.
Beth
Comment from royowen
Boy, it's sometimes tough when you have Kids a long way from home, long distance parenting would be tough, especially teen years, when immaturity can kick one in the bum, it must have been really tough for. These are the times one has to fly by the seat of the pants. Beautifully written Beth, blessings Roy
Typo : she was starting (to) have serious feeling(s)
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Boy, it's sometimes tough when you have Kids a long way from home, long distance parenting would be tough, especially teen years, when immaturity can kick one in the bum, it must have been really tough for. These are the times one has to fly by the seat of the pants. Beautifully written Beth, blessings Roy
Typo : she was starting (to) have serious feeling(s)
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Thank you Roy. Yes I'm not so sure I would sent the away today because they don't always make the best decision left on thier on.
Beth
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You?re right about that.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
It is hard to figure out what to major in college. Only one of my boys switched majors, Steven, my youngest, but it wasn't a major change, from elementary education to high school math. He also picked up a regular math degree at the same time. Now, he's teaching but also working on his masters. His eventual goal is to teach college math. I enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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It is hard to figure out what to major in college. Only one of my boys switched majors, Steven, my youngest, but it wasn't a major change, from elementary education to high school math. He also picked up a regular math degree at the same time. Now, he's teaching but also working on his masters. His eventual goal is to teach college math. I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thank you Barbara. When I was in college I was determined to finish as fast as I could to avoid it costing so much. My kids all went longer than necessary because they didn't take full loads and kept changing majors.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very interesting chapter in your life with your children. All of us have those kind of challenges as we raise our children and let them go at the end of the rating. I enjoyed your story very much. Have a good day and God bless. Patricia.
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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This is a very interesting chapter in your life with your children. All of us have those kind of challenges as we raise our children and let them go at the end of the rating. I enjoyed your story very much. Have a good day and God bless. Patricia.
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Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Thank you Pat. I really appreciate you reading this. I'm enjoying remembering how it was.
Beth
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It is a worry raising teenagers, especially when they get together with the opposite sex, we fear what might happen and don't want accidents to occur! My daughter once stayed out until the early hours at a boy's house and I had to go over and fetch her back and I had words with the boy's Mother who was very laid back! My daughter was only 16 at the time.
Students using bad language should not be tolerated Beth. I remember when I worked in a man's environment and had to attend a meetings where I was the only women. I stood up and said that it was not necessary to use the (F) word and what would they think of me if I used it? They agreed that it was not appropriate for me to use that word and they stopped swearing.
When in company with others it shows respect not to swear. I was brought up in a household where I never heard the (F) word, although my Father did use other less offensive words when he was in a temper! Ha ha ha.
Thank you for sharing a little bit more or your children's upbringing here Beth, I am astounded how you remember it all! Love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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It is a worry raising teenagers, especially when they get together with the opposite sex, we fear what might happen and don't want accidents to occur! My daughter once stayed out until the early hours at a boy's house and I had to go over and fetch her back and I had words with the boy's Mother who was very laid back! My daughter was only 16 at the time.
Students using bad language should not be tolerated Beth. I remember when I worked in a man's environment and had to attend a meetings where I was the only women. I stood up and said that it was not necessary to use the (F) word and what would they think of me if I used it? They agreed that it was not appropriate for me to use that word and they stopped swearing.
When in company with others it shows respect not to swear. I was brought up in a household where I never heard the (F) word, although my Father did use other less offensive words when he was in a temper! Ha ha ha.
Thank you for sharing a little bit more or your children's upbringing here Beth, I am astounded how you remember it all! Love Dolly x
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Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Thank you Dolly, I didn't here the F word either growing up but I had a dad like yours with a temper that caused some other expletives. I appreciate the review.
Beth
