Coffee With Iris
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Irony and Kisses"Two opposites meet and connect.
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is wonderfully and sensitively written, every word assiduously chosen to convey the hesitancy and reluctance of this break-up and the contrasting delight and freedom of being with Fin. Gretchen, if I had a six you'd have it...even without my friend, Iris, in the picture. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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This is wonderfully and sensitively written, every word assiduously chosen to convey the hesitancy and reluctance of this break-up and the contrasting delight and freedom of being with Fin. Gretchen, if I had a six you'd have it...even without my friend, Iris, in the picture. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 21-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it. Gretchen
Comment from jmdg1954
Gretchen
A short chapter which detailed what it needed to quickly as this is the secondary story of your novella. Now back to Iris and Jameson.
I'm glad there was no real fighting between those two, which would cause Fin uncertainty.
Good work.
John
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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Gretchen
A short chapter which detailed what it needed to quickly as this is the secondary story of your novella. Now back to Iris and Jameson.
I'm glad there was no real fighting between those two, which would cause Fin uncertainty.
Good work.
John
Comment Written 21-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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They both have Fin's best interest at heart deep down. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
"We ended it the same way it began, with a kiss.
Now, that's irony for you." You caught the human, messy element, in their relationship and conveyed all the shades of gray, including Fin's confused relationship with his mother. This is far and away your best chapter about their breakup.
Jay
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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"We ended it the same way it began, with a kiss.
Now, that's irony for you." You caught the human, messy element, in their relationship and conveyed all the shades of gray, including Fin's confused relationship with his mother. This is far and away your best chapter about their breakup.
Jay
Comment Written 20-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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Thanks, Jay. Your words are greatly appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from damommy
What a gentleman Jameson is. One day, Claire's going to realize what she lost. He handled this day very well. I hope she doesn't do anything to drag out the proceedings.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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What a gentleman Jameson is. One day, Claire's going to realize what she lost. He handled this day very well. I hope she doesn't do anything to drag out the proceedings.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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Hopefully, but doubt he will ever know she thinks she made a mistake. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from pome lover
very realistic. good details and dialogue. I like that he says it like it is and doesn't backtrack. Though he does say he loves her, he realizes it was misplaced. It's a sad thing for Finny, though. very good. I do like the way you are with your characters!!
Katharine
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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very realistic. good details and dialogue. I like that he says it like it is and doesn't backtrack. Though he does say he loves her, he realizes it was misplaced. It's a sad thing for Finny, though. very good. I do like the way you are with your characters!!
Katharine
Comment Written 20-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much. Your words mean the world to me. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is very sad Gretchen and Claire has never opened up and told Jameson why she left him and we are still in the dark as to the reasons why? Maybe she has someone else? Claire seems to feel a great deal of bitterness whereas Jameson has come to terms with his situation as it was never of his choosing. It is good they are not arguing over Fin as he needs both parents as you say. A realistic and sad part of the story so far Gretchen, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
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This is very sad Gretchen and Claire has never opened up and told Jameson why she left him and we are still in the dark as to the reasons why? Maybe she has someone else? Claire seems to feel a great deal of bitterness whereas Jameson has come to terms with his situation as it was never of his choosing. It is good they are not arguing over Fin as he needs both parents as you say. A realistic and sad part of the story so far Gretchen, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 20-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much. Don't normally like sad but both Jameson and Iris are in dire straits. Once this and Terry Joe are done, Miranda, pt. 2 is waiting. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
So pleased that Jameson is standing up to Claire. He deserves better. Maybe one day she will realise his worth as a man, and will regret her self-centredness, treating him like a thing to be used until she tires of him. Good writing.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
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So pleased that Jameson is standing up to Claire. He deserves better. Maybe one day she will realise his worth as a man, and will regret her self-centredness, treating him like a thing to be used until she tires of him. Good writing.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
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Thank you, Wendy. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from lancellot
It's a short chapter. We do get a little look into Jameson's marriage or impending divorce, enough to understand it's complicated. I wanted more but then reminded myself the story isn't about Jameson and Claire's relationship.
Notes:
She was never a fan of
{Heston's.}
-Heston
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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
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It's a short chapter. We do get a little look into Jameson's marriage or impending divorce, enough to understand it's complicated. I wanted more but then reminded myself the story isn't about Jameson and Claire's relationship.
Notes:
She was never a fan of
{Heston's.}
-Heston
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Comment Written 20-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
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Thank you. I'm trying to focus less on the marriage imploding and more on his transformation. Thanks for your detailed review. Much appreciated. Also for catching that spag. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Boy, has Jameson come a LOOOOOONG freakin way!! I'm so proud of him for taking the reigns away from Claire. (She was so inept with them...) I also loved the tableau of Jameson and Finny. He just loves that boy and doesn't worry about the rest of the picture, and that's the ultimate freedom.
REALLY beautifully done, (again) Gretchen.
Remember when you told me on Monday that I should post everything on Sunday? Ditto right back to you, Missy. I have no sixes for you at this late point of the week, and this super chapter deserves one.
xoxoxo
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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
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Boy, has Jameson come a LOOOOOONG freakin way!! I'm so proud of him for taking the reigns away from Claire. (She was so inept with them...) I also loved the tableau of Jameson and Finny. He just loves that boy and doesn't worry about the rest of the picture, and that's the ultimate freedom.
REALLY beautifully done, (again) Gretchen.
Remember when you told me on Monday that I should post everything on Sunday? Ditto right back to you, Missy. I have no sixes for you at this late point of the week, and this super chapter deserves one.
xoxoxo
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Comment Written 20-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
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I will post something on Sunday. Doing two books at one time, exhausting. I do not recommend it. Might take a couple of days off so ... Thanks for this awesome and detailed review. Gretchen
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**whimper, whimper, whimper**
*whine, whine, whine, whine*
Okay...take a few days off. Enjoy. Don't worry about me, sitting here, wondering what happens next in those glorious books...I'll be fine...
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You are Jewish. Guilt Trip central. Lol. I'll probably not be able to stay away. So there. Gretchen
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My job here is done.
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Lmao.
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Hey, do you know this joke? It's one of my all-time favorites:
How many Jewish mommies does it take to change a lightbulb?
Nevuh mind; I'll sit here in the dark....
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Bwahaha! Now that's funny. We have a joke in the south that you might find funny. What's worse than seeing a Yankee? Seeing a Yankee with a u haul.
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HAHAHAHAHAH!! I love it!
