Hope for all.
A short challenge to healthy people.22 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Be grateful!
The person who loves to lament their little inconveniences ought to consider those who having it far, far worse, find something to be grateful for.
Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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100%
Be grateful!
The person who loves to lament their little inconveniences ought to consider those who having it far, far worse, find something to be grateful for.
Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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You got it Wayne. Be thankful for the little things and the joy in another's smile. (;-))
Comment from Wendy G
Yes the fact of death is a truth we must accept so living each day meaningfully and thoughtfully and thankfully is essential. Well written. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Yes the fact of death is a truth we must accept so living each day meaningfully and thoughtfully and thankfully is essential. Well written. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 12-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Wendy, I have seen so much tragedy in this world that I have made it a point to treat others with a supporting demeanor. Not a silly 'have a nice day' comment but with real interest. It doesn't always lift someone's mood but it's always worth the effort.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This short dialogue only story has a phenomenal message. I'm struggling with health issues, but I don't have cancer or a terminal illness. Your well written story and author's notes are inspiring and have lifted my spirits. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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This short dialogue only story has a phenomenal message. I'm struggling with health issues, but I don't have cancer or a terminal illness. Your well written story and author's notes are inspiring and have lifted my spirits. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you, LJ. You just made my day! I have seen so much tragedy in this world that I have made it a point to treat others with a supporting demeanor. Not a silly 'have a nice day' comment but with real interest. It doesn't always lift someone's mood but it's always worth the effort.
Comment from lyenochka
I'm confused as to who said "You have many days before you." at the end. Is this the doctor still speaking? If so, a new paragraph isn't needed. But if you want a new paragraph, don't use the close quotes just before.
Otherwise, it's a good story entirely told in dialogue. And it's true we need to remember that we are are terminal.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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I'm confused as to who said "You have many days before you." at the end. Is this the doctor still speaking? If so, a new paragraph isn't needed. But if you want a new paragraph, don't use the close quotes just before.
Otherwise, it's a good story entirely told in dialogue. And it's true we need to remember that we are are terminal.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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You are correct on both points, Helena. I made the change and it flows much better. Thanks for the lesson! (;-))
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Congratulations on your second place finish!!
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Thanks again, friend!
Comment from Mia Twysted
I like the message you are sending out to be grateful for the blessings that you have. However, I didn't feel a connection to the story. The conversation lost me a bit and I had to reread the story to understand.
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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I like the message you are sending out to be grateful for the blessings that you have. However, I didn't feel a connection to the story. The conversation lost me a bit and I had to reread the story to understand.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thanks, Mia. I'll work on it.
BTW, Love your puppy.
All the best, Yard.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The story is good but a little confusing. The going back and forth between the bad and good news can be clarified. The dialogue could be improved. The characters seem real. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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The story is good but a little confusing. The going back and forth between the bad and good news can be clarified. The dialogue could be improved. The characters seem real. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 12-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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You are correct, Gypsy. I made a few changes and it flows much better.
All the best, Yard.
Comment from Ben Colder
Faith in the one who created you will void the words of doubt. God's promises supersede what any doctor thinks or says. Open you Bible and learn of God's promises and accept them into your life. It works better than hope.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Faith in the one who created you will void the words of doubt. God's promises supersede what any doctor thinks or says. Open you Bible and learn of God's promises and accept them into your life. It works better than hope.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Jeremiah 29:11
"For I know the plans I have for you," declares the Lord, "plans to prosper you and not to harm you, plans to give you hope and a future."
Thank you, Mister Colder. It is a blessing to hear from a man of God. All the best, Yard
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Such poignancy expressed so succinctly, this story captures very successfully this thin line we all walk between good health and disease etc. It's a very emotive story that you tell so skilfully. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Such poignancy expressed so succinctly, this story captures very successfully this thin line we all walk between good health and disease etc. It's a very emotive story that you tell so skilfully. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 12-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Wow! Two positive reviews in three days. I am stoked!
I just might have to write some more. (;-))
Yard
Comment from JSD
A moving and thought-provoking, heartening piece. My hopes go out to you, if this is autobiographical, for many happy years of life. Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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A moving and thought-provoking, heartening piece. My hopes go out to you, if this is autobiographical, for many happy years of life. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Much appreciated, JS. I plan to stay around long enough to get an 'A' in punctuation before I go to heaven.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We don't know how lucky we are to be healthy and if I could wish for anything in life, health would be number one pick. So many suffer painful horrendous deaths. A poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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We don't know how lucky we are to be healthy and if I could wish for anything in life, health would be number one pick. So many suffer painful horrendous deaths. A poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thanks Dolly. You are so right. Waking with ones loved one to greet a new day with a healthy mind and body is the ultimate wealth. Second to that, is helping one's loved one face the inevitable with love, compassion and patience. Yard.