Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Strong feelings and emotions come through your words. I like the line" wish I was a better woman with a supportive man". It speaks to so many and so many women feel this way. You have a strong steady beat in your words with a powerful message that many can relate to.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2023

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Comment from Raul1

Excellent

I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! I like it. Nice job! Thank you for sharing! Interesting.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2023

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Comment from sweetthanesue

Excellent

Very captivating reading and like you poetry keeps my peace distracting me from many things and expressing feelings...Found this week bit long but having said that I enjoyed the read.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2023

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Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

This had the same energy as rap music. I could feel anger, resentment, frustration and sadness then finally acceptance. Really good rhythm. It was face paced to me. A hunger and energy that most poems don't have. Gretchen

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2023

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Comment from JSD

Excellent

A great piece of writing. Dense and solid with significant imagery and resonant language. My only worry is that this is not free verse. It has a strict rhyme scheme. Does it need to go in a different competition?

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2023

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Comment from karenina

Excellent

This feels like you poured your soul onto the page. It's real, unfiltered, unapologetic, and speaks to the broken pieces in all of us. Some of us hide them better than others, but make no mistake ~ all of us have pointy shards and slivers of pain. Keep it real as this always... You are making ripples in poetry's pond. We need that.

Karenina

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023

I'm ending my time with fanstory soon.Too much negativity reviews instead of focusing on the art and message. A lot of money too. You been supportive all the way through. Thank you!!

reply by karenina on 07-Jul-2023

Oh, Charity. I'll miss you. Why ANYONE would be negative about your writing is beyond me! Look for a PM from me, please! And keep being YOU!

You are awesome!

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023

Hey, my friend. I haven't posted in a while on fanstory!! I will be leaving fanstory. Let me have your email, and we can keep in touch, and I can send you PM. I found more supportive with sharing at writing workshops and throughout all my performances and other sites. You have always been supportive and honest.

reply by karenina on 07-Jul-2023

Sent my email...

Stay in touch!

Comment from Goodadvicechan

Poor

We are scared when: " Have you ever fallen but never hit the ground?
I'm falling still, lost, but never found.
I'm screaming for hope, but faith is not around."

What a terrible situation.

What you say, "Poetry is the only thing keeping the peace when I'm falling to pieces." I prefer to read "writing" instead of just poetry.

Thanks for sharing



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 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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Comment from Maria Millsaps

Excellent

The reflection of what goes on in the mind of a fallen person is very well described here. Poetry is a great way to vocalize these internal conflicts.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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Comment from Maryellen Boesendahl

Good

I loved this! As a broken, healing woman myself, I easily related to alot of the verses. Some of the lines seemed to be a little bit long, but I thought you did an excellent job overall of keeping the rhyme going. Well done!

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This poem, Falling to Pieces, says a lot of things, though "What is Love?" is not addressed to any degree I can see. That's okay though. The love of God is always the right message.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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