Reviews from

Grasping the Elusive Dream

Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The New Addition Arrives"
The Followup to Chasing the Elusive Dream

24 total reviews 
Comment from jim vecchio
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Another entry that kept me reading from word to word, sentence to sentence, paragraph to paragraph. You have such a great narrative style. And it amazes me how much we have in common. Nio, I didn't carry a child!
But that crabby nurse is someone I'm familiar with. I used her in a play that I wrote. And, yes, I came home with hemorrhoids, too, but for qa different reason!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
    Thank you Jim. I'm delighted that you reading my story with such interest. Since you like my stories I should put you on my fan list so I'll be notified when you post. I thrilled with the six stars.
    Beth
reply by jim vecchio on 03-Jul-2023
    Thanks! This is a great Honor. I do not pretend to possess the Talent that you do!
Comment from royowen
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

We only had two girls, we were late starters when it came to starting a family, there was only three and a half years between them, and Bec, our elder girl was always a sweet natured girl, so she watched over her baby sister, still does really, beautifully written, thanks for sharing Beth, blessings Roy
Typo : They could afford (to) let me go.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
    Thank you Roy. I appreciate the review and comments. As always I enjoy your comments.
    Beth
reply by royowen on 03-Jul-2023
    Most welcome Beth
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I don't know how you girls do what you do to continue the human race. Though we have two daughters neither carry our DNA. We bought them at a garage sale by the SPCA. No, actually we used an adoption agency. Do you think children ever conclude the pain moms suffer to have them arrive? P.S. What is a pumping station?

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
    Thank's Tom. The girls eventually learn what their mom went through to get them here. Some one must have tipped my daughter because none of them every gave birth. A pumping station is for a place like New Orleans where it's below sea level and the water has no where to go when rains. The canals fill and overflow unless the pumps pull the water out into the lake.
    Beth
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Another excellent chapter expressed so well and with such charming honesty and detail which I always love. I'm also admiring your dedication to the Church and sheer patience and energy especially whilst heavily pregnant. Once again you end well, encouraging the reader to want more. By the way, I liked your 'hard labor' which is normally applied in the UK to prison work - was it deliberate? Because it did amuse me:). A couple of small edits: para starting the pastor had seen to it... - all members(') talents; personally I think it would make your prose punchier and even more readable by sliding words together - e.g. I would becomes I'd; I had - I'd etc: para starting One of the men... - afford (to) let me go. Your story has interest, humour and fun detail as ever. I still can't believe how much you were able to pack into your life, remarkable! Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
    Thank you, Debbie. Sorry this is a little late. Yes, I delibertly said hard labor because that is what it felt like.Thanks for the suggestion for edits. I always appreciate that. I'm so glad you're enjoying this.
    Beth
Comment from lyenochka
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Oh my goodness! Each time you share these stories, you give a slightly different perspective with more details. I'm so shocked at that nurse aid's behavior toward you! These days, people would have sued!
I'm glad that nothing bad happened while you were at that camp. I remember you had such a miserable time and I thought it was so thoughtless of the pastor to put you in charge when you were that far along in your pregnancy. You and Evan were so dedicated to serve at the church even when you were so busy with your work and home life.

before they could afford [to] let
I hoped the worse was over, (worst)

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
    Thank you Helen. I don't look at anything I've written before when I writing about the same thing again. I'm hoping a different time might tell the story in a slightly different way. Most people have forgotten it but you have good memory. I should have known my legs wouldn't hold me up. I know there was an incident report written up. I probably couldn't have sued but unless it made me bleed worse, I wasn't really hurt.
    Beth
reply by lyenochka on 02-Jul-2023
    We're probably not the "suing" kind of people. But with my first C-section I was so thirsty and I said so. The intern anesthesiologist said, "Bars closed." Sigh. Couldn't appreciate that kind of humor.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I can understand why they all wanted a boy. My sister had three boys and I had only one. Girls are prominent in our family. My other sister had two girls and so did my brother.
I have said it before. You certainly had a busy interesting life. Well done. Nancy:)

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
    Thank you Nancy. Don felt like there was too many females in the family. My husband's othrr four siblings had nothing but boys. We were the one in the family with girls and I had four of them counting the baby that died.
    Beth
Comment from Wendy G
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This chapter brought back some memories. Careless nurse to ask you to stand up for her, and it's just as well you weren't injured when you fell. (My doctor was called in on a Saturday during his golf game, and wasn't too pleased.) I like your clear, open and straightforward writing. Now I am left wondering what else is coming! Well done.
Wendy

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
    Thank you Wendy. I love when you say your wondering what else may be happening indicating you be back for more hopefully. I glad you like my style of writing. I like your style of reviewing.
    Beth
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This was a well-written and interesting chapter to what I can't help feeling you should group into a book. I especially liked the bit about you collapsing when you stood up - so many silly medical mistakes I hear about in labour. After my first labour in a hospital, I swore to have all others in a private clinic, but it wasn't much better. kay

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
    Thank you so much Kay. These will be grouped into a book. They are a follow up to the first book I just published on Amazon. The first part is our life in Missisippi. This starts the New Orleans years. I'm glad you find it interestint. I always have problems with hospitals and doctors.
    Beth
Comment from Teri7
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I enjoyed reading this my friend, but it sure brought back a lot of memories when I had my children. The twins were late and together they weighted 16 pounds! I was so happy when finally they decided to come out! lol My uncle told me I looked like a pumpkin with legs! love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
    Thank you Teri, I thought my twins were big at nearly 14 lbs together but they were a week early. If they'd been late they would probably have weighted as much as yours.
    Beth
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This is a really fun chapter as your sense of humor really shows out as you talk about your pregnancy and birth of, your daughter. Kudos to you for having a baby once you felt you were though with having them. I love the physical description of your daughter.

Take care,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
    Thank you Ronda, I so glad you found some humor in this chapter. I wished I could show my daughter baby picture. It didn't come out sharp but I wasn't kidding when I said she looked like little sumo wrestler.
    Baby
reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 02-Jul-2023
    That is too cute! 10 pounds is a big baby!!