Coffee With Iris
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Weekend With Finny"Two opposites meet and connect.
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Comment from Sankey
Loved this, immensely. So nice to meet Jameson's little boy. He seems younger than six, actually? Is it the separation from a cohesive family? Well done and no spags.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Loved this, immensely. So nice to meet Jameson's little boy. He seems younger than six, actually? Is it the separation from a cohesive family? Well done and no spags.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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I think you confused my short story about my grandson who is six. He was the one who held the diabetes in a box (donuts)
Jameson's son is three. Thank you for this extra star. Gretchen
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Yeah I did confuse them Thanks for the clarification.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh, I feel so sorry for Jameson and Heston. They miss Finny
so much. I wonder what is wrong with Claire? Why is she being so uncering about keeping her family together? So many of the young people of today cannot seem to stay together after getting married. Too many of the just live together until they get tired of it and then leave. No matter if there are children or not. Well done, Gretchen. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Oh, I feel so sorry for Jameson and Heston. They miss Finny
so much. I wonder what is wrong with Claire? Why is she being so uncering about keeping her family together? So many of the young people of today cannot seem to stay together after getting married. Too many of the just live together until they get tired of it and then leave. No matter if there are children or not. Well done, Gretchen. Nancy:)
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much. Claire is more concerned with her own priorities at the moment. Thanks for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You describe this sad situation well with your intuitive thoughts and endear the reader to the tension in this dis functional family and how Jameson wants to build bridges and mend this marriage. Claire on the other hand has issues which are unresolved and she won't talk about them. We will see how this story pans out, much enjoyed Gretchen, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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You describe this sad situation well with your intuitive thoughts and endear the reader to the tension in this dis functional family and how Jameson wants to build bridges and mend this marriage. Claire on the other hand has issues which are unresolved and she won't talk about them. We will see how this story pans out, much enjoyed Gretchen, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thanks, Dolly. You are spot on with your accessment. I appreciate your review. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
The give-and-take between Jameson and Claire is tense -- very realistic. And I have some feeling for Claire's viewpoint. That's good writing. Clearly, this is Jameson's story, his too-desperate need for Claire -- or more, for a relatively happy home life with their son ... but I can sense Claire's near-suffocation. She does need space. Conversation can't be regulated between them. Also, kudos for Finny's temper tantrum. This can't be easy for him, either. All in all, a good chapter. I really wish I had a six.
Jay
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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The give-and-take between Jameson and Claire is tense -- very realistic. And I have some feeling for Claire's viewpoint. That's good writing. Clearly, this is Jameson's story, his too-desperate need for Claire -- or more, for a relatively happy home life with their son ... but I can sense Claire's near-suffocation. She does need space. Conversation can't be regulated between them. Also, kudos for Finny's temper tantrum. This can't be easy for him, either. All in all, a good chapter. I really wish I had a six.
Jay
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thanks, I'm glad you found this realistic. I do appreciate the detailed feedback. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Aw, this is such a sweet story. The child behaves like a child with a temper tantrum and sleeps like an angel beside his adoring dog. Too many writers leave out the bad moments and want us to remember only the good ones, but that isn't a real child. The wife comes off as someone he doesn't want or need back who is only keeping Finny away from his daddy as a power trip.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Aw, this is such a sweet story. The child behaves like a child with a temper tantrum and sleeps like an angel beside his adoring dog. Too many writers leave out the bad moments and want us to remember only the good ones, but that isn't a real child. The wife comes off as someone he doesn't want or need back who is only keeping Finny away from his daddy as a power trip.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Not sure what game Claire is playing. Thank you for this complimentary review. Much appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
Iris summed her up well when she said that Claire was just stringing him along. Seems her own sister is also finding her tiresome and selfish. To be honest I find it surprising that Jameson still loves her. But he needs to get his son back before Claires's lies ruin him and turn him away from his own father. Very well written.
Sendy
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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Iris summed her up well when she said that Claire was just stringing him along. Seems her own sister is also finding her tiresome and selfish. To be honest I find it surprising that Jameson still loves her. But he needs to get his son back before Claires's lies ruin him and turn him away from his own father. Very well written.
Sendy
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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I think Jameson is like a lot of men who think divorce means failing. He also is under the spell of a pretty girl. But spells can be broken. Lol. Thsnk you for this astute review. Gretchen
Comment from Teri7
This is a really great chapter you have penned. You used very good descriptive words. I can just see the dog and him being happy to see the little boy again. I wish they could work things out, but who knows! love and blessings, Teri
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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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This is a really great chapter you have penned. You used very good descriptive words. I can just see the dog and him being happy to see the little boy again. I wish they could work things out, but who knows! love and blessings, Teri
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thanks, Teri. Had to end this one on a happier note. Thank you for your helpful feedback. Gretchen