Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is an endearing exchange of hearts here and you handled it carefully with a gentle and caring words Gretchen. These two are definitely bonding together as friends, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023

Thank you so much, Dolly. I really appreciate this kind review. Gretchen

Comment from Sankey

Exceptional

You are getting all the SIXES! This was so lovely, close and endearing. We feel like we knew Iris's son. You tell the story so caringly and gently. It all becomes very real. No spags.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023

Thank you, Sankey. This was such a kind review. I'm glad you liked it. Gretchen

Comment from damommy

Exceptional

This was hard to read and review. As you know, I lost a son a little over two years ago, but it seems like yesterday. I'm so glad Jameson had sincere interest in Daniel.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023

I did not know this. I'm so very sorry to hear this. I'm glad you were able to get through it. I just came back on site last August. I was gone for several years. My deepest condolences. Gretchen

reply by damommy on 22-Jun-2023

You didn't know. Thank you for your condolences. I don't usually read anything sad, but your stories are so good, I must!

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

They end where they need to end. My last chapter of my book ended today on Fanstory. This is a sweet story about a terrible loss. One that a parent can never expect, but sometimes worries about. You are writing a good story with a lot of heart. Only one suggestion: . . . I(')m sure.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023

Thank you so much for this lovely review. Gretchen

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

This is one of those times I'm sorry I squandered my 6's on lesser posts. This was brilliantly written and offered the advantage of following on Jameson's last chapter. You explored loss from two different perspectives and it helped to deepen Jameson and Iris's relationship.

Good job!

Jayu

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023

Thank you, Jay. I'm glad you are enjoying this. Honest opinion, is the dual first person perspective confusing? Gretchen

reply by Jay Squires on 21-Jun-2023

No, it's not confusing. My fear was that it might dilute dramatic focus, but I don't see that happening so far.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Gretchen, This is another very well written chapter. You used very good descriptive words and very good dialogue. I look forward to reading the next chapter. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, Teri

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 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023

Thanks so much, Teri. I'm glad you liked it. Gretchen

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Exceptional

Yes, This friendship is going to be good therapy for both Jameson and Iris. Both have suffered a great loss and need to talk about it.Their dates will be Chicken Soup for the Soul. I love that saying. Good job, Gretchen. Nancy:)

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

I remember those books. The first one was really good, then there was chicken soup for everything. Lol. Thank you for this compliment. And the extra star. Gretchen

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

You get little interesting details in there so seamlessly. I love that. You make each chapter so real, and, of course, your characters.
I don't know where you're going to go with this story, but I have faith that it will go its natural course. Until next time,
Katharine

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 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Thank you. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I had to keep it shorter so it wouldn't be so depressing. Writing about losing a child is tough so I didn't want to dwell on it. But I appreciate your feedback. Gretchen

reply by pome lover on 20-Jun-2023

You have a gentle touch as well as clear vision it seems to me. It was a good chapter.

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Thank you.