Comment from Debra White

Exceptional

Hello LisaMay :)
I really enjoyed reading your poem.
Fabulous structure and creativity.
I love the theme - you explain beautifully, your faith through the subject of a river. It's inspired and original and I hope you do well in the contest. Good Luck!
Best wishes, Debra

 Comment Written 31-May-2023

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reply by the author on 31-May-2023

Debra, you have always been a very good supporter of my work, because you 'get' me. I am very appreciative of your support and thank you for this lovely review.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I enjoyed your walk through life as you speak from the voice of experience and I enjoyed your ambient reflections as you seem to have come to a place of peace here, much enjoyed, a fine entry for the faith contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 31-May-2023

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reply by the author on 31-May-2023

Thanks for your comments, Dolly. I went walking by a river this morning while thinking about life in general, and I found the river motif crept into my mind later today when I began to write this poem.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

I found this very moving! I am sorry to be out of sixes so early in the week (unlike my usual pattern). The imagery is strong, and the differences of feelings as you progressed through life have been beautifully expressed with the eye and skill of an artist/poet. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 31-May-2023

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

Beautiful dine it is repealed for all to take more of the stayges of likpfe we tend to go through fro adult hood till be become older in life.
Great job...
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 31-May-2023

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

Beautiful dine it is repealed for all to take more of the stayges of likpfe we tend to go through fro adult hood till be become older in life.
Great job...
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 31-May-2023

Comment from Mario PIERRE

Excellent

If I were to compare this poem to another, I would cite 'the rime of the ancient mariner' by Coleridge. I find your poem very well constructed, the stages of a human life. I find the use of nature imagery and personification very skilfully done.
Great job Lisa!!

 Comment Written 30-May-2023

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Loved your metaphor of the river for life. Beginnings and middle age do not seem nearly as daunting but the fearful ending is death. Yet you made it a beautiful merging into the sea completely trusting in God. That's such a great description of faith!
My favorite lines were:
"I caught a sparkle in the Creator's eye,
and a million diamonds shone in the spray
of a waterfall's rainbow."
Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 30-May-2023

Comment from Wils

Exceptional

Your poem takes the reader on a journey through the development of faith, beginning with uneasiness and finally ending in trust in Him. I love this.
Geoff

 Comment Written 30-May-2023

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very beautiful and very well written poem you have penned for the faith contest. You broke it down into three times in your life. You used very good descriptive words and amazingly beautiful imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri

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 Comment Written 30-May-2023

Comment from Douglas Goff

Excellent

This is a positive uplifting piece of work.

I loved this line:
and a million diamonds shone in the spray
of a waterfall's rainbow.

Very well done.
D

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 Comment Written 30-May-2023

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reply by the author on 30-May-2023

Thanks for reviewing. I love nature so I'm pleased you thought this was a nice description.