Haiku ('midst miners' relics)
Golden trees in the diggings.20 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love this inventive Haiku that brings a little glinting magic from ancient history and you captured the scene perfectly here Lisa, good luck with the contest, an entertaining write, love Dolly x
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I love this inventive Haiku that brings a little glinting magic from ancient history and you captured the scene perfectly here Lisa, good luck with the contest, an entertaining write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-May-2023
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I like the alliteration in this poem as well as the internal rhyme in the last line. It's a clever Haiku and I hope you will win. I also like to write poetry to my own photos.
Well done and good luck.
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I like the alliteration in this poem as well as the internal rhyme in the last line. It's a clever Haiku and I hope you will win. I also like to write poetry to my own photos.
Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 29-May-2023
Comment from lyenochka
This is so cool! You have the logo of autumn plus the satori view of the gold in nature instead of the metal that humans value so much. I think this will do great in the contest!!
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This is so cool! You have the logo of autumn plus the satori view of the gold in nature instead of the metal that humans value so much. I think this will do great in the contest!!
Comment Written 28-May-2023
Comment from Michele Harber
I don't know which came first, the photo or the poem, but they're such a perfect match. I enjoyed your play on words with "gold in the hills." Good luck in the contest. FYI, I will be entering as well (we recently did Haiku in my poetry class), as soon as I can raise a few more dollars to stay posted for a couple of days. I was hoping to get something from my free verse poem (also thanks to my poetry class), but it totally tanked!
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I don't know which came first, the photo or the poem, but they're such a perfect match. I enjoyed your play on words with "gold in the hills." Good luck in the contest. FYI, I will be entering as well (we recently did Haiku in my poetry class), as soon as I can raise a few more dollars to stay posted for a couple of days. I was hoping to get something from my free verse poem (also thanks to my poetry class), but it totally tanked!
Comment Written 28-May-2023
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Just brilliant. The double meaning is perfect. Great contest entry.
Also what is perfect is when I first read it and understood the gold in them hills it made me shine.
Best of luck in the contest.
Best wishes
Mary
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Just brilliant. The double meaning is perfect. Great contest entry.
Also what is perfect is when I first read it and understood the gold in them hills it made me shine.
Best of luck in the contest.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 28-May-2023
Comment from Wendy G
Excellent one! Captures beauty of nature, speaks of history and former times, miners' aspirations, hopes and dreams, and offers a thought- provoking comment. Well done. Best wishes, this one is deserving of a win.
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Excellent one! Captures beauty of nature, speaks of history and former times, miners' aspirations, hopes and dreams, and offers a thought- provoking comment. Well done. Best wishes, this one is deserving of a win.
Comment Written 28-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thanks for your super review, Wendy! I like your comments as they show full understanding of my intentions.
Comment from Eternal Muse
This is a remarkable haiku.
The imagery and visuals are stunning.
Loved the sophisticated word choices and spirit.
The artwork blends in the theme very well. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a remarkable haiku.
The imagery and visuals are stunning.
Loved the sophisticated word choices and spirit.
The artwork blends in the theme very well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-May-2023
Comment from Douglas Goff
Ahhhh . . . the old double meaning ploy used with perfection and poetic skill. While this is short, it still reflects your talented artistry as a Master Poet.
Thank you for sharing!
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reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Ahhhh . . . the old double meaning ploy used with perfection and poetic skill. While this is short, it still reflects your talented artistry as a Master Poet.
Thank you for sharing!
D
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Comment Written 28-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you for this ploy to give me a big head with your praise. I appreciate your wonderful review.
Comment from royowen
It's amazing how a lot of these old gold mines actually sill contain gold, and in fact, modern mining methods can still extract them from these old diggings, so, you're written, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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It's amazing how a lot of these old gold mines actually sill contain gold, and in fact, modern mining methods can still extract them from these old diggings, so, you're written, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 28-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thanks for reviewing, Roy. It's also amazing how much gold the Chinese miners gained from abandoned mines with their hard work and tenacity. We have a modern gold extraction plant in our province and it is still doing very well... though our main gold rush years were in the 1860s.
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Same as Oz
Comment from LyndaS
Yikes! BRILLIANT !!!! This is excellent and you have captured that haunting picture beautifully. I kept looking at the picture and rereading this entry. If you don't win this I'll be pissed! Just awesome.
Good luck sista'!!!!
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Yikes! BRILLIANT !!!! This is excellent and you have captured that haunting picture beautifully. I kept looking at the picture and rereading this entry. If you don't win this I'll be pissed! Just awesome.
Good luck sista'!!!!
Comment Written 28-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thanks for the super review Lynda!! I have changed a line to read 'lustrous shine' in place of 'shine brightly' which I felt was a bit ordinary... even dull, haha.
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Great job, honey!
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Thanks for the reinforcement. xx