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Seasons of Change

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A collection of 30 poems in thirty days

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Comment from patcelaw
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This is another very wonderful poem that you have written for this particular time in your life. The pads of my life with dogs always been straight. I have managed to go places and do things that others have not been able to do. The one thing that was the balancing thing for me in my life was meeting and Mary a wonderful man who helped me to be the person that I am today. Patricia.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Patricia, our life mates, that are soul mates are rare gifts indeed.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
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I enjoy reading this rhyming poem about life and spirit to go forward. The rhyming scheme worked well except for the fifth stanza where you repeated the word "me". May I make a suggestion as follows?

whether this old crooked stick would forsake me ->
whether this stick would take me to the sea.

or change the last line to ->
And trusted this stick would never break my knee.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Jasmine Girl! Thanks a bunch!
reply by Jasmine Girl on 29-Apr-2023
    You have changed it. I'm flattered.
Comment from royowen
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I've enjoyed your journey, and although I understand the rigours and the pressure, I admire the journey and the determination you've given to stick to your goal of staying on task, and you have well done Jim, good job, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Thank you, sir.
reply by royowen on 29-Apr-2023
    Welcome
Comment from Sally Law
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I really enjoyed this one as I see life as a journey and one to be enjoyed and appreciated. A beautiful offering for the end of my reviewing day. My very best to you as always, and my best wishes for the book.
Blessings,
Sal xo

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Thanks much, Sally
Comment from lyenochka
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Your repetition of "crooked" made me think of Nash's line of "to love thy crooked neighbor with thy crooked self." And praise God for keeping us on His narrow path. I especially liked the strategy of "It spurred the spirit in me to bellow Praise." Sometimes in our darkest moments, it helps to just praise Him.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Helen, thanks much, and thanks for hosting this contest.
reply by lyenochka on 29-Apr-2023
    Thank YOU for joining us this year, Jim!
Comment from Ulla
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I liked this a lot, and a lot. Yes, life takes us on a path of wonders and adventures we may not have foreseen. Some can be troublesome, and a chore, others may be more fortunate. All best, Ulla:)))

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 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Ulla, thank you for you kind words.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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It sounds like you have walked many miles here and it has only been a month Jim, and you are almost at the finishing post of this marathon for April, you did well, love Dolly x

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 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Thanks Dolly, that's a wrap. Thanks for your steady reviews and support.
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 30-Apr-2023
    You are most welcome x