A Bitter Garden
Each flower grown from jealousy...29 total reviews
Comment from Carlos' girl
This is simply outstanding. Who is the author of this amazing poetry i wonder ? I cannot wait to find out. This poem is just superb. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2023
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This is simply outstanding. Who is the author of this amazing poetry i wonder ? I cannot wait to find out. This poem is just superb. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2023
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Thank you SO much! :)
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You are welcome
It was a pleasure to read
Comment from Kaiku
This is great. I will be sending this to my daughter as she is in the process of writing a script that deals with a 'serial killer' that preys on men who enter her greenhouse. A potted ending for most.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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This is great. I will be sending this to my daughter as she is in the process of writing a script that deals with a 'serial killer' that preys on men who enter her greenhouse. A potted ending for most.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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That is fantastic!! Thank you so much for your review and stars! Xo
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yep
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A magical and inventive story and this poem wins my vote and I hope you win the contest. You brought something different here and this is stand out poetry. The metre is uneven in places, but it does not detract from the magic of this poem. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2023
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A magical and inventive story and this poem wins my vote and I hope you win the contest. You brought something different here and this is stand out poetry. The metre is uneven in places, but it does not detract from the magic of this poem. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Dolly!! That means so much!
<3
Comment from Cherish Adams
This is excellent. Love the rhyme. Love that it's a story. Love it all, especially the last line. Great entry for the contest. I hope you do well. Cherish
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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This is excellent. Love the rhyme. Love that it's a story. Love it all, especially the last line. Great entry for the contest. I hope you do well. Cherish
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Cherish!!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely done poem nailed the prompt
love these lines
On Halloween, when spell has reason
She must wait till' planting season
Then the Witch will find it pleasing
When that Mister blooms in spring.
and the image
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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nicely done poem nailed the prompt
love these lines
On Halloween, when spell has reason
She must wait till' planting season
Then the Witch will find it pleasing
When that Mister blooms in spring.
and the image
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading this story in a poem. It has really good rhyme and rhythm. I love the presentation. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I really enjoyed reading this story in a poem. It has really good rhyme and rhythm. I love the presentation. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
I enjoyed this poem all the way through but am struggling to capture the full meaning and intent of the last stanza. I like the quick pace and the rhymes were unforced. You've created a fun poem.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I enjoyed this poem all the way through but am struggling to capture the full meaning and intent of the last stanza. I like the quick pace and the rhymes were unforced. You've created a fun poem.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you! The last stanza wraps it up by revealing the Witch's plan to cast the same spell on her sister's new husband, that she has on her boyfriends in the past. She turns them to seeds and plants them on Halloween night- and they bloom in her spring garden. Each flower, a trapped man. Oof, I may be a little twisted...
Comment from karenina
Wow. It's rare I find myself leaving sixes on contest entries. This is so very well done! Whoever you are, if this isn't seriously in the running for first place I'd eat my witches hat! (I've read it out loud twice now and it's actually FUN to recite!)
Best of luck!
Karenina
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Wow. It's rare I find myself leaving sixes on contest entries. This is so very well done! Whoever you are, if this isn't seriously in the running for first place I'd eat my witches hat! (I've read it out loud twice now and it's actually FUN to recite!)
Best of luck!
Karenina
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Karenina, thank you so much!! This was so much fun to write. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. <3
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Awesome!
Comment from Julie Lau
A very witchy, bewitching rhyme. A nicely woven story of witchy misdeeds. Pity twin sister kept losing her fellows, but it sounds like there was a good supply always popping up. Poetry very nicely done. Julie L
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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A very witchy, bewitching rhyme. A nicely woven story of witchy misdeeds. Pity twin sister kept losing her fellows, but it sounds like there was a good supply always popping up. Poetry very nicely done. Julie L
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Haha popping up like flowers! Thanks so much for your awesome review and comments! :)
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi,
This story in a poem show how jealousy can cause pain, but no stop love.
It seems the sister does get married despite the scariness of her sister bringing a Halloween feel to Spring.
Good luck in the contet.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Hi,
This story in a poem show how jealousy can cause pain, but no stop love.
It seems the sister does get married despite the scariness of her sister bringing a Halloween feel to Spring.
Good luck in the contet.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Joan! :)
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No problem.
Joan