Comment from Moonbeams Musings 55

Excellent

Upon reading this, I can sense the finality of what is conveyed by your words. Your drawing you chose of the old headstones and abstract coloring really brings the message home. Well written.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023

Thank you so much! And for taking the time read it and Offer your kind comments I thank you and i'm very appreciative. I hope you're having a great day!

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is an effective 1-6-1 with a chilling meaning and your unusual words make this post unique and good entry for the contest, i love this presentation, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023

Thank you Dolly that's not always I appreciate your comments. I'm always glad that you do like them. I am a greenhorn after all and you are quite experienced though get me into law thank you very much!

Comment from CrystieCookie999

Excellent

This is an interesting 1-6-1 poem. The title seemed to suggest more than one meaning. "Rung" as in a bell has sounded or rung, or the rung of a ladder, or a sound-alike for 'wrung' as in 'wrung out water from a mop.' I guess the word 'monopolized' is pretty close to lies and dies.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023

Yes you're exactly right! thank you so much you're so smart. Thank you very much hope you have a great night! Thank you for the review too very much. Thank you!

Comment from Julie Lau

Good

You have fulfilled the syllable requirement but one word worries me: has the heart concerned been rung like a bell, which is a bit hard to imagine, or wrung like a dishcloth, which is easier to conceive, the poor old heart being beset by lies which wring the life out of it.
All the best,
Julie Lau

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 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023

Thank you julie it would be rung out would be that correct analogy. Thank you so much for your review. I hope you have a great night and appreciate your time and effort chat at you soon. Thanks again!

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

Excellent, I really like your choice of rhyme words for this short poem, and the message is great, very well written and presented and best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023

Thank you again. I appreciate it very much and and you're redo. Your kind words always always well received thank you again have a great night!

Comment from jake cosmos aller

Excellent

nicely done 8 word poem about dealing with the lost of love, captures so much in so few words. I love this minimalist poetry exercises condensing everything into just a few words

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 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023

I do too I like it very much. Thank you so much for your comments and you're reviewing you're telling me I appreciate it why'd you like it? I hope you have a really good evening!