Dear Father
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Comment from karenina
Hi, Wendy! This is beautifully written. I could not help but follow the rhyme scheme throughout and thus this felt more like poetry than prose...but I don't see in the contest guidelines that prose is essential. Some "letters" to God have indeed been poetry over the many decades! From my reading, I think you could have aligned this as poetry and been well within the guidelines. Regardless, the content is what is important and you've written a spiritually honest piece that hit home...
I love your lines:
"But you're the One with power, and Your love can fill an ocean,
so please set my heart at rest and still my mind's commotion."
(I hope the committee notifies you early if they disagree with any part of this presentation!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Hi, Wendy! This is beautifully written. I could not help but follow the rhyme scheme throughout and thus this felt more like poetry than prose...but I don't see in the contest guidelines that prose is essential. Some "letters" to God have indeed been poetry over the many decades! From my reading, I think you could have aligned this as poetry and been well within the guidelines. Regardless, the content is what is important and you've written a spiritually honest piece that hit home...
I love your lines:
"But you're the One with power, and Your love can fill an ocean,
so please set my heart at rest and still my mind's commotion."
(I hope the committee notifies you early if they disagree with any part of this presentation!)
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Thank you Karenina. It was a poem, but I couldn't enter it in the poetry section, the contest put it in the prose formatting, so I edited it and made it prose. Now I have figured out how to align it, and adjust the line spacing and keep the lines at the right length, so now it's back in as poetry!! Lol. How much time I have spent fiddling around with it! Thank you for a lovely review, always appreciated. Hugs.
Wendy
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Awesome! It was awesome either way...but it looks so much more cohesive as a poem! (smile)
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Thank you! Thanks for looking again. You're wonderful.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is truly poetic but is poetic prose allowed in the contest? I agree with most you have to say I only wish you would have worded it in regular prose instead. Does it say Dear God contest is it right that you write this in a poetic style while the others write it as a letter to God? I might suggest asking Tom about this.
Jesse
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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This is truly poetic but is poetic prose allowed in the contest? I agree with most you have to say I only wish you would have worded it in regular prose instead. Does it say Dear God contest is it right that you write this in a poetic style while the others write it as a letter to God? I might suggest asking Tom about this.
Jesse
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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I wrote it as a poem but because the space was designed for prose it realigned the lines, and it was difficult to rearrange. The contest does not specify either poetry or prose or any other style. Poetic prose is not disallowed from such a general heading.
Thanks for reviewing, always appreciated.
Wendy
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Personally, I like writing poetic prose, but so many didn't like the mixture that I wasn't sure if it was allowed or not.
Glad you straightened this out for me!
Jesse
Comment from patcelaw
You have written your dear God letter in a very compelling way. I enjoyed listening to the computer is it read it to me. You have pointed out so many things that are wrong in this world but in the end, you give her a pricing and glory to God for his caring for us, and asked that those people who are causing the problems in this world, might come to know him as our Lord and Savior. nicely done Patricia.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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You have written your dear God letter in a very compelling way. I enjoyed listening to the computer is it read it to me. You have pointed out so many things that are wrong in this world but in the end, you give her a pricing and glory to God for his caring for us, and asked that those people who are causing the problems in this world, might come to know him as our Lord and Savior. nicely done Patricia.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much Patricia! I am so glad you enjoyed it.
Wendy
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Very interesting and moving prayer you have written. You're talking about things so prevalent in our world today and so right now it routes the soul and the soul knows truth when it hears it.
You are right....much is coming we will have to deal with these events as best we can.
Thank you for your submission! It is well written and leaves no doubt to it's purpose. Good luck and be well!
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Very interesting and moving prayer you have written. You're talking about things so prevalent in our world today and so right now it routes the soul and the soul knows truth when it hears it.
You are right....much is coming we will have to deal with these events as best we can.
Thank you for your submission! It is well written and leaves no doubt to it's purpose. Good luck and be well!
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much for reviewing. Do you have suggestions so I can improve it? Usually some suggestions are offered with a four star review. Thanks again.
Wendy
Comment from Aussie
Beautiful! Never written prose, I enjoyed your prose. Rhyming brings the lines together a little bit like my Looping. We need to bring folks to His presence, but we are told don't try to change their life path. Well said with heartfelt lines - He hears every thought. And best wishes in the contest. K xx
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Beautiful! Never written prose, I enjoyed your prose. Rhyming brings the lines together a little bit like my Looping. We need to bring folks to His presence, but we are told don't try to change their life path. Well said with heartfelt lines - He hears every thought. And best wishes in the contest. K xx
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thank you dear Kay. (I wrote it as a poem first, then had to adjust it for prose, as apparently it's a prose only contest. Lol) Thanks too for your good wishes.
Wendy
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Nup, doesn't say prose for the contest. Doesn't say anything except write to God??
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It mucked up all my lines. Anyway, it's done now, (and I don't have great expectations, but that's okay.)
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Darn. I just saw Paul's entry and he has put in a poem! And it's set out just fine. Now how did he do that?!
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Well, you should, I think it's beaut and very clever. K xx
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Thank you Kay. I have put it back as a poem, and fiddled around with the setting out, and voilą!
W
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice. It rings poetic. Did you first consider writing it as a poem?
You nailed the contest topic - most pressing concern. Being saved into God's grace is the most important thing, more important than our health, our safety, wars, or calamity. Good work.
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Very nice. It rings poetic. Did you first consider writing it as a poem?
You nailed the contest topic - most pressing concern. Being saved into God's grace is the most important thing, more important than our health, our safety, wars, or calamity. Good work.
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thank you Wayne. Yes, I went to great trouble to write it as a poem, because I thought either poetry or prose was acceptable, but when I entered it, it came up in the prose section, so I reformatted it, but left the rhyme in. A very encouraging review.
Wendy