Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is such a story of brutality against innocence and helplessness. The wolf so brilliantly characterises this enemy permanently at the door with nothing or no-one to intervene and offer protection. But the fight is on and only inner strength and fortitude can conquer this beast - "Explosive outrage finally destroyed trepidation." (wonderfully expressed). The imagery is all so powerful. Particularly liked "There is no purchase without foundation." reinforcing that vulnerability. If I had a 6er you'd have it. Well done. Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023

Thank you so much Debbie I appreciate your kind for you unfortunately. I am the girl in that poem however having worked through much of that and you'll express myself in the written word it helps peel The Onion and takes. Me power away. Thank you for your insight and you're wonderful kind of review. I greatly appreciate it. I hope you have a great day.!

reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 22-Apr-2023

I know you're the girl in the poem, Lea, and I think your skill in expressing this and your ability to fight back are both remarkable.

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023

Thank you Debbie, I appreciate your kind comments. Hope your day is grand!

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Oh, my. This is heart-wrenching. I'm bereft for you, the girl depicted in this brilliant poem. Yet, in the end, you've escaped the horrors of your past! It is said we grow stronger, where there are scars, after healing. I believe that.

This is great...

Karenina

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023

Thank you yes that 1 came from my soul and hard memories and then A way of letting it go by talking about it at the end of my pen metaphorically speaking. Thank you for your insight and your understandings appreciate!!

reply by karenina on 09-Mar-2023

Some of my works were born from much pain. They seem to mean the most to me. I so get it!

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is a scary write to be always threatened by the wolf behind the door and living in fear like will be terrifying for a child.

I just have one edit for you Lea, you mean (you are) here:

Large is the fist as all things are when (you're) five.

I enjoyed your disturbing sentiment here, love Dolly x

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 Comment Written 01-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023

Thank you Dolly I wonderful review very insightful and as usual nail on the head your instincts are always lead you the right way and with your talent it makes you a very good reviewer and I really appreciate your comments!!

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

I like the use of a wolf as a metaphor. The poem is something different from the average writing. I could feel the emotions behind every word. I wish you the best in the contest.

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 Comment Written 28-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023

Thank you so much for your review and your comments are valuable I appreciate them all thank you very much and I hope you're having a great day!