Ancient Art of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The Drift"A compilation of poems
15 total reviews
Comment from royowen
It's true, really and truly we own nothing, sooner or later we will lose it, naked we are born, and naked we will die, anything here is only on lease, we must give it back, and someone else reaps the harvest, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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It's true, really and truly we own nothing, sooner or later we will lose it, naked we are born, and naked we will die, anything here is only on lease, we must give it back, and someone else reaps the harvest, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thank you again Roy I always appreciate your words your comments here reviews. I thank you so much for it all. It is amazing I hope you have a wonderful day thank you again!
Comment from karenina
Traditionally, Haiku does not rhyme. It's a new age, and "traditional" Haiku counts, themes, and (why not?) rhyme is likely as accepted as any! I will say that you've written a powerful poem, the meaning of which was perfectly clear even without a word of the author's notes! I like that you increased the font size in your final line. (This is the joy of "Advanced Editor!")
Best of luck to you. I sense I'll be back to congratulate you on this one!
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Traditionally, Haiku does not rhyme. It's a new age, and "traditional" Haiku counts, themes, and (why not?) rhyme is likely as accepted as any! I will say that you've written a powerful poem, the meaning of which was perfectly clear even without a word of the author's notes! I like that you increased the font size in your final line. (This is the joy of "Advanced Editor!")
Best of luck to you. I sense I'll be back to congratulate you on this one!
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Putting those few words down for this going poop spoke to me and I knew as they came out there were certain words can do that to you. I'm glad you can see the meaning behind the words and I really appreciate that you like it so much and for your taking your afternoon to look at these. Items eternally grateful!
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I am getting used to the many changes in the old school way we were taught to write Haiku....
Haiku Master Basho said "Learn the rules, and then forget them"
Smile....
Comment from Brandon Clark
Very well crafted and expressed. My only suggestion would be to increase the font size. Otherwise I wouldn't change anything. I think if you increase the font you'll see more feedback and have a better chance in the competition.
Best of luck in the contest!
Brandon
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Very well crafted and expressed. My only suggestion would be to increase the font size. Otherwise I wouldn't change anything. I think if you increase the font you'll see more feedback and have a better chance in the competition.
Best of luck in the contest!
Brandon
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Thanks Brandon I keep trying that dirty thing I will try again Hey thank you for an awesome review and that you took the time to do it is always a privilege!! Have a great day!
Comment from JT traveller
Oh so deep and meaningful. Great word choice. Your lines flow together with such symmetry and connection. Just one stray thread and your whole story/life can untangle.
Great imagery. Intense and the message elevates your poetry.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Oh so deep and meaningful. Great word choice. Your lines flow together with such symmetry and connection. Just one stray thread and your whole story/life can untangle.
Great imagery. Intense and the message elevates your poetry.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Oh well such praise I'm deeply honored thank you very much. I'm so glad you appreciate it and understand it right off the hop!
Have a great night!
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I am having an amazing afternoon right now. Just taking a short break from a deeply intuitive conversation with my lovely husband.
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That sounds like an amazing afternoon with an amazing conversation and a lovely husband to boot you are very blessed Have a rockin! day lol
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Some people do lose everything in life for whatever reason, it could be a natural disaster or it could be foolish decisions or theft, we never know what the future holds and I am grateful every day for the life I lead, a poignant write, food for thought here, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Some people do lose everything in life for whatever reason, it could be a natural disaster or it could be foolish decisions or theft, we never know what the future holds and I am grateful every day for the life I lead, a poignant write, food for thought here, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Thank you Dolly for your kind words I sure you're like appreciate all of your sage advice and your comments and your wonderful statement You are a trooper have a great night!
