Shock
Horror story18 total reviews
Comment from damommy
That would certainly be surprising. I wonder if one would be afraid seeing themselves dead. Maybe it's like when someone can see themselves frorm above a surgical table. I did that once.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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That would certainly be surprising. I wonder if one would be afraid seeing themselves dead. Maybe it's like when someone can see themselves frorm above a surgical table. I did that once.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much
Comment from Mary Shifman
This was a shocking surprised. I do hope the narrator isn't doomed to relive that scene again and again like in "Groundhog Day." Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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This was a shocking surprised. I do hope the narrator isn't doomed to relive that scene again and again like in "Groundhog Day." Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much
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You are welcome.
Comment from LisaMay
This is an intriguing mystery, definitely a surprise. Working too many night shifts can distort reality perhaps, or else the guy has a twin brother who was coming to visit. Makes the reader think of possibilities.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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This is an intriguing mystery, definitely a surprise. Working too many night shifts can distort reality perhaps, or else the guy has a twin brother who was coming to visit. Makes the reader think of possibilities.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much Lisa May
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, you died and you had an outer body experience here, certainly a horror write with a surprising ending, I was entertained, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Oh my goodness, you died and you had an outer body experience here, certainly a horror write with a surprising ending, I was entertained, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Thanks Dolly. X
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi author, you've painted a scene and told a complete story in only 80 words. Well done. The ending had a huge twist, and I found it to be thought-provoking. Well chosen photo. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Hi author, you've painted a scene and told a complete story in only 80 words. Well done. The ending had a huge twist, and I found it to be thought-provoking. Well chosen photo. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Nicki Nance
You put this dreaded scene together in few words. I like that you did not start with an accident, and that established impact for the surprise by separating your last lines. Cleverly done.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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You put this dreaded scene together in few words. I like that you did not start with an accident, and that established impact for the surprise by separating your last lines. Cleverly done.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much Nicki.
Comment from royowen
I think that is one of the dreams that some folk have dreamt in the past, that they see somebody lying there dead, and upon looking more closely, discover there are looking at themselves, beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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I think that is one of the dreams that some folk have dreamt in the past, that they see somebody lying there dead, and upon looking more closely, discover there are looking at themselves, beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Thanks Roy. I love getting reviews from you. X
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Well done
Comment from Terry Broxson
That is a nice little twist for the story. I think it could do well in the contest, good luck. It was a surprise for your character and your reader, well done. Terry.
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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That is a nice little twist for the story. I think it could do well in the contest, good luck. It was a surprise for your character and your reader, well done. Terry.
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Many thanks Terry.