Ancient Art of Poetry
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Comment from Brandon Clark
This is very well done! Your message is universally relatable and your word choice with so few syllables was excellent!
Best of luck to you in the contest!
Brandon
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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This is very well done! Your message is universally relatable and your word choice with so few syllables was excellent!
Best of luck to you in the contest!
Brandon
Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Thank you Brandon for your kind review this is great! Mutually admired! Thx again!
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lea,
This sounds like either the mom lost her life because she was in such a hurry. Maybe a car accident. Or maybe the adult child was rushing around to much and lost a good relationship with her mother.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Hi Lea,
This sounds like either the mom lost her life because she was in such a hurry. Maybe a car accident. Or maybe the adult child was rushing around to much and lost a good relationship with her mother.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Thank you Joan for your review kind thoughts and well wishes it does sound like that. Yes mom has gone all right but still alive and she was the absentee parent. And one who couldn't be bothered and showed annoyance when her children came round her. IE my mother. Thanks again have a great day!
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You're welcome, Lea.
Have a great day too.
Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Guilt and shame make us do the oddest things in life Lea and we need to take care of the next generation to make the necessary improvements for our future. Mothers are so busy these days working and often children are neglected in this busy world, a poignant write Lea, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Guilt and shame make us do the oddest things in life Lea and we need to take care of the next generation to make the necessary improvements for our future. Mothers are so busy these days working and often children are neglected in this busy world, a poignant write Lea, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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No truer words have been spoken. We should have empathy instead of guilt Understanding instead of sham. And sorry as I find an action thing to say another to do.
Thank you Dolly!
Comment from JT traveller
A brave and beautifully composed piece of poetry. Thankyou for your author's notes. I too, find writing an emotional outlet. Toxic emotions serve no purpose. I would consider weaving your AN's into a free verse poem. They also resonate with me and, I expect, many others. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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A brave and beautifully composed piece of poetry. Thankyou for your author's notes. I too, find writing an emotional outlet. Toxic emotions serve no purpose. I would consider weaving your AN's into a free verse poem. They also resonate with me and, I expect, many others. Jacqueline
Comment Written 19-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Thank you Jacqueline for your wonderful review as always! Great suggestion. You are insightful anf concise with natural instincts based on your own given talent.
Thank you again look forward to exchanging more in the future!
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My pleasure as always. Jacqueline 😊
Comment from ACJ
The poem expresses a sense of urgency and conflict in just a few words. The use of the exclamation mark in the opening line effectively conveys a sense of urgency, and the following lines add depth to the situation. The final line "Child of Mothers gone...." provides a poignant and mysterious conclusion that leaves the reader wondering about the circumstances and what will happen next. Overall, the poem is short but impactful, leaving a lasting impression on the reader. Maybe could use a little more context, unless you plan to keep the mystery going. Well done!
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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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The poem expresses a sense of urgency and conflict in just a few words. The use of the exclamation mark in the opening line effectively conveys a sense of urgency, and the following lines add depth to the situation. The final line "Child of Mothers gone...." provides a poignant and mysterious conclusion that leaves the reader wondering about the circumstances and what will happen next. Overall, the poem is short but impactful, leaving a lasting impression on the reader. Maybe could use a little more context, unless you plan to keep the mystery going. Well done!
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much I'm glad you liked it was one of those haiku Pull up and I struggled with the words a little bit I want to comply with the syllable count for the contest as well as make it a good poem and judging from what you've told me and you're very gracious for you that has been accomplished I thank you again and I hope you have a wonderful evening!!
