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26 total reviews
Comment from Tommy Francesco
I really loved this poem. The use of concise phrases give it a sense of rhythm and flow, almost like a chant or a mantra. Overall, this poem feels like a meditation on the cyclical nature of life, from birth to death and everything in between. Great job!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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I really loved this poem. The use of concise phrases give it a sense of rhythm and flow, almost like a chant or a mantra. Overall, this poem feels like a meditation on the cyclical nature of life, from birth to death and everything in between. Great job!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your nice review Tommy it's very much appreciated and I love the way you say stuff in your reviews it's very cool!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Well, I liked the author's notes explanation better than the abstract poem for sure. I did not understand the piece and only got a glimpse of what the meanings were by reading the author's notes at the end. Thank you for sharing and may you be blessed with understanding and birth on another planet since the one we live on is all we have!
Jesse
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Well, I liked the author's notes explanation better than the abstract poem for sure. I did not understand the piece and only got a glimpse of what the meanings were by reading the author's notes at the end. Thank you for sharing and may you be blessed with understanding and birth on another planet since the one we live on is all we have!
Jesse
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Thank you Jesse for your kind words and insight I hope you are great and fabulous day!
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Enjoy your Sunday, Lea.
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U2!
Comment from susand3022
Hi Lea,
Could that be why they call it Hell on Earth? Is Hell really Earth?... is Earth really Hell? Could we all be sitting in Purgatory and not even know it? That's a crazy question, isn't it? Some souls surely suffer here more than others do.
An interesting and introspective poem, good luck in the contest!
Susan :)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Hi Lea,
Could that be why they call it Hell on Earth? Is Hell really Earth?... is Earth really Hell? Could we all be sitting in Purgatory and not even know it? That's a crazy question, isn't it? Some souls surely suffer here more than others do.
An interesting and introspective poem, good luck in the contest!
Susan :)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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I would say that Earth is the health we speak of Is this place for our souls to learn and perfect. The concept of original sin in having to pay for it is a bunch of c***. We're born to make mistakes we're supposed to make mistakes it's how we learn by being impacted by the events around that mistake. So yes how is the Earth we speak of there's a phrase in The Bible says yeah though I walk through The Valley of the shadow of death I shall fear no evil. It speaks of the h*** we go through in our corporeal life on this planet gotta say I'm with you when you're done come on home. Thanks and have a great day!
Comment from Ulla
I will admit that when I read this, I understood all the words, yet I didn't understand a thing. Until I read your notes. Then I think I understood what you were trying to say. It's definitely a no rules poem you've written. Good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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I will admit that when I read this, I understood all the words, yet I didn't understand a thing. Until I read your notes. Then I think I understood what you were trying to say. It's definitely a no rules poem you've written. Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your review and your comments are very helpful I appreciate it yes this is definitely an experimental kind of poem completely left field from how I normally write which is descriptive and full of words in this case I wanted to try something different to see how it would be received and that had a lot of very interesting and constructive comments all for the good thank you very much and I hope you have a great and fabulous day!
Comment from Brandon Clark
I really like the conceptualization on this one! Cleary describes the "bigger" moments of a life cycle for those fortunate enough to make the entire journey.
Very best of luck to you in the contest,
Brandon
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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I really like the conceptualization on this one! Cleary describes the "bigger" moments of a life cycle for those fortunate enough to make the entire journey.
Very best of luck to you in the contest,
Brandon
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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I'm so glad you like it! Thank you for the lovely reviews that you gave me! This was an offshoot for me a complete left field to what I normally write in my writing style I wanted to try something different just to see what would happand this is definitely different so thank you again and I hope you have a wonderful evening!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Oh my God, are we related? I have no idea where you got the urge to write this piece. It meanders like a dry river bed in the spring when flooded. Do I understand each line. Unhardly, however that said I enjoyed it. welcome to FanStory. WE had two family living 800 miles north of the border in B.C. recently moved to North Carolina. Both were Smith families. Brothers.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Oh my God, are we related? I have no idea where you got the urge to write this piece. It meanders like a dry river bed in the spring when flooded. Do I understand each line. Unhardly, however that said I enjoyed it. welcome to FanStory. WE had two family living 800 miles north of the border in B.C. recently moved to North Carolina. Both were Smith families. Brothers.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much Tom for your review I appreciate it and your words definitely spur me on A
and encourage me to write more please read the author's notes that go with this poem it will help you to understand what I wrote and could possibly impact you more than it has. This poem is an offshoot and completely a left side of my normal writing style I wanted to try something different just to see how to go over And how we come across I've never seen A poem in this type of style so I thought what the h*** Thank you so much again I hope you have an awesome evening!
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I reads your notes previously and again now. I understand, and stated so being we thought alike, at least for today,
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Thank you Tom that's great I appreciate and i look forward to chatting with you again hope you have a great day
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely done mediation on life, the universe and everything. Short, powerful lines with minimalist vocabulary packs quite a punch. I especially liked the line
Learn love hate choice
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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nicely done mediation on life, the universe and everything. Short, powerful lines with minimalist vocabulary packs quite a punch. I especially liked the line
Learn love hate choice
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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Hello Jake thank you so much for your kind review and your comments any comments constructive or otherwise are always valuable as a learning tool. I appreciate you taking the time to look at my poem and I hope you have a wonderful and fabulous evening thanks again!
Comment from harmony13
I found the words of this poem to be eccentric, descriptive and creative.
Thank you for the author's notes - I read the poem again and saw a
verbal consistency in each stanza. I liked how the author led the reader to the last line! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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I found the words of this poem to be eccentric, descriptive and creative.
Thank you for the author's notes - I read the poem again and saw a
verbal consistency in each stanza. I liked how the author led the reader to the last line! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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Thank you harmony for your wonderful review your words and your comments are very well received I appreciate you taking the time to do so And to peruse the meaning. Have a wonderful evening and thank you again!
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is an interesting presentation. I was a bit lost until I read the notes and went back to read a second time. Your lack of words presents a style of interpretation that could vary from reader to reader and sentence to sentence. It was intriguing and fun to try to decipher. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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This is an interesting presentation. I was a bit lost until I read the notes and went back to read a second time. Your lack of words presents a style of interpretation that could vary from reader to reader and sentence to sentence. It was intriguing and fun to try to decipher. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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Excellent John thank you so much I'm glad you liked it it was an experiment to see how well it would fly is it Definitely left field for my normal writing Style I like to have words contradict each other and smash each other around if that makes any sense. I thank you for your Comments and taking your time to review my poem thank you very much have a great evening!
Comment from royowen
It's not too bad really. I've lived eight decades now, and discovered that there's a balance to how life works, if there wasn't it could get pretty boring. Bea written my friend, an excellent post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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It's not too bad really. I've lived eight decades now, and discovered that there's a balance to how life works, if there wasn't it could get pretty boring. Bea written my friend, an excellent post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much I'm glad you found it interestit's definitely offshoot from the way I normally write an experiment just to see how it will go over I too have not seen this sort of writing style but I want to try something different to see how it went over and all the comments have received have been respectful and helpful including yours. Thank you again and I hope you have a wonderful and fabulous day!
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Well done
