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A Poetic Pause

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First Poems

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Comment from susand3022
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Hi Lea,
If you look back over time, it's simply the cycle of the planet that's coming. We have for sure sped up the cycle, I'm not saying that we haven't, and that what we've done and are doing, hasn't hurt the planet, and doesn't continue to. But... every so often, the planet enters that stage, the ice caps melt, and reform. Then, every so often we'll enter another ice age. It's just what happens. It's the way the planet rejuvenates itself. There's nothing anyone can really do about it. The last time it happened, Noah built an ark.
Susan :)

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
    Thank You Susan for your thoughts for your comments and for taking the time to review this and a detailed response is it also appreciated! Yes I believe it. The does go through many cycles and the Earth will survive this one too. My concern is if man does... It scares me to see the writing on the wall and all around. Once again thank you Susan for your sensitivity and for your insight and for taking the time to write to me and look at my work I hope you. Have a great and wonderful day thank you again!
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
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You say so much in so few words! The picture makes one feel very uneasy.
The analogy is certainly valid- we are 'consuming' the earth with its natural beauty and resources!

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
    Thank you Sarah for your time and comments I greatly appreciate it! I male all my pictures your welcome to look anytime.
    No thank you again very kind of you have a great day!
reply by Sarah Das Gupta on 03-Mar-2023
    All best wishes from UK!
Comment from Julcia
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Extraordinary poem concerning man against nature. Told in six profound words. Simple. Terrifying.
Inevitable? Great Artwork.
Great work, Lea.


Julcia


 Comment Written 03-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
    Thank you so much Julcia (awesome name) for your kind review and for the rating. I am very honored in pleased. Before you're trying to comment i'm also equally honored thank you have a great night!!
Comment from Wendy G
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A fine response in six words on the theme of climate change and the degradation of the planet. You chose a very suitable image to acompany your words. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
    Thank you Wendy. That's so kind of you appreciate you taking the time to read my poem and offering your thoughts again. Thanks very much and have a wonderful night!!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
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powerful and moving poem about the environment summed up with image of a black widow spider who destroys her mate after mating with them one time nice imagery

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
    Thank you jake! Appreciate you taking the time to look at my review. I'm still happy that you did! Thank you so much for your comments i'm glad you liked it and I hope you have a great evening!!
Comment from Janet Foor
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A profound phenomenon we see around us when Humans turn on the very thing that sustains us. Your analogy is clear and yet disturbing.

Very well done Lea.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
    Thank you Janet for taking the time to review this and your comments are appreciated also your insight magnificent. Thank you then hope you're having a great day!
Comment from royowen
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Actually I think there's a few in the insect or arachnids do it, the female does it while mating, starting with the head, yuck. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Typo : the black widow (concerns) her mate. Consumes?

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
    Yes you're right it should be consumed. I totally changed that thank you very much for the tip. And thank you very much for your great review. All your comments are very well appreciated I hope you have a great day!
reply by royowen on 02-Mar-2023
    Well done
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
    Thank you!😁
reply by royowen on 02-Mar-2023
    Welcome
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Excellent entry for the 6 Word Poetry contest. It's very sad but true. Humans are destroying the planet.

I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.

Good word count and connection between lines.

Goodluck

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
    Thank you gypsy for a kind of youth. , always happy to see if you're a name coming up. You are so very talented I hope you have a great and fabulous day!
Comment from Frederick Samson
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It's crazy how blind we are. Well actually, the majority should I say. Some of us can see clearly. Unfortunately it seems not enough of us. Quality poem, thanks.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
    Thank you so much for your review it's very much appreciated! And your insight as well thank you I hope you have a great day!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Your contest entry made a dire statement, Lea.
The picture was ominous. I understood what you
meant and it's a scary situation as we spiral down.
In your notes, auto correct must have changed some
words. I believe you meant consume rather than
concerns.
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing, Jan

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
    Thank you Jen for your review. I really appreciate your comments. Yes it is scary. I see what's happening to our world and the writing on the wall all over the place. It will only get worse. I think it's sad really, we made it ourselves. And I will make that correction. Thank you again and hope you have a great day!