Who Is He
It's the quesiotn we all must answer14 total reviews
Comment from Celyn
This is a well written poem that flows well throughout. The rhyming is good but I think you mean 'when the created went astray' not 'when astray' and the line 'I look; nature calls out to me' reads a little bit to long to me. I think something like 'I look and nature calls to me' might be a bit better but that is a personal opinion.
Good luck with the poem
Celyn
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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This is a well written poem that flows well throughout. The rhyming is good but I think you mean 'when the created went astray' not 'when astray' and the line 'I look; nature calls out to me' reads a little bit to long to me. I think something like 'I look and nature calls to me' might be a bit better but that is a personal opinion.
Good luck with the poem
Celyn
Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thank you,, Ceryn. I took both the fix and the suggesiton. :)
I appreciate your honest review and feedback.
Many blessings,
Deb
Comment from Rachel Jamerson1
Your observations cover a lot in your poem. You not only tell the story of the creator, but you also identified the way to Him. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us.
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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Your observations cover a lot in your poem. You not only tell the story of the creator, but you also identified the way to Him. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us.
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Comment Written 06-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading and taking the itme to comment, Rachel. I appreciate both.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Michele Harber
This is beautifully written -- full of faith and full of wonder at the power of the Almighty.
Faith and love shine through all your words, and the rhymes you've chosen work well.
The image you use is beautiful, and so perfectly complements your words, and your chosen font fits nicely with the flow of the poem.
Just one very minor proofing point: I think you meant to skip a space after "confirming my belief."
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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This is beautifully written -- full of faith and full of wonder at the power of the Almighty.
Faith and love shine through all your words, and the rhymes you've chosen work well.
The image you use is beautiful, and so perfectly complements your words, and your chosen font fits nicely with the flow of the poem.
Just one very minor proofing point: I think you meant to skip a space after "confirming my belief."
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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You are right! I fixed the spacing issue and so appreciate your kind words. It makes me so happy that my love for God was evident in this work.
I created the picture after I wrote that poem (and probably took too long doing it. lol) I always worry about presentation, so your affirmation of that is also truly appreciated.
Blessings,
Deb
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Not just your love, but your respect and awe were evident.
I didn't know you did the artwork yourself. It's absolutely lovely. I knew you were a talented verbal artist, and it's wonderful to discover you're an equally talented visual artist.
I'm glad I was able to help you with that minor correction.
Comment from Carol Clark2
Lovely poem, Deb. I like that you've gone from creation to redemption in this Faith poem for the contest. The presentation is beautiful. I especially like the final stanza. (reconscile -- spelling?) You've included great Scriptures. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings. Carol
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Lovely poem, Deb. I like that you've gone from creation to redemption in this Faith poem for the contest. The presentation is beautiful. I especially like the final stanza. (reconscile -- spelling?) You've included great Scriptures. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings. Carol
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Oh, man! Spelling... yuck. lol. I always tease that the guy who invented spell check did it just for my dad, but the truth is... :) Sometimes my fingers fun away without my brain. Shame, shame, shame...
I appreciate your catch and your comments.
Blessings,l
Deb
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Sometimes the editor in my brain forgets I've retired! Lol. Carol