Death By Murder
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Death By Murder - Chap 32"A jewel heist, rival gangs and a cold case.
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Comment from Ric Myworld
I'd probably tell chief to mind his own damn business, but I don't know how well that would go for keeping a job. Of course, I've never been the type to work for anyone else anyway. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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I'd probably tell chief to mind his own damn business, but I don't know how well that would go for keeping a job. Of course, I've never been the type to work for anyone else anyway. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my chapter. I do appreciate all your support.
Apologies again to all my friends...The 2023 Train barrelled into the New Year filled with an army of stress and sadness for our family again. My daughter's father-in-law's pacemaker stopped, started, stopped, and restarted, and he is presently in Hospice. My son-in-law's stepfather caught Covid on Christmas and is currently still in the ICU with little knowledge of who his family is. My granddaughter attempted the unthinkable and was admitted to a Chicago Juvenile Psych hospital, and the father of my great-granddaughters flipped out and was also involuntarily committed. I couldn't write a story like this and think people would believe it.... unfortunately it's true. And then I have been helping empty my dear cousin's home since her passing. Life is swinging sledgehammers, and I am praying I don't get hit by one of them. My apologies for burdening you with my troubles, but I wanted everyone to know why I sometimes seem to disappear. My head is above water ...just trying to keep everyone else together as well. Sending hugs to everyone who needs one!!!!
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Carol, my dear, I'm sorry to learn you are having such hard times. The cycles of life can be most unbearable. I won't ramble with useless words, but please know you are in my thoughts and I'll be wishing you the best! Ric
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this update with us. I enjoyed reading. The scene is being set for some interesting goings on. I can't wait for more.
It's a very small town, and we're talking about to homegrown boys. (about two homegrown boys)
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you for sharing this update with us. I enjoyed reading. The scene is being set for some interesting goings on. I can't wait for more.
It's a very small town, and we're talking about to homegrown boys. (about two homegrown boys)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my chapter. I do appreciate all your support.
Apologies again to all my friends...The 2023 Train barrelled into the New Year filled with an army of stress and sadness for our family again. My daughter's father-in-law's pacemaker stopped, started, stopped, and restarted, and he is presently in Hospice. My son-in-law's stepfather caught Covid on Christmas and is currently still in the ICU with little knowledge of who his family is. My granddaughter attempted the unthinkable and was admitted to a Chicago Juvenile Psych hospital, and the father of my great-granddaughters flipped out and was also involuntarily committed. I couldn't write a story like this and think people would believe it.... unfortunately it's true. And then I have been helping empty my dear cousin's home since her passing. Life is swinging sledgehammers, and I am praying I don't get hit by one of them. My apologies for burdening you with my troubles, but I wanted everyone to know why I sometimes seem to disappear. My head is above water ...just trying to keep everyone else together as well. Sending hugs to everyone who needs one!!!!
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. There is one tiny error," to (two) homegrown boys." You moved the story along nicely. I look forward to the next chapter. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. There is one tiny error," to (two) homegrown boys." You moved the story along nicely. I look forward to the next chapter. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my chapter. I do appreciate all your support.
Apologies again to all my friends...The 2023 Train barrelled into the New Year filled with an army of stress and sadness for our family again. My daughter's father-in-law's pacemaker stopped, started, stopped, and restarted, and he is presently in Hospice. My son-in-law's stepfather caught Covid on Christmas and is currently still in the ICU with little knowledge of who his family is. My granddaughter attempted the unthinkable and was admitted to a Chicago Juvenile Psych hospital, and the father of my great-granddaughters flipped out and was also involuntarily committed. I couldn't write a story like this and think people would believe it.... unfortunately it's true. And then I have been helping empty my dear cousin's home since her passing. Life is swinging sledgehammers, and I am praying I don't get hit by one of them. My apologies for burdening you with my troubles, but I wanted everyone to know why I sometimes seem to disappear. My head is above water ...just trying to keep everyone else together as well. Sending hugs to everyone who needs one!!!!
Comment from John Ciarmello
The trail has just gotten a bit hotter for the detectives. It was a brilliant move to get Terry out of the picture. This is another great chapter, Carol. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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The trail has just gotten a bit hotter for the detectives. It was a brilliant move to get Terry out of the picture. This is another great chapter, Carol. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my chapter. I do appreciate all your support.
Apologies again to all my friends...The 2023 Train barrelled into the New Year filled with an army of stress and sadness for our family again. My daughter's father-in-law's pacemaker stopped, started, stopped, and restarted, and he is presently in Hospice. My son-in-law's stepfather caught Covid on Christmas and is currently still in the ICU with little knowledge of who his family is. My granddaughter attempted the unthinkable and was admitted to a Chicago Juvenile Psych hospital, and the father of my great-granddaughters flipped out and was also involuntarily committed. I couldn't write a story like this and think people would believe it.... unfortunately it's true. And then I have been helping empty my dear cousin's home since her passing. Life is swinging sledgehammers, and I am praying I don't get hit by one of them. My apologies for burdening you with my troubles, but I wanted everyone to know why I sometimes seem to disappear. My head is above water ...just trying to keep everyone else together as well. Sending hugs to everyone who needs one!!!!
Comment from dmt1967
"Snoring! I do not snore." (Emmy stuck her tongue out at Hank.) You do not have to use her or his name here. The reader can assume it's 'Hank' as they are the only people in the car. (She stuck her tongue out.)
(Hank laughed and kept his eyes on the road, knowing a bright pink flush was creeping across her cheeks.) This is very telling, in my opinion. Maybe... (Out of the corner of his eye Hank saw a bright pink flush creep across her cheek and chuckled.)
(Hank couldn't contain his laughter, especially when she pushed her lower lip out further.) This seems very jerky, in my opinion. Try... (Emmy's lower lip protruded even further and Hank burst out laughing.)
"Understood. Send me (our destination,) and I'll fill Hank in on the details." (the address) otherwise it sounds like they do not know there own destination as in, where they were going before the call.
This is a good chapter and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing and have a nice day.
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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"Snoring! I do not snore." (Emmy stuck her tongue out at Hank.) You do not have to use her or his name here. The reader can assume it's 'Hank' as they are the only people in the car. (She stuck her tongue out.)
(Hank laughed and kept his eyes on the road, knowing a bright pink flush was creeping across her cheeks.) This is very telling, in my opinion. Maybe... (Out of the corner of his eye Hank saw a bright pink flush creep across her cheek and chuckled.)
(Hank couldn't contain his laughter, especially when she pushed her lower lip out further.) This seems very jerky, in my opinion. Try... (Emmy's lower lip protruded even further and Hank burst out laughing.)
"Understood. Send me (our destination,) and I'll fill Hank in on the details." (the address) otherwise it sounds like they do not know there own destination as in, where they were going before the call.
This is a good chapter and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing and have a nice day.
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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thank you for your support!
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A good contrast in this chapter between the banter of Hank and Emma and the serious business they are being asked to investigate! Dialogue is authentic and used to carry the narrative forward!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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A good contrast in this chapter between the banter of Hank and Emma and the serious business they are being asked to investigate! Dialogue is authentic and used to carry the narrative forward!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my chapter. I do appreciate all your support.
Apologies again to all my friends...The 2023 Train barrelled into the New Year filled with an army of stress and sadness for our family again. My daughter's father-in-law's pacemaker stopped, started, stopped, and restarted, and he is presently in Hospice. My son-in-law's stepfather caught Covid on Christmas and is currently still in the ICU with little knowledge of who his family is. My granddaughter attempted the unthinkable and was admitted to a Chicago Juvenile Psych hospital, and the father of my great-granddaughters flipped out and was also involuntarily committed. I couldn't write a story like this and think people would believe it.... unfortunately it's true. And then I have been helping empty my dear cousin's home since her passing. Life is swinging sledgehammers, and I am praying I don't get hit by one of them. My apologies for burdening you with my troubles, but I wanted everyone to know why I sometimes seem to disappear. My head is above water ...just trying to keep everyone else together as well. Sending hugs to everyone who needs one!!!!
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Very sorry to hear your dreadful new year. Thinking of you and hoping things can only get better!
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your thoughts.
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Thinks must get better x
Comment from Ricky1024
This chapter in your book entitled, "Whodunit?"
Yes, was done very right. Rich in Theme and Imagery.
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As it flowed well and read well with no Grammar issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and have a Blessed New Year.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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This chapter in your book entitled, "Whodunit?"
Yes, was done very right. Rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
As it flowed well and read well with no Grammar issues.
...
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and have a Blessed New Year.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my chapter. I do appreciate all your support.
Apologies again to all my friends...The 2023 Train barrelled into the New Year filled with an army of stress and sadness for our family again. My daughter's father-in-law's pacemaker stopped, started, stopped, and restarted, and he is presently in Hospice. My son-in-law's stepfather caught Covid on Christmas and is currently still in the ICU with little knowledge of who his family is. My granddaughter attempted the unthinkable and was admitted to a Chicago Juvenile Psych hospital, and the father of my great-granddaughters flipped out and was also involuntarily committed. I couldn't write a story like this and think people would believe it.... unfortunately it's true. And then I have been helping empty my dear cousin's home since her passing. Life is swinging sledgehammers, and I am praying I don't get hit by one of them. My apologies for burdening you with my troubles, but I wanted everyone to know why I sometimes seem to disappear. My head is above water ...just trying to keep everyone else together as well. Sending hugs to everyone who needs one!!!!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I wonder if they will find out that Crissy's dog Brandi has been shot. That would really stir things up. Poor Emmy, it's not nice being teased like that, but what can you say when it's your boss who's doing the teasing? Lol. I'm sure she'll get over it once she's had a gulp of her coffee!!!! This was a nice continuation, bringing in more things for them to probe into. Well done, my friend. I always look in my messages to see if you've posted, it's a lovely way to begin my day. Love and hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xx
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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I wonder if they will find out that Crissy's dog Brandi has been shot. That would really stir things up. Poor Emmy, it's not nice being teased like that, but what can you say when it's your boss who's doing the teasing? Lol. I'm sure she'll get over it once she's had a gulp of her coffee!!!! This was a nice continuation, bringing in more things for them to probe into. Well done, my friend. I always look in my messages to see if you've posted, it's a lovely way to begin my day. Love and hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my chapter. I do appreciate all your support.
Apologies again to all my friends...The 2023 Train barrelled into the New Year filled with an army of stress and sadness for our family again. My daughter's father-in-law's pacemaker stopped, started, stopped, and restarted, and he is presently in Hospice. My son-in-law's stepfather caught Covid on Christmas and is currently still in the ICU with little knowledge of who his family is. My granddaughter attempted the unthinkable and was admitted to a Chicago Juvenile Psych hospital, and the father of my great-granddaughters flipped out and was also involuntarily committed. I couldn't write a story like this and think people would believe it.... unfortunately it's true. And then I have been helping empty my dear cousin's home since her passing. Life is swinging sledgehammers, and I am praying I don't get hit by one of them. My apologies for burdening you with my troubles, but I wanted everyone to know why I sometimes seem to disappear. My head is above water ...just trying to keep everyone else together as well. Sending hugs to everyone who needs one!!!!
